My first.

[cubanseapower]

 I'm trying to write a story and this is my first.
The genre is science fiction and thriller.
Please give me any feedback; all I need is people's opinion on it.
Thank you! :)
P.S. - This is just part one of my first chapter. If I get a lot of positive comments or if a lot of people like it, I might think about posting the second part.

Finch never knew

Comments

[altitudeandwine]

Please give me any feedback; all I need is people's opinion on it.Err. Okay. I seldom do this, but here are a few basic hints that could make your story even more attractive and spellbinding to readers

[cubanseapower]

Thank you for your advice!

I've never really gotten anyone's advice on it before so I will take it to consideration and make a few adjustments here and there.