CRITIQUE the shit out of it!

[star11211]

At first I didnt think I had anyone to write this essay on, My mind was blank

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[bleedingwithin1]

haha, its a good essay i must say, and i must say i always kind of knew she was the cookie monster

[star11211]

haaa.

THE SECRET IS OUT.

lmao.

And thankyou, it took me like 30 minutes to write.
haa.

[hepaintedmysoul]

"At night when the normal teenager have already went to sleep," itskind of awkward to read so I would change the went to gone so it goes more smoothly.

"to write 5 paragraphs
on her doesn't seem to tell everything about her" I would change everything to "to tell hardly anything" or anything or something along those lines. everything justsounds..erm like there isnt much about her.

ehhhh just a thought.

oh and i still cant fucking figure out who to write mine on.

james made the smart ass comment "write it on me" suggestion

though it may be my only choice.. because well i have a less than admiral relationship with my parents and my g-ma... yeah-no.

[star11211]

sweet thanks for the suggestions. I just changed them, and im about to reprint it out.

:]

You should write it on him, Because you guys have been dating for a long time now, So im sure you could write 5 paragraphs about him.
haa.

[hepaintedmysoul]

yeah I think I am.

ehhh and i want to lie in it and say "I admire him because he's got good weed, tons of alcohol, and we screw all the time because hes 28 and Im 16!" LMAO just to see what she would do. I mean she cant really fail me because there is not wrong answer really.

[hepaintedmysoul]

btw its me lauren.. i jsut dont feel like signing in.

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LMFAO that came up when i went to send this. which in actuality Im a vampire so i just lied.