off the top of my head...

[youwish2haha]

the pale moonlight/ caresses my face/ and all my fears disappear/ i drown my eyes/ in a sea of sympathy/ and all my tears disappear/ but this world/ isnt forgiving/ and my heart, unfurled/ still aches/ my mistakes still haunt me/ a neverending graveyard/ of shame/ the moonlight wanes/ hidden by the night/ and all my fears resurface/ my friendly sea/ thrashes in agony/ and the tears become my purpose/ and this world/ isnt forgiving/ and my heart, unfurled/ still aches/ so i must try/ for my redemption/ so my mistakes/ wont be the same/

this came so easily- i really like it. could use some tweaking, though...

any thoughts?