Merry Christmas helgatwb!

[an_ardent_rain]

Title: River Versus the Incapacitated Merc
Character(s)/Pairing: Rayne
Prompt: Lyrics: "Real Good Man" -Tim McGraw
Written For: helgatwb, for my 25 Fics of Christmas. Hope ya like it!
Rating: R
Word Count: 3539
Disclaimer: Not mine!
-Author Notes: How I got this from the prompt I will never be entirely sure. And if you think I totally stole part of this

Comments

[gilove2dance]

YAY! So very funny and hot and love love love the last line! You always have the perfect conclusion! Whew...what a ride! A very different Jayne I found...very intriguing!

[an_ardent_rain]

Hee. Thank you so, so, so much for the comment! :D I'm glad you liked the last line; I thought it was funny, but I was afraid that it was a little corny. Hee.

A different Jayne, hmm? Is that... good? Heh. It was River I worried more about in this piece, so I might not have paid enough attention to Jayne. I hope he was in-character!

Anyway, thanks again! I was afraid - for whatever reason - that nobody would read this. *laughs* Bah. I'm glad it's written! Hee.

[gilove2dance]

Oh Jayne was still in character! He was just more rough and tumble I found! Still hot...hehe

[an_ardent_rain]

Yay for in-character! Tee hee. Ooh, rough and tumble? Well that's cool; I'm down with that. Heh. And of course still hot - it is Jayne, after all. *snickers*

[idyllictorture]

That was so, so, so funny. I loved River laughing at her own puns. The last line was great. I love firty!Jayne, and you don't get to see him often. Was this inspired by Chuck? The title. Jayne being tied up by women, like when Casey was tied up by that chick spy once. It reminded me of Chuck.

[an_ardent_rain]

Thank you so much for the comment! Hee. I'm glad it was funny - I wasn't sure because I'd read it so many times. Glad the humor was in fact there, though! I like flirty!Jayne, too. He makes me smile with his blatantness. Heh.

And yes. Completely, shamelessly inspired by Chuck. The title - yup. The being tied up - exactly like the episode. Even Jayne's underwear! Except horseshoes instead of four-leaf clovers. Heh. *laughs* I couldn't help myself.

Anyway, thanks again!

[sunshineali]

This was so fun. I loved how he wheedled it out of her (her attraction to him) and how he urged her on. Also liked her teasing him in the beginning. Very, very nice (as is usual with your fics) :)Ali

[an_ardent_rain]

Ahh, thank you for the comment! :)

I really like River teasing, so I just couldn't resist putting it in! Hee. I'm glad it was fun. And I'm even more glad that it didn't suck! I've no idea why, but I was just really worried! Hee.

Anyway, thanks again!

[alsunwunderland]

I really enjoyed this! My favorite line: "The sight of him, laid out like a Jayne-buffet to visually gorge herself on, made thinking a bit difficult."

[an_ardent_rain]

Hee. Thanks for the comment! I'm really glad you enjoyed it.

I liked that line, too. Heh. Jayne is pretty yummy, after all. :)

Thanks again!

[willow_reece]

lol. That was hot & funny. ♥

[an_ardent_rain]

Hee. Thanks for the comment!

All right - hot and funny: exactly what I was going for! Glad I succeeded. :D

[hologramx]

Shiny, a very thorough account of rayne-y goodness. I'd be interested to see what happens after they come down and meet Mal though...

Don't be so hard on yourself! Your stories are great! I am exactly the same as you though, and still haven't posted any more stories as they don't meet my expectations. Perhaps I should just get over it and post them!

[an_ardent_rain]

Thank you very much! ^_^ *laughs* Heh. It would be hilarious to see Jayne trying to be cool, but totally acting suspicious. Heh heh.

Oh, thank you so much! Hee. I really appreciate the encouragement. Yeah, I know what you mean - but sometimes, even if the fic's not great, it's good to get feedback. I know that if anything really sucks somebody'll tell me nicely, and if something's good and I should maybe use that sort of thing again, I can get that, too! So I'd say post (and not just because I think the world can always use more Rayne. Heh). ^_^

Thanks again - very much!