Alive. Ch. 1 (I'm baaaaaaack!)

[himgirl94]

So... Before I posted, I just wanted to say hello to everyone. Hi,guys! I've been gone quite a while, just trolling. But, the good news is, I've decided to post my "diamond in the rough" fic, and see how it goes. Considering my insomnia is driving me insane, I might actually be able to post regularly. So, all,enjoy this and please, leave as much

Comments

[twirl_away]

Welcome back!

Though you do need to fix the LJ-cut. Or else I'll have to delete your post. :(

[himgirl94]

I'm on my way to work at the moment. I promise if you tell me how to fix it, i'll fix it as soon as I get home. :)

[twirl_away]

That's fine. I usually give people about 24 hours to fix things like this to account for life/time differences/etc. To fix the cut go to edit entry, highlight the story portion of your entry, click the lj-cut button.

[twirl_away]

Just to be clear, the button is technically called "insert cut."

[anonymous]

I enjoyed reading it. Very well written.
I'm curious to know what Bam went to jail for.

It seams that while Ville has a goal to his life (at least he goes to college), Bam got nothing to offer. So I'm also curious to see how his character will "evolve" to something worth love and respect.
I think that a good writer should treat every character with respect, making them more deep. Don't turn Missy's character into a one dimension (aka the villein of the story) . If Bam chose her, she must have been worth it - I guess she wasn't expecting the life she'd been given as well. I loved it that you gave her pov as well.

Keep up the good work.

[himgirl94]

Twirl, after much effort, I think I've done it. :)

[twirl_away]

Yes! Thank you! Once you know what to do, it really shouldn't take long (unless LJ is being stupid). They've made it much easier in the last year or so.