VM fic: Home Is Where the Heart Is (mini!Lilly [Duncan's daughter]) PG-13

[shealynn88]

Title: Home Is Where the Heart Is
Author: Shealynn88
Rating: PG-13
Length: ~10000 words
Spoilers: up to Donut Run
Characters: mini!Lilly and the Mannings, other peripheral characters
Disclaimer: I do not own these characters, I'm just playing.
Summary: (future!fic) After five years the law catches up with Duncan, and little Lilly Kane finds

Comments

[neonhummingbird]

Really excellent; Lilly is a sweetheart and I love the use of Backup. I also liked how you handled the legal aspects -- it is a fairy tale, but the hints of adult issues in the background were nicely done. Nice job.

[shealynn88]

Thank you so much! It means a lot that the legal aspects came through. It was hard to make things understandable, yet filter them through a young child, but I really wanted to address this as a process, not a sudden fix.

Thank you so much for your feedback!

[monimala]

Oh my God, Shealynn....my eyes are full of tears and I'm trying not to cry at the office! This was beautiful. I loved Lilly's voice, how the narrative followed both the pattern of a fairy tale and her own experience. The reader sees and feels a child's confusion, joy, etc.

You pretty much HAD me at the buenos nocheses to Senor Gato and Mantequillo. I want the Donut to be my daddy! *sobs*.

Great job! My new favorite fic!

[shealynn88]

Oh, that makes me so happy. :) Thank you so, so much! There was so much I wanted to get through in this, and it was really difficult, and I'm so glad you got the fairy tale feel and the child's perspective.

And I really wanted to spread the Duncan love, because I totally believe that he would be a great father.

Great job! My new favorite fic!

I'm speechless with the happy. Thank you so much!

[monimala]

You're very welcome! It was my pleasure to read. Even WITH the embarrassing getting-farklempt-in-public aspect of it. Heh.

I loved the way everything filtered through Lilly's perspective...from the cops coming to get her and Duncan, to Grace seeming like an adult when we know she's not just because she's so *comparatively* big, to her scenes with Backup...just...everything was perfect. And don't THINK I didn't notice the comfortable feel of a longterm W/V relationship. ;-).

[shealynn88]

(Decided my last comment was too squeeful. How weird is that?)

Anyhow...that W/V was totally a guilty pleasure on my part, but I managed to convince myself that the story worked best that way, what with Lilly being bilingual and all, and her needing acceptance for all those facets of her that the Mannings didn't like. See? I really did it totally for the story. Not at all selfish. No, really. :)

I loved including Backup. I wish I could have him in more stories, cuz I just...adore him. :)

Thanks so, so much for your loverly feedback. :)-

[taken_with_you]

Despite the sad lack of Logan/Duncan buttsex...I have to say, this is still as lovely and moving as the first time that I read it.

Favorite parts: Her grandmother moved past both of them to get to the kitchen, and Lilly curtseyed like her Nana had taught her. "Hola, Señora, mucho gusto," she said.

The woman's smile got wider. "Hola, señorita. Eres Lilly?"

"Si!" Lilly exclaimed. The woman knew her name! "¿Como sabias mi nombre?"

"Yo conocia a tú papa, y-"

"Faith!" Her grandmother's voice was stern as she came out of the kitchen with an ice pack and led Lilly up the stairs, pulling her away from the nice woman in the living room. The woman waved at her with a sad smile as Lilly watched over her shoulder, stumbling up the stairs.

Oh, it's so sad and perfect.

Also loved: Nowhere in the house felt safe. The bed was too close to the little room, so Lilly crept down the stairs.

Her grandmother had yelled at her in the kitchen, and the man was usually in the living room. She didn't like that room.The emotions are so real, especially

[shealynn88]

Despite the sad lack of Logan/Duncan buttsex...

Jeez, you really DO want to scar this kid, don't you? LOL!

Thank you so much for the support and the sweet comments. I really appreciate it!

[taken_with_you]

Jeez, you really DO want to scar this kid, don't you? LOL!

Only kind of.

Where in the BALLS are you?

[being_lola_star]

that was soooo sweet and i don't care if it sounds stupid but i love thumblina it's like one of my favorite stories! this was such a good take on it!!!

[shealynn88]

Hehe...that's not stupid at all! I love fairy tales. I grew up on them, and I love the mythology and the symbolism...yeah. I'm with you. :) I'm so glad you liked my rather loose interpretation. :)

[sabra_n]

*sniffle* As pathetic as this sounds, thank you for the happy ending. I was afraid this was just going to be an entirely dystopic worst-case-scenario story when I heard the concept.

Also, I loved the thorn in the lion's...er, dog's paw. It gave the story a bit of the air of a fable.

-blue

[shealynn88]

I'm terrible at hopeless endings. I get too invested. ;)

I'm so glad you got a fable feel from it! Actually Backup was supposed to be the bird equivalent, but I did kinda mix my fairy tales, didn't I? :) As long as the fable thing came across...I feel I've done my job.

Thank you so much for the kind feedback, and thanks for reading it, even though you were worried about the ending.