only remembered how very hard she was trying to avoid staring into those impossibly green eyes, and how very hard he was trying to get her to do just that. Ah, young love. I'm already head over heels in love with this fic. This is line 3. Damn, you're good.
she remembered the way his hand slid comfortingly over Jaden's back, long fingers tracing the length of his spine, GAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH. Signed, sealed, delivered.
Very few of even her closest friends were aware that the seemingly disinterested Mizuno Ami had had many crushes in her time, and when she crushed, she crushed hard. A shoe box in the back of her closet still held every CD, promo, newspaper clipping, and photo book that the Three Lights ever put out in their brief months on Earth, with a particularly heavy focus on Kou Taiki.The way you characterise Ami is brilliant. It's like the slow unwrapping of a gift. You have no idea what is inside, but as layer of layer of wrapping paper is removed, the pieces fall together and then when
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Oh goodness, thank you Lytton! I'm so glad you liked it!
The way you characterise Ami is brilliant. It's like the slow unwrapping of a gift. You have no idea what is inside, but as layer of layer of wrapping paper is removed, the pieces fall together and then when you have the whole thing in your hands, it could only be this from the get go. (Please tell me that you understand what I'm trying to say here.)
I do! I'm glad her multiple layers show through, because I was trying to think how someone like Sasha would get together with someone like Ami and the answer was that they have a lot more in common underneath than anybody would suspect of Ami. I couldn't help but remember how Ami fixated on her crush in that movie special, or how she was the first one of their group to join the Three Lights fan club.
He's the grown-up version of his Yellow Car counterpart (perhaps more cynical, but we have yet to get to that).
Yes! Definite shades of Yellow Car!Zoi went into Sasha. But with more Issues.
"You look hot, sweetie." Minako strapped her into a pair of heels, because Ami had no idea how to navigate the distance to her feet without flashing her blue cotton panties to all and sundry. Aww, Ami. She is so out of her depth here, but I think it's good for her, daring to do things foreign to her, strange to her nature. He has a good effect on her, doesn't he? Making her a bit more daring, getting her to open up to what she wants.
She didn't know what to think about the hidden note of surprise in his voice. Neither do I. Is this good, his surprise? Bad?
. "So. Did Mina steal that skirt off of a very tiny stripper?" *laughs* Oh, V will love this one. So do I. Vampire Darcy snarking away.
"And perfect on you. Also, I don't think I've told you yet about my sexy librarian fetish." His flirting is so adorable, he really has a knack of saying the right things to her.
If Taiki Kou were here, she would flirt equally shamelessly... in her head. Which was really almost the same thing.Oh Ami. You're too sweet for words
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She is so out of her depth here, but I think it's good for her, daring to do things foreign to her, strange to her nature. He has a good effect on her, doesn't he? Making her a bit more daring, getting her to open up to what she wants.
Yes! And making her realize that there are things out there that she does want and never considered before.
I struggled a LOT with her decision to dress up for the club. Because I cringe at any story that involves a girl changing herself for a guy. But I can relate to Ami and know what it's like to discover something through someone else, and it's not for him, it's just because he introduced it to her.
Neither do I. Is this good, his surprise? Bad?
A bit of both, but I think he detected right away that she was in over her head and clearly uncomfortable. But you don't show up on a first date and tell your partner to go put something else on, even if your intentions are noble.
*laughs* Oh, V will love this one. So do I. Vampire Darcy snarking away.
I struggled a LOT with her decision to dress up for the club. Because I cringe at any story that involves a girl changing herself for a guy. But I can relate to Ami and know what it's like to discover something through someone else, and it's not for him, it's just because he introduced it to her. I do some cringing too when girls change who they are and "hot it up" to please a boy in a fic (or in a movie, I'm still not sure about Sandy in Grease, even though she looked great), but you dealt with it so sensibly and carefully that I don't mind at all. She wants to try this, it doesn't work, and then he helps her find some acceptable middle-ground. So yes: lots of love for this!
Sandy in Grease is the one I always think of, too! And I am also torn, because she rocks post-transformation, and yet she never seemed unhappy with who she was until everyone else gave her a hard time about it.
but you dealt with it so sensibly and carefully that I don't mind at all.
