the beast within the burden is all mine {chuck - sarah}

[slybrunette]

Title: The Beast Within The Burden Is All Mine
Fandom: Chuck
Characters/Pairings: Sarah. Very light Chuck/Sarah; mostly gen.
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: 1,114
Author's Note: This isn't chronological. I know; I'm sorry.
Summary: Season 2. AU. When this is all over she’s left with four white walls, the scrape of her chair, metal against linoleum, and

Comments

[myr_soleil]

Fgnnnn. That's my knee-jerk reaction, fyi. This is so great, I love the switching between the timelines. I love the format too, very small sentences and most of them like a punch to the gut. The ending is perfect. I love these three people so much.

[slybrunette]

I'm so glad to hear that the timeline switching actually fell under 'good'; I wasn't sure that would be well-received but, well, my muse does as it wants.

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! I'm thrilled that you enjoyed this!

[gigglemonster]

STEEEEEPPHHHHHHHHH
HOLY FUCKING SHIT
PARDON MY FRENCH. NO, ACTUALLY, DON'T. IT NEEDED TO BE SAID!
This is..I don't even...words, what are they right now?!
This whole thing is just like a punch to the gut in the best possible way. I love the way you can so effortlessly tap into and shine a light on the deeper darker side of these characters in a way they couldn't ever do on the show. I love Sarah in this. LOVE LOVE LOVE her in this. I love how it is sparse and cold and harsh and heartbreaking all at the same time.
And I adore this section

Once, her finger froze on the trigger.

A shot fired and it wasn’t hers. A woman fell. Chuck had never looked more confused and Bryce had never looked more disappointed.

Casey’s words still cut the most.

“You want something done right, you do it yourself.”I seriously gasped when I read it. The way you tied it back to her father is just pure poetry. I cannot gush enough about this, for serious. But I will try to stop because it's getting to the point where I start to sound like a crazy person

[slybrunette]

You can't see me but I'm blushing right now.

Effortlessly was so not the word with this, let me tell you. This. Was. Hard. Because I love Sarah, as a character -- never mind as one half of like a ton of ships -- and I really wanted to do her justice. So, um, you saying you loved her in this pretty much made all the yelling at my computer that I did yesterday while writing totally worth it.

You never sound like a crazy person. Your word is pretty much scripture as far as my Chuck fics go so you better bet I value every word (this is what happens when you get me into a fandom). So thank you, so, so much! I'm thrilled that you liked this!

[siluria]

oooooooooh - very nicely done indeed - very powerful!!!! Love the characterisation all round, even if the other boys just get one liners, they feel very real.

[slybrunette]

Aw thank you! I'm still working out being able to write dialogue for this show, so sparse has been my way to go. I'm glad they felt real to you and that you enjoyed this!

[dulcedeusex]

Best thing ever! Ambling on over here and finding so much fic activity!! Dude I so need a Sarah/Casey icon!

Okay, first off you constantly amaze me with your "no-one fic sounding the same"-awesomeness! Secondly? This was really poignant and had its healthy helping of dark but very good just.like.that.

She folds her hands on the table, fingertips six inches from a thick manila folder. “You’ll have to be more specific.”

(They hit her with the butt of a gun; she chooses laughter over tears.)

- I love tough and a little crazy spy Sarah. She's awesome. And I love the double-entendres of her response.

“You’re on thin ice, Walker,” Casey chides; the brush of leather against her bare arm serves as a reminder that it isn’t with him.

-- As you are well aware of, I'm a sucker for the Casey so I loved this.

Twelve hours later, Casey’s behind the wheel, she’s a brunette, and Chuck’s shell-shocked in the backseat.

The state of Arizona welcomes them.

-- HELLO IMAGERY.

He shakes his head. “It also has a good chance of sticking me with

[slybrunette]

Yeah, I don't know what's up this week but I've been writing a lot more than usual. Must be something in the water.

you constantly amaze me with your "no-one fic sounding the same"-awesomeness

Really? Half of the time I feel like I'm writing the same thing over and over again, at least tone/style wise. So that's a very good thing to hear.

Your next fic better be entitled 'Unbreak My Heart' or something

Haha, yeah, sadly no. I do have titles for two other C/S fics though, which is half the battle, at least for me (I spend around forty-five minutes trying to title things these days -- it's pathetic).

I'm so glad you liked this hun! Thanks for reading and reviewing!

[dulcedeusex]

(I spend around forty-five minutes trying to title things these days -- it's pathetic).

Forty-five minutes on a title is a perfectly respectable time to spend on this very important job! On a good day I can spend the whole bleeding day trying to think up an appropriate title. Kinda reminds me of the writer who ate his book in one GA episode!

Your tone is...similar... sometimes... not really actually. There's always angst and insightfulness if that's what you mean? Whatever girl, your writing rocks, s'all that matters.

xx Dulce

[slybrunette]

I think if I spent a whole day I'd go insane. I have a fairly short attention span. But, yeah, I can always sympathize with that patient lol.

Yeah, there's always angst. I used to do more humor, though I've been backing off from that a little bit for some reason. I think it's a matter of fandoms/pairings that's causing that. And thanks hun :)

[spyglass_]

Ooooh. Ohhhh! I took a quick look at your journal when I read your TWW fic just now, and I noticed you'd written Chuck. I love Chuck and can barely ever find any good fic, but this is fantastic. I can't think of anything else to say except that I really enjoyed this, maybe even more so because of the chronology. I think it worked to your advantage.

[slybrunette]

Oh, yeah, I'm very multifandom. Chuck's my latest obsession -- though I'm very non-canon with my pairings, so it's kind of fortunate that this was the one you saw. It's the only normal one, lol. But, seriously, thank you. The whole reason I got into writing Chuck is that I couldn't really find much that I really liked, so I figured I might as well try my hand.

I'm glad you enjoyed this!