Blood, Sweat, and Tears- Rain
Rain Pouring on his head, a man stumbled through the dark night. An umbrella hung limp at his side unopened. A dark hood covered most of his face. His bright blue pants, darkened by rain, were stretched impossibly tight around his muscular legs. A black hoodie adorned his upper body, two wings drawn from where his shoulder blades were visible under the bulky fabric. A black bat wing spanned his left sleeve, a white dove, the right. Even under the folds, his body was visibly muscular, but like his legs, they allow a slender, mildly feminine figure.
The angelic face, surrounded by demonic curls was quickly defiled by streams of tears, bleeding from glassy green eyes. Khol mascara washing down his face with every path the tears took. Black trails ran down his white face, framed with black swirls. His salty tears mixed with the rain that poured through his hood and his soaked hair hung down to his shoulders. A bittersweet smile forced itself to his pouting lips as he turned his face up to the cloudy sky. Even the sun cried for his tragic being, hiding her beautiful face with clouds.
Pulling of his hoodie and exposing the flesh of his upper body, he opened his arms, welcoming the dark's embrace. Tears, sweat, and even blood pooled into a dark puddle at his feet. Dropping the black umbrella, it clattered at his feet, its sound shattering the man's last connection to reality. His body collapsed next to the umbrella, curling into himself and losing consciousness. There he lay till morning, when someone would find him.
con, crit, plz.
I'm putting this at the bottom because my computer isn't letting me put it at the top:
Title: Blood, Sweat, and Tears
Author: Me
Rating: PG-13
Summary: Ville has a psychological problem, and Bam finds him unconscious in the street. Feeling sorry for him, Bam takes him in. (lousy summary, any help would be appreciated.)
This is my first vam story, so if anything needs to be changed or any suggestions can be made, do so please.