Broken- A tale of fairness and maybes

[adrenalineshots]

It was mesmerizing to watch, the way his mouth said one thing and his expressive eyes said the exact opposite words. Words like ‘stay’ and ‘hold me’ and ‘I’m scared’, normal words, expected words that I somehow knew he would never say, not because he was too proud to say them, but because he wasn’t used to them.

Comments

[katriel1987]

[adrenalineshots]

Thank you! I really need someone to look at this and tell me where the mistakes are, because no matter how many times I read the thing, there's always one more mistake that escapes. Could you give it a look? Thanks!

[katriel1987]

[arrenall]

I really liked this. Sad and sweet and a great OC. Being a nurse, I could relate to her.

[adrenalineshots]

Thanks! Glad you could relate. I chose not to put a name to her profession just so more could id themselves with her. Glad it worked :)

[labseraph]

What a beautiful view of the boys! I love that the observer had some things right and some not so but it is always refreshing to see them from another perspective.

Would you mind sharing it at this community?

http://community.livejournal.com/spn_outsidepov/

Thank you so much for this lovely fic.

[adrenalineshots]

Ah, cool! I had no idea that there was a community just for this sort of thing. I'd love to post it there. Thank you!

[tigriswolf]

Aww, lovely.

[adrenalineshots]

Thank you ;)

[a_phoenixdragon]

Wow...

I LOVED this - this was so...so REAL...

Thank you!

*hugs*

[adrenalineshots]

Thank you!

*Hugs back*