Miscommunication challenge, by Loz

Nov 19, 2006 10:20

Title: The Two Deaths of Gene Hunt
Author: Loz/lozenger8
Rating: White Cortina
Word Count: Approximately 1200 words
Notes: This is my first time writing Sam first person.
Warnings: Character death.

The Two Deaths of Gene Hunt )

miscommunication challenge

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neuralclone November 19 2006, 00:24:03 UTC
Here's a heartfelt "Awwwwww...!" from me. This was almost an elegy for Gene Hunt. Poor Gene. Poor Sam. What a sad homecoming for him!

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lozenger8 November 19 2006, 01:04:58 UTC
Yes. Poor things.

Thanks :)

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neuralclone November 19 2006, 06:55:25 UTC
Call it another argument for Sam to stay in 1973. *G*

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meli_64 November 19 2006, 01:16:25 UTC
Aww, that was so beautiful! Honestly, brilliant Loz.

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lozenger8 November 19 2006, 01:21:04 UTC
Thanks Meli :D

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blancafic November 19 2006, 03:06:12 UTC
Gah!

I'm a little puddle of goo right now. Seriously, I had a very visceral reaction to this. It was so poignant, and so well written. I loved that it was first person. You have Sam's voice down perfectly, and it's fascinating being inside his head.

My favorite bit:
"Gene was the cheese to my chalk. Him slightly tangy, and likely to give you nightmares if you scarfed down too much; me whiter than white, with the ability to rub off on you."

I've heard that metaphor applied to the characters before, but you've extended it so beautifully here. Really nicely done.

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lozenger8 November 19 2006, 04:01:51 UTC
Thank you so much :D

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blancafic November 19 2006, 04:40:33 UTC
OH! I forgot to say how much the scene in the canal reminded me of those scenes from The Lakes. I could just see John Simm swimming down into the dark depths. Wonderful imagery.

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lozenger8 November 19 2006, 04:55:39 UTC
I haven't seen The Lakes - so... coincidence! I want to see The Lakes :(

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duckyone November 19 2006, 06:35:07 UTC
You are keeping me going Loz, you and Blanca and some others, during this long, slow wait for series 2.

That was an excellent result for being your first, first person Sam story. You should do more. And I agree with Blanca, the canal scene does remind me of The Lakes. I hope you get to see it soon.

Thanks for taking the time to write this and share it with the rest of us.

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lozenger8 November 20 2006, 04:45:44 UTC
Thanks :)

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galacticowl November 19 2006, 09:11:42 UTC
Beautiful. Powerful. Sad. Has me crying. I loved it. I wish I could write like you! What a great job!

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lozenger8 November 20 2006, 04:46:17 UTC
Sorry I made you cry :(

Thanks :)

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