A Woman Undone: Part 60/?

[whatisayouth]

Hi Everybody!  So after the various death threats, "NOOOOO's!", "OMG's", and the like, I figured I'd better get to it and write the next update.  However, my get to it-ness wasn't really kicking into gear, which is why this part took a bit longer to post.  I think it's an interesting part - a lot going on - so I hope you enjoy it.  I hope everyone

Comments

[rebelsom]

Up until the end I was actually starting to feel a little bit sorry for Richard. Don't ever do that to me again lol.

Thank you for putting my perspective of him back in place.

[whatisayouth]

Yeah, I couldn't exactly leave it with everyone feeling sorry for him. I toyed with the idea for a few minutes, but it just didn't fit in the end, you know? I thought it would be nice to show a more "human" side of him, but then to quickly remind everyone that he's really just an ass.

Thank you for reading and for commenting.

[huntkitty]

olivia needs punch him when they were standing toe to toe. got scare in the beginning when he mention them being together

[whatisayouth]

That would have been a fun scene to write/read about - Olivia punching him square in the jaw...but alas, she had to demonstrate more control than that no matter how good it would have felt.

[huntkitty]

yea it would've been funny. hope next one is soon. can't wait to see alex is reaction when olivia tells her

[whatisayouth]

Yeah, that's definitely gonna be in the next update. And what exactly is Olivia going to tell her, you know I what I mean?

[kazza1269]

That was close I thought that Liv was caught with her hands in the cookie jar. Great update sweetie. Totally loving it.

[whatisayouth]

I guess the ultimate question is: Does he know? Glad you're loving it.

[bondozer]

Oooooh!! Fuckety-fuck!
One minute I'm thinking phew, it was all in Olivia's imagination, HIM knowing about her and Alex, but then at the end I'm thinking, shit DOES he know?
''You spin me right round, baby, right round, like a record, baby, right round, round round'' (Dead or Alive) and now I'm all dizzy!!!!! Haha!!
You are sooooo good at this.
AND I was starting to feel sorry for Richard, just a little bit, until, WHAM, you brought me to my senses and now I just feel sorry that he EXISTS, hahaha!!!
This was a really, really good chapter. I enjoyed how you got Olivia around some of the more awkward questions and I especially loved the ''She's not a piece of property, Richard'' from Olivia. He just can't help himself, can he? Ewwwwww, get your dirty little mitts off of her, Ditch-water Dick!!
I feel like I've been given a long cool drink, after the weekends dry spell, with this chapter.
Thankyou, sweetie.
A whole lotta love from, XXXJoolsXXX

[whatisayouth]

Fuckety Fuck, eh? LOL...That made me smile when I read that. I kind of left things open to interpretation, didn't I? With the whole "does he or doesn't he know" thing. I love the song you referenced. Perfect for this part with all the spins I've put on things...lol. I'm glad to hear that you started to feel sorry for Richard in the beginning because that's what I was going for. I wanted to add a humanistic element to his character but then completely throw you off and make you remember that he's still a "ditch-water dick", as you called him, which is perfect for him by the way.

So I'm a cool long drink, hey baby? Glad to have refreshed you! Thank you for commenting so wonderfully, sweetie.

Lots of love to you too!

[bondozer]

Yeah, I'm certainly refreshed now!!
I thought I was going to die of thirst!!
Anyways, what on earth are you doing up at this time of night? It's 11am here, so it must be around 3am where you are. Or is something other than this story keeping you up? Hahaha!!!
XXXJoolsXXX

[whatisayouth]

You can drink me anytime, baby...lol.
Yeah, it was about 3 am when I was answering the first few comments. I wish it was something other than my story keeping me up...lol. Insomnia is a bitch! Especially today when I have two midterms to take. Oh well, maybe I'll be high from my lack of sleep and ace them. Either that or I'll pass out and hand in a drooled on, blank test. LOL.

[cabotfan]

You almost got me there with the first two lines. Luckily I proceeded to finish the entire thing...phew!!
Hmm, now he's also giving me the creeps. Ewww! And the nerve to ask Olivia to call Robin just so she won't confuse Alex further. Ass****.

[whatisayouth]

Yeah, good thing you finished the whole part otherwise you might have been tempted to feel sorry for him...lol. But now, as I hoped, he just gives you the creeps. There's just something about him that's ugh ugh UGH!!! Bastard...lol!

Thank you for reading, love!