THIS IS SO PERFECTLY AMI AND DON'T YOU EVER TRY AND SAY YOU CAN'T WRITE THESE GIRLS BECAUSE YOU DO A STELLAR JOB AT IT!!!!
MUST DASH BUT BEFORE I DO, YOU GOT AMI TO DRESS UP AS A VAMPIRE AND IN ROCKABILLY AND SOMEHOW KEPT THAT IN CHARACTER!!!!! HOW THE HELL DO YOU DO THAT?!?!?!?!?
MUST DASH BUT BEFORE I DO, YOU GOT AMI TO DRESS UP AS A VAMPIRE AND IN ROCKABILLY AND SOMEHOW KEPT THAT IN CHARACTER!!!!! HOW THE HELL DO YOU DO THAT?!?!?!?!?
Personal experience, I think. I'm pretty shy like Ami, but I dress up like a cake sometimes, lol. And I've started hanging out with some goths and discovering they're all very shy, awkward people like me. And I think she'd be attracted to the idea of finding confidence through it. Also I really really wanted to make it happen and thought forever about how to do it.
the characterization of EVERYONE in this fic, not even just the main players, is totally incredible. the little glimpses of rei and jaden are killing me (and clearly killing sasha too). oof and the slow, deliberate way everything unfolds is just so very ami. she's not too shy and uptight (a personal pet peeve of mine), not too adventurous, she's real and perfect.
more specifically...
The fact that Taiki ended up being female beneath that well-tailored suit really only gave her momentary pause--Star Maker did fill out those little black hotpants quite nicely.
FUCK YEAH AMI WE KNEW YOU HAD IT IN YOU!!!
Sometimes she wished that he would just pin her down and do what he wanted with her, that she could be completely passive instead of having to choose, and always, always fearing that her choice was the wrong one.
i love that he DOESN'T do this, because approaching this girl with anything less than surgical precision would be completely retarded, and he totally gets it, and thrives on it, and asfjkhafjh. yeah.
oof and the slow, deliberate way everything unfolds is just so very ami. she's not too shy and uptight (a personal pet peeve of mine), not too adventurous, she's real and perfect.
Thanks, I'm so glad you think so! I think it helps that this is told from her perspective, because shy people--you never know what is going through their heads.
i love that he DOESN'T do this, because approaching this girl with anything less than surgical precision would be completely retarded, and he totally gets it, and thrives on it, and asfjkhafjh. yeah.
Yes! I've been, there, dammit. And it's frustrating BEING that person who's always holding back, and not really sure how to get over your inhibitions, but as much as you may think you want to just let the other person take over, it never ends well.
And I think it's that complexity that fascinates him. Being forced to go slow makes every little step seem precious.
i love this boy. he is like my fav zoi ever, and i don't even really like zoi.Aww! Thanks! I like him too (of course, heh). I
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Ah, young love. I'm already head over heels in love with this fic. This is line 3. Damn, you're good.
she remembered the way his hand slid comfortingly over Jaden's back, long fingers tracing the length of his spine,
GAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH. Signed, sealed, delivered.
Very few of even her closest friends were aware that the seemingly disinterested Mizuno Ami had had many crushes in her time, and when she crushed, she crushed hard. A shoe box in the back of her closet still held every CD, promo, newspaper clipping, and photo book that the Three Lights ever put out in their brief months on Earth, with a particularly heavy focus on Kou Taiki.The way you characterise Ami is brilliant. It's like the slow unwrapping of a gift. You have no idea what is inside, but as layer of layer of wrapping paper is removed, the pieces fall together and then when ( ... )
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The way you characterise Ami is brilliant. It's like the slow unwrapping of a gift. You have no idea what is inside, but as layer of layer of wrapping paper is removed, the pieces fall together and then when you have the whole thing in your hands, it could only be this from the get go. (Please tell me that you understand what I'm trying to say here.)
I do! I'm glad her multiple layers show through, because I was trying to think how someone like Sasha would get together with someone like Ami and the answer was that they have a lot more in common underneath than anybody would suspect of Ami. I couldn't help but remember how Ami fixated on her crush in that movie special, or how she was the first one of their group to join the Three Lights fan club.
He's the grown-up version of his Yellow Car counterpart (perhaps more cynical, but we have yet to get to that).
Yes! Definite shades of Yellow Car!Zoi went into Sasha. But with more Issues.
