IN DARKNESS BY kristen999 [LFWS #1 ROUND 1]
Title: In darkness
Author: kristen999
Rating: PG
Disclaimer: Stargate belongs to Metro-Goldwyn-Mayer Studios Inc., no infringements of any rights is intended.
Spoilers: None
Prompt for the Round: > Write a story featuring the team in which ONLY dialogue is used. No scene setters at all. Just pure dialogue. Not even ‘... Sheppard said’ or ‘... Rodney complained’. All must speak at least once.
IN DARKNESS by TO BE REVEALED
"Less than three minutes before exposure reaches deadly levels!”
“Won't make a difference if you're not faster.”
“Excuse me if my brain doesn't work very well when its been gassed!”
“Doesn't effect your feet.”
“In fact, it does. Every second we inhale this toxin, we kill millions of brain cells. In my case, perhaps billions. I think your dreads eat up yours so you might not notice a difference.”
“Knock it off...Mc-kay.”
“And you, Colonel! How about not sucking in an entire cloud of poison next time. When I yell leak! Hold your breath so I don't have to carry you around!”
“Was...was...kind of bus-y.”
“Playing with your C-4 and causing a giant explosion!”
“It killed the Wraith.”
“How astute. You and Sheppard should join a twelve step program for--”
“--Gentