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Timor (part 3 of...5)

Jun 12, 2009 13:33

Title: Timor (portugese for fear, like the shakira song. you better believe I'm gonna change that, sometime. :p )
Rating: T(for this part) , yeaahhh, it's changing next time around. Right now, smackdowns, and blood is flying all over the place. Somebody dies, oh noes. Somebody is high.
Length: Long. for this part, 4268 words.
Summary: Despite what ( Read more... )

Comments 8

chlavis333 June 13 2009, 19:14:08 UTC

Oh no, I hope this death isn't real either or he comes back or something. Poor Davis. Atl east, if he did die he went out the way he should.

vagrantdream June 13 2009, 19:51:14 UTC

It's me so you can be pretty sure of the first part. It was real, but!!!

I always thought jimmy was more likely to shoot/stab him with the jitters than *the fail*.
And Davis? big damn hero.

paraxdisepink June 14 2009, 00:17:50 UTC

Oh man so many things to like. ACTION SCENES. I love action. As much as I do my level best to act like a first-class perve all the time, I do love plot and action. Really great stuff. And Davis trying to fend off Dooms? Awesome. We all know you're a badass, Davis, even if you kinda got really hurt.

Hah Ollie!! You killed my favorite douche!

“You didn’t have to. He’s your best friend and you signed his death warrant because you both wanted to save me.
This is excellent. Such a shame the show didn't actually follow through with this.

Her hand fluttered helplessly over the spot where the shaft didn’t quite pierce through and she kept talking, kept telling him that the ambulance would be there soon. She didn’t know if Jimmy had really gone to get it or if he had just been that desperate to get away.

It is so much more fitting for Jimmy to misguidedly try and kill Davis. For the people who don't care for Davis, it's karmic because Dooms hurt Jimmy (though that was Brainiac's doing), and if you like Davis it preserves the sense of ( ... )

vagrantdream June 14 2009, 04:39:12 UTC

Here I was thinking I neglected the sexy. hehe. glad the action part kinda worked. I was considering hiding my post until I edited several more times but I was too enthralled with the Davis-is-a-woobie-badass thing. I am tempted to cheat on Timor with the medieval thing whilst I connect with Davis's inner bad-assery.
And yeah, he's all protector-y, even with the ouches.

Characters I adore always seem to get hurt a lot. Minus the favorite douche, of course. I still found him interesting so he almost got a worthy ending. the MISSION!I think. (at least I didn't write the other scenario where Chloe *got* Davis to activate his heat vision and defeat Doomsday and Ollie died of indignation at his Watchtower being used for *that*. )

But seriously, you *knew* I was going to kill Ollie.
Davis drilled it in again, in case anyone didn't catch that. but he's still like, it's because you both wanted to save me and just that.

Yeah. then the fanboys could have their its Karmic moment and then get over it. And we can feel the delicious Eternal ( ... )

paraxdisepink June 14 2009, 08:21:24 UTC

Connecting with Davis' inner badass is a must. What can I say, I like Davis' ass, bad or otherwise hee!

(at least I didn't write the other scenario where Chloe *got* Davis to activate his heat vision and defeat Doomsday and Ollie died of indignation at his Watchtower being used for *that*. )

Okay, right now I am feeling the loss of the aforementioned scene.

Eh fanboys can suck it. They just don't like Davis because they're threatened by his hotness.

The signs, so much word. Plus, I would've given a tooth (a very small one) to see Jimmy with the junkie jitters.

Silly girl, only the African American characters get those on this show! A white character would never be portrayed in such a way on Smallville! Don't you know? Although Davis was acting kinda tweakerish in Beast, but he's a foster kid, so . . .

And yes! feminist rage! I think there could a be a very special comm dedicated to calling out SV on its shit messages. Makes me want to poke out some eyes or wonder who the writers are dating. I DUN WANNA KNOW.
Heh Poking ( ... )

vagrantdream July 5 2009, 02:00:56 UTC

The nice thing about almost finishing a fic is being able to come back to comments. XD

Connecting with Davis' inner badass is a must. What can I say, I like Davis' ass, bad or otherwise hee!
Two kinda-words for you. The beast-fortress-throwdown caps.

teehee. Seriously, I want to do something like LiarLiar again. mocking everything(and with a slightly nymphomaniac twinge! Until then I am doing shear (with notexactly!fun redk but ...), a almost-but-not-quite-lighthearted redk thing given to me by *someone*, the medieval thing, which I have just succeeded in making Davis take off his shirt... (not to mention a uniform kink idea, and something in an alley)
yeah, *what* pure virginal mind huh?

ohhh. poking out eyes! I almost forgot that little bit of subtext. haha Oedipus Rex. Not I've got a thinky dilemma. how can something be removed if it didn't exist in the first place?

It's the perfect family . . . where the intelligent wife gives up her career and chances of really making something of her life *to serve her husband at dinner ( ... )

seven_trees June 20 2009, 23:33:44 UTC

Oh man, I need to read part 4 NAO.

vagrantdream June 24 2009, 14:04:39 UTC

text part going up now. and there's a part 5, almost completed. *facepalm* with smut