And of course Ami googled him! ( ... )
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Aww, Ami. She is so out of her depth here, but I think it's good for her, daring to do things foreign to her, strange to her nature. He has a good effect on her, doesn't he? Making her a bit more daring, getting her to open up to what she wants.
She didn't know what to think about the hidden note of surprise in his voice.
Neither do I. Is this good, his surprise? Bad?
. "So. Did Mina steal that skirt off of a very tiny stripper?"
*laughs* Oh, V will love this one. So do I. Vampire Darcy snarking away.
"And perfect on you. Also, I don't think I've told you yet about my sexy librarian fetish."
His flirting is so adorable, he really has a knack of saying the right things to her.
If Taiki Kou were here, she would flirt equally shamelessly... in her head. Which was really almost the same thing.Oh Ami. You're too sweet for words ( ... )
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Yes! And making her realize that there are things out there that she does want and never considered before.
I struggled a LOT with her decision to dress up for the club. Because I cringe at any story that involves a girl changing herself for a guy. But I can relate to Ami and know what it's like to discover something through someone else, and it's not for him, it's just because he introduced it to her.
Neither do I. Is this good, his surprise? Bad?
A bit of both, but I think he detected right away that she was in over her head and clearly uncomfortable. But you don't show up on a first date and tell your partner to go put something else on, even if your intentions are noble.
*laughs* Oh, V will love this one. So do I. Vampire Darcy snarking away.
Vampire Darcy will always snark.
Thank you
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I do some cringing too when girls change who they are and "hot it up" to please a boy in a fic (or in a movie, I'm still not sure about Sandy in Grease, even though she looked great), but you dealt with it so sensibly and carefully that I don't mind at all. She wants to try this, it doesn't work, and then he helps her find some acceptable middle-ground. So yes: lots of love for this!
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but you dealt with it so sensibly and carefully that I don't mind at all.
That's a huge relief!
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It was just perfect.
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THIS IS SO PERFECTLY AMI AND DON'T YOU EVER TRY AND SAY YOU CAN'T WRITE THESE GIRLS BECAUSE YOU DO A STELLAR JOB AT IT!!!!
MUST DASH BUT BEFORE I DO, YOU GOT AMI TO DRESS UP AS A VAMPIRE AND IN ROCKABILLY AND SOMEHOW KEPT THAT IN CHARACTER!!!!! HOW THE HELL DO YOU DO THAT?!?!?!?!?
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MUST DASH BUT BEFORE I DO, YOU GOT AMI TO DRESS UP AS A VAMPIRE AND IN ROCKABILLY AND SOMEHOW KEPT THAT IN CHARACTER!!!!! HOW THE HELL DO YOU DO THAT?!?!?!?!?
Personal experience, I think. I'm pretty shy like Ami, but I dress up like a cake sometimes, lol. And I've started hanging out with some goths and discovering they're all very shy, awkward people like me. And I think she'd be attracted to the idea of finding confidence through it. Also I really really wanted to make it happen and thought forever about how to do it.
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more specifically...
The fact that Taiki ended up being female beneath that well-tailored suit really only gave her momentary pause--Star Maker did fill out those little black hotpants quite nicely.
FUCK YEAH AMI WE KNEW YOU HAD IT IN YOU!!!
Sometimes she wished that he would just pin her down and do what he wanted with her, that she could be completely passive instead of having to choose, and always, always fearing that her choice was the wrong one.
i love that he DOESN'T do this, because approaching this girl with anything less than surgical precision would be completely retarded, and he totally gets it, and thrives on it, and asfjkhafjh. yeah.
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Thanks, I'm so glad you think so! I think it helps that this is told from her perspective, because shy people--you never know what is going through their heads.
i love that he DOESN'T do this, because approaching this girl with anything less than surgical precision would be completely retarded, and he totally gets it, and thrives on it, and asfjkhafjh. yeah.
Yes! I've been, there, dammit. And it's frustrating BEING that person who's always holding back, and not really sure how to get over your inhibitions, but as much as you may think you want to just let the other person take over, it never ends well.
And I think it's that complexity that fascinates him. Being forced to go slow makes every little step seem precious.
i love this boy. he is like my fav zoi ever, and i don't even really like zoi.Aww! Thanks! I like him too (of course, heh). I ( ... )
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