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Super Junior (Hankyung/Hyukjae, with peripheral Heechul/Donghae/Kibum(/Eeteuk))
2,352 words. PG-13. Third person.
( Hyukjae looks at his paper, and ignores the slide of Hankyung’s vowels and they way they sit in the back of his mouth like round peppermint candies. )
Super Junior (Hankyung/Hyukjae, with peripheral Heechul/Donghae/Kibum(/Eeteuk))
2,352 words. PG-13. Third person.
( Hyukjae looks at his paper, and ignores the slide of Hankyung’s vowels and they way they sit in the back of his mouth like round peppermint candies. )
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I love the ending line.
Then again, I'm a sucker for good ending lines.
So, feel proud that you are noted for a good one.
Wow, that was longer than need be; sorry, I'm a little off.
REVIEW TIME.
I enjoyed this a lot, it didn't have as many awkward sentences as usual so nothing really through me off except putting a period before the sentence ended.. Haha, my face was literally O.o
And, a good description of alcohol.
It always reminded me of slowly dipping into a hot tub :D
I also liked how you made him go back to his bed, under the covers whenever he felt insecure/sad. You made it seem as if he was doing this in rl, everyday. Gah, I hope that made sense. I am so off today!
Okay, before I confuse you, I'm stopping the short review ♥
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Yeah, the abruptly ended sentences were just supposed to reflect how amazingly awkward Hyukjae is. Heh.
I know what you mean! There's something really lazy about alcohol.
Awww Hyuk. He totally does. He hides in his bed until someone comes to around to make him feel better.
I am that you like it! Thank you for reading. ♥
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THE TITLE TOOK ME A BIT, BUT REALLY. HYUKJAE TOTALLY IS. THAT, AND A TEENAGE GIRL WTF. I'M GLAD THAT YOU LIKE HOW HE SPEAKS AND THINKS, BECAUSE REALLY? I CAN ONLY SEE HIM AS INCREDIBLE FAIL, SO. BUT IT'S A LOT OF FUN TO WRITE HIM LIKE THIS, ANYWAY.
HANKYUNG'S POV WOULD BE SO MUCH DIFFERENT THAN HYUKJAE'S, BECAUSE, REALLY, HANKYUNG ISN'T QUITE AS ETHEREAL AS HYUKJAE THINKS THAT HE IS. BUT I CAN SEE WHAT A CHANGE IN PERSPECTIVE WOULD BE INTERESTING. HANKYUNG, IN SOME WAYS, IS REALLY DIFFERENT FROM THE REST OF SUJU. PART OF IT, OBVIOUSLY, IS THE LANGUAGE BARRIER, AND ALSO, SEEING AS HE IS NEW IN THIS FIC, HE DOESN'T QUITE FIT YET. HE DOESN'T REALLY HAVE A PLACE.
DRUNKNESS MAKES HYUKJAE MORE FORWARD, AT LEAST, SEEING AS THE KISSING HAPPENED. BUT WRITING DRUNK PEOPLE IS ALWAYS FUN FOR ME. IT'S HOW BEING DRUNK SEEMS TO ME, YOU KNOW? LIKE TIME IS SLOWED DOWN AND SMOOTHED OUT, KIND OF LIKE HONEY. LIKE EVERYTHING IS BURIED UNDER A LATER OF HONEY. AND I THINK THAT IS ANYTHING COULD MAKE HYUKJAE LESS ( ... )
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Haha. I hope Junsu hung up his end of the phone.
I loved all the half-sentences, and Hyuk's awkwardness, and everything. And I love how Hyuk spoke like a girl, calling up Junsu in times of need xD So cute~
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Ahahah, you know that he's shamelessly listening in. And he's going to make fun of Hyuk about it forever.
Thanks! Hyuk definitely does speak like a girl. A teenage girl. The HyukSu friendship is so much fun to write!
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