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I Call The Shots - chapter 2

Feb 03, 2011 03:44

Title: I Call The Shots - Chapter 2
Pairing: Onew/Taemin
Length: 5865
Genre: Romantic Smut/M/s
Rating: NC17
Summary: After the Night of the Whip, things are strained between Taemin and Jinki.(Established Relationship)
A/N Because I didn't want to sound like an even bigger pervette than I actually am, I have aged Taemin up in this fic so that he's a ( Read more... )

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Comments 34

undeniablysarah February 4 2011, 03:28:39 UTC

This was just.... omg

kinky!jinki I can't even, i can't think.... just... -passes out-

Taemin is fucking general MY GOSH! Why so hot bb~

This was great because it had a plot *somewhat* and it was very emotional, I liked this very much (and the 1st one too) I hope this will get a continuation because i feel like there is sooo much more that needs to be said.

this could be a whole kink series!!! DO IT!

Wonderful work this killed me

addicterated February 4 2011, 17:50:55 UTC

LOL, everything I write for these two almost turns into a series. For My Lose. Glad you liked it though <3

addicterated March 3 2011, 01:39:21 UTC

updated - http://addicterated.livejournal.com/79262.html

evilvalenstrife February 4 2011, 08:20:35 UTC

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That... ^^ is what you made me do in addition to spewing crumbs into the depths of my keyboard. Not that I'm complaining thought! Seriously though, that deserves a GEEzus!!! I can't even formulate the words appropriate for such a wonder as this!!! There shall be more and when you do make more, please do let me know. It may take a while because of my internet situation, but I'll be there!

addicterated February 4 2011, 17:51:56 UTC

I will do everything I can to let you know, I haven't been feeling well and I forgot to spam everyone with updates as per usual. You have been missed btw *hugs*

I'm glad you enjoyed also. :)

evilvalenstrife February 4 2011, 20:34:54 UTC

Yay! You haven't?!!! Have you been getting rest? You've got to take care of yourself in the winter!!
Awww!!! *hugs*
I am lovin' the icon BTW!!!

addicterated March 3 2011, 01:39:31 UTC

updated - http://addicterated.livejournal.com/79262.html

wynnetimate February 4 2011, 15:19:19 UTC

(Just a warning: this comment comes to you under the influence of prescription drugs! I cannot operate heavy machinery or apparently talk anything like a normal human being!)

I read this in the morning.

And then I read it again before bed (and re-read the first part).

And now it is the next day, I am sitting in class (having spent a boring lecture re-reading this and also House of Eros -- your OnTae stories are fucking sexy), and only now do I feel functional enough to even think about what this story does to me.

Awkward question that you don't need to answer and so I am not going to phrase it like a question: I wonder if you have experience with D/s irl. Because... holy fuck, you know exactly what buttons to push.

I'm going to organize this comment because I am in class and that makes me want to be organized. Sub-headings!

Three quotes (really, I'd quote the whole thing but I limited myself to three):

He spins around and stalks closer to Jinki. The younger man is definitely fuming at this point. "I wasn't flinching away, you ( ... )

addicterated February 4 2011, 18:07:35 UTC

I love how Taemin is so flustered he can't properly express, and him calling Jinki a "big sexy idiot" is just adorable.

I like to have some comic relief in there and some poignancy and to me this seemed like his natural reaction. Kind of pissy and flustered at the same time :D

"It's not...giving you orders and tying you up and...making you beg me and...if you knew what goes on inside my head sometimes - " Jinki bites his lip and tears his eyes away from Taemin's face. "I want to do the most...perverse things to you. With you," he whispers finally.Jinki at this point is not completely okay with the stuff going on in his own mind with this. He's come around to the belief that it's natural to some extent but he's not entirely okay with it, for himself so naturally he's assuming that Taemin's going to be even less okay about it. LOL. Little does he know, Taemin may be the youngest and somewhat innocent but he's not exactly a damsel in distress ( ... )

addicterated March 3 2011, 01:39:48 UTC

updated - http://addicterated.livejournal.com/79262.html

jishu February 5 2011, 16:43:53 UTC

*nosebleed* This is just so hot~!!! I read the "night of the whip" too though I can't remember if I commented on it because I'm not in my right mind right now~ so... just tell you that I'm putting this and the previous chap in my "mem" and I hope you'll write the next chapter soon!!!

addicterated March 3 2011, 01:40:03 UTC

updated - http://addicterated.livejournal.com/79262.html

acornmama April 15 2011, 05:38:06 UTC

That was ... skin shivering good. I mean really, its the way you draw them in this situation, figuring out what they are going through and working it out. Misunderstandings and then clearing up those, the sheer honesty and the amount of love between them is just awesome.