Title: Five mornings in New York.
Pairing: Akame
Rating: G through to NC-17 c:
Genre: fluff, smut, romance, AU
Disclaimer: I own nothing and nobody regarding the real boys D8 ..but in this case, the Jin belongs to me and the Kame is
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So...yeah~ From the top. x3
I love that you put Alejandro in there. Don't know if you've noticed or not, but with Kame taking English more seriously, he's starting to get more interested in Western popular music, so there could easily be more references to Gaga and other artists in the future if you or Jin wanted. And...given the conversation last night, I think there needs to be. xD
orz You're really going to regret giving me three of the five scenes early when I say this, but...it's hard to find stuff to comment on when I'm already familiar with it. I'll pick out as much amazing stuff to reply to as I can, but hopefully this won't turn into a fail comment. >< I'm really sorry... I didn't mean for that to happen ( ... )
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...And back to quoting. xD
if he thinks he’s been caught, glances away with a mischievous smile.
Could easily see Kame doing that. <3
Can't comment on Jin watching Kame sleep and thinking about what he wants to do other than to say that I got sucked into it. There's seriously a lyrical quality to your writing~
iprhgapigsjrphirj <333 again at Jin and then the description of Kame moving from dream to dream and the relationship between what's happening to his body and what's playing in his mind when Jin starts going down on him ( ... )
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That's a really pretty mental image. Very Jin. <3
“You know,” Jin ventures softly, when what seemed to him like the most obvious thing about the situation had yet to dawn on Kame, “That if no one else from your class can make it in either, they’ll just hold the test off until another day.”...I cracked up at that. Especially Kame's reaction. xD It blows my mind that his first thought to seeing a ton of snow outside wouldn't be, "Whoo, school's canceled!" but...it's Kame. He's so gung-ho about work that it so wouldn't even cross his mind. x3 ( ... )
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And...the climax. I could quote all of that. Lol, in fact, at first I was going to quote Jin's dialogue because it's winrhgrspijrpoajhot, but then I decided that I liked the line above that, too, and then I kept reading and I realized the whole thing was just awesome. So...yeah, you get a rambly paragraph about it instead of a mile-long quote. xD Because I'm seriously starting to quote the whole fic. ='D
Guuuh, Jin's line in the afterglow about the English exam is pure yellow gold. <3 That definitely got a smile out of me~ x3
And Kame's last line is fantastic, too, tying the whole thing back to the fight they had at the beginning of the scene, and then you realize that they solved it with blizzard!sex on the couch. gipginriha Great. <3 Just great ( ... )
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OH. I'll mention it further down because you quoted one of the sentences, but skimming this through this morning, it's missing all of the italics I added DDD; So some lines have totally lost their effect for me.. >< But yes, you, write/post more D8 of them or just in general~ ..after bb, of course...the conversation last night wasn't so much about the music, though XD But no, that could be useful to Kame~ and Jin would obviously enjoy it ( ... )
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