"Observation." One Shot. Rated R.

[an_ardent_rain]

Title: Observation
Character(s)/Pairing: Rayne... technically
Written for: Well, was supposed to be for bugchicklv's Porn-a-Thon, but obviously I was way too late. Used the prompt: Voyeur
Rating: R
Word Count: 3671
Disclaimer: Not mine.
-Author's Notes: Well! My first time at Rayne-smut - how'd I do? I'd started it awhile ago but then never finished, but

Comments

[little_dumpling]

uh wow! great twist, river watching and jayne with someone else. i liked their reactions too, they seemed to fit well.

anyways, great little story! :]

[an_ardent_rain]

Thanks for the comment! Heh - yeah, I figured it would be fun to write, and would be easier to write for a first smut-fic; it wouldn't be weighted with any expectation because it didn't direcly concern Jayne with River.

Anyway, thanks again! ^_^

[sunshineali]

Wow! She sure got an eye full. I bet she won't stop thinking about that anytime soon, nor will he. I liked this and wonder if you'll continue it? You know, how they'll fight the inevitable sex-o-rama. :)Ali

[an_ardent_rain]

Thanks for the comment! Heh - nope, I imagine that little sight stays with River a very long time. And I'm sure Jayne might make it even harder with his own thoughts. Heh. This does seem like it would be fun to continue, doesn't it? Gah, I totally fail at writing just little snippety one-shot pieces. I always want more!

Anyway, thanks again! I may just have to consider writing some sort of sequel. Heh heh. :D

[turtle_goose]

Very nice! I kind of love the idea of River as a voyeur, given what we saw in Serenity. And truth be told, I'd love to see Jayne return the favor, watching River with another guy...which would then lead to angry sex between Jayne and River after a week of sniping at each other and I think I may have started something here...

I really loved this, Darling. I can't wait to read more of your fic!

[an_ardent_rain]

Thank you so much! I have to agree with you about River as a voyeur - that really seems like it would be in-character for her. Heh. Ooh, I love your idea, too! The awkward days afterwards, River's desire for her own sexual experience, Jayne's inevitable jealousy... Heh - you're more than welcome to the idea but if you don't take it, then I think I might have to!

Thanks so much again - I always appreciate the feedback! :D

[idyllictorture]

That was really interesting. The plot was outrageous but believable and true to the characters.

[an_ardent_rain]

Thank you for the comment! :) Yeah, for some reason I can't write just them going at it yet - heh. I want to write a big, long, awesome-and-a-half sort of epic romance fic before I do that. Alas, such a story eludes me... Anyway, glad to know it was in-character and thanks again!

[the_rayneverse6]

beautiful!

[an_ardent_rain]

Thank you very much; glad you liked! :)