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[violetdusk]

Friday Prose Prompt:

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[carolwatson]

"Cozumel lay in white drifts, painted against deep blue waves and practically glowing beneath the full moon

[violetdusk]

Thanks for reading this, and for your help.

Often I like the repetition of words like 'it' and 'and', but I agree that there should be a comma in lieu of the 'and' in the first line.

Yes, I was trying to say she smells like warmth.

Her voice is smooth like pearls, the words themselves don't matter as much as the sound of them.

Agreed on the 'not just tonight', thanks for pointing that out.

The sun gave Ix Chel up so that she might do as she chose, but then he realized she was not having an affair and tried to come back to her. She grew tired of his fickle attitude and eventually moved along. In this comparison, Andrew has given Kamili the world, but he is still jealous of her romance with it. Instead of losing her to it, he has chosen to be there with her. Jealous lovers often do things that don't rationally make sense, and while he is irrational in that regard he is aware of his jealousy and trying to negate it.

[carolwatson]

Ah.. Thanks for the clarification. Now, I want to know what happens. Does she tire of him always pacifying her with new places? Does she resent him for being there while she's romancing the world?

[violetdusk]

I told you what I know, it's your story now. ;)

But seriously, I would like to expand on this, I kind of liked the way the characters formed in my head.

[carolwatson]

Keep me updated, I'd like to see how it turns out.