Ascension Part 2

[alanna_smithee]

Title: Ascension Part 2
Fandom: Blood Ties
Category: Okay, it’s a little bit more slashy now (Mike/Henry); TVverse
Rating: R? M? Sorry, I don’t much care about ratings. It’s nothing explicit, but I’d say the subject matter itself might be offensive to some people, I guess.
Spoilers: Deep Dark.
Word count: 2700
Disclaimer: Not mine. Neither

Comments

[deepest_dark]

Reading this makes me feel like a voyeur,and i love their talking....it's simply wonderful!

[hermyam]

lol - totally agree about being a voyeur. Love this story soooo much. Please keep going.

[alanna_smithee]

Thank you very much! :)

[alanna_smithee]

Well, I always feel like a voyeur writing, so that's probably the reason, lol. Thank you!

[phantomminuet]

Wow. That was verra hot. I love extended necking scenes. But, really...who doesn't? ;-) The best part, though, was the conversation between kisses and strokes, expecially Mike's concern that the St. Andrew's cross would upset Henry, and Henry telling Mike that he thought he was a nice person. :-)

Just one teeny beta recommendation. You used "save" a couple of times when you meant "safe".

[alanna_smithee]

Me too. I'm also a total sucker for UST. Thanks for reviewing and for catching my mistakes! I'm way too impatiant to use a betareader, so I'm really thankful, when people point mistakes out.

[teresab313]

“I am a vampire. I’m already kinky by myself, I don’t need any props.” Just loved this!
Whew! Is it getting hot in here? Two hot guys making out, what more can we ask for? Interesting how both guys were so off-base about the other in relation to Vicki.
More, please!

[alanna_smithee]

Lol, that line seems to be popular.
That's probably because Vicki strung them both along for so long and just couldn't decide.
Thank you!

[rubyport]

This is lovely! I am really enjoying the interplay between them. I love a playful Henry.

Since you seem open to some corrections, you have a mild case of "mad comma disease." You've got several commas in there that could be removed to improve the flow a bit. If you want some help with it, just email me.

[alanna_smithee]

Thank you! :)

Lol, that's because I'm German. There are a lot more comas in German. English commas mystify me. I already keep taking out commas that Word says are wrong all the time. But I guess, it doesn't catch all of them. I'd love some help. But I don't know, how much I'll be online in the next few days / weeks. I might get back to you. Thanks!

[aislingde]

That's hot.

I really like this scene. The talk about Vicki, the making out and the neck thing.

I can understand that Mike hesitates to allow Henry to bite him.

He must have nightmares...

[alanna_smithee]

Thank you very much! :)