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alizep

Pt10. The Three Words That Count

Jan 11, 2009 23:42

Continued from: An Explanation if You Please

Mina sat on the plush couch clad in a pair of light gray sweats, a pillow held tightly in front of her. Across from her sat Kunzite, his large frame filling the stylish beige chair. Neither had spoken very many words, but then again they had become accustomed to these prolonged silences.

She hadn’t even ( Read more... )

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lovelylytton January 12 2009, 18:49:03 UTC

She had been everything to him back then. She was his happiness and his humanity

How beautiful is that? You have such a great way with words, it's impressive.

alizep January 12 2009, 21:13:17 UTC

Thank you!

sugarcross January 13 2009, 20:09:22 UTC

Finally, the concluding part! I was sort of expecting more Motoki-Kunzite interaction but this was a perfect ending all the same. Loved how full of hope and possibilities the ending is. :)

alizep January 13 2009, 20:36:12 UTC

*Ducks head in shame*

I've decided that I'm going to rewrite and repost this chapter. My writer's block got the best of me and so I put out this version that really is lacking on the Motoki/Kunzite-ness.

I'll reply to your comment when the real (note: non-half-assed version ^_^;) is posted.

I'm glad that you liked the ending part though - I don't think I'm going to change that. I don't want to tell the characters what they're going to do, but I do like that they can either choose to start over or go their own ways. With two life-times under their belts, they have a lot to think about!

On a side note - it's nice to hear from you again after so long. :)

alizep January 14 2009, 02:32:08 UTC

Reposted! Hope to hear from you again on this.

sugarcross January 14 2009, 11:18:27 UTC

This is much better with the expanded details! It actually made me want to side with Motoki, except I know he doesn't make an attractive couple with Minako.

The thought of the young arcade owner assaulting the lead Shitennou, second in command to the Prince of Earth, and the leader of Earth’s armies did have a certain comical ring to it.

Yes it's comical somehow! Imagine the look on poor Motoki when the coronation occurs :P

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arabianred April 5 2009, 03:10:54 UTC

Whew, just ran through all parts and I have to tell you, I couldn't stop! I really love how Kunzite and Minako have to really work at their relationship, and how it's not all picture perfect from the get go. My heart really goes out to Motoki, though, the poor guy!

You really have a way with words, you know? Will there be a Part 11??

alizep April 8 2009, 03:34:28 UTC

I really love how Kunzite and Minako have to really work at their relationship, and how it's not all picture perfect from the get go.
They can both be so stubborn over things even when sometimes there is no reason to be. But in the end they were both trying to do the right thing even when it turned out to be the wrong thing.

My heart really goes out to Motoki, though, the poor guy!

I felt bad for Motoki too. I struggle with having to break his heart. Although it had to happen....

Will there be a Part 11??
Ah...well...I'm not sure. It's on my list of fics to circle back to though.