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virgin whore hockey player, on the wire between will and what will be

Feb 12, 2010 11:11

title: Miracles in Hockey
involves: Tom Barrasso/Ron Francis
part: Brass Bonanza (II): you work all your life for that moment in time; it could come or...
rated: NC-17
time: ~February 19, 1984 (It may be getting after midnight by now...)

notes: The title is from Tommy's own mouth, in this video where the Hurricanes asked Americans about the effect of ( Read more... )

team: carolina hurricanes, team: hartford whalers, team: buffalo sabres, author: eggybread, rating: nc-17, tom barrasso, ron francis

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lite_bright February 14 2010, 20:07:22 UTC

Oh man, I was so psyched to see that you'd updated this, before I'd read it or anything. So psyched.

The narrative voice is just so unique, and really engaging. There are moments where you can just tell there's feeling behind it, and so much that's going on, because they're fully-realized characters.

"I like them."
"Get to know me better."

Aww. Sorry, had to be an enormous girl about that, so very sweet. This really nicely foreshadows some of what goes on later, when Barrasso is desperate, confused and unsure. I think that you presented that really successfully; the last chapter set up this very particular and demanding scenario, and I thought, "well, of course, it's not like Tom Barrasso could be awkward or bad at anything" and you just upended that expectation. Of course, it's sudden and strange, and mostly, I have no words for how wonderful Francis is (except asdfghjkl' best) and will just have to sigh delightedly.

Someone who cares, who will never forget about you and never, ever, abandon you. Time to overshare! This ( ... )

eggybread February 14 2010, 20:42:45 UTC

The narrative voice is just so unique because it's Tom F'ing Barrasso and if he were any more iconoclastic, he'd pull a Matilda and just destroy things telekinetically, instead of verbally.

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lite_bright February 14 2010, 21:20:23 UTC

Iconoclastic is the perfect word, oh my. Are there other words? No, that's really it, and hardly comes close :)

The honesty totally beats the sap, not that I can be objective about this or anything. It's intrinsic to the position, and always slightly sad; you've expressed that really well, on top of everything else about Barrasso. (And that's as much as I'm going to try and explain it, gosh. How you keep putting words to this, I have no idea; I get frustrated even trying to write coherent comments, obviously :D)

"omg, that's why he fell in love with Ronnie - BACKCHECKING!

ahahaha, yes.

but not far from finished.

I am eagerly awaiting it! And I will try very hard to provide more useful and prompt feedback next time, honestly. Seriously, so looking forward to it, and so excited, already.

Whalercanes, if given those options. Mostly the Canes, actually, but I am learning, if I have to keep up with this story, right?

So I'm just curious eggybread February 15 2010, 15:54:57 UTC

Since I'm not sure when the next part'll be up, what do you mean by "you keep putting words to this" -- to wit, to what, exactly? :D

It's at least helpful if I know what I'm doing.

I have faith in your coherence. ;)

Bribes you with this picture of impossibility.

Oh, and I wouldn't worry about the breakup too much. ;D You see where they are today. Not without ohsomuchdrama in the interval.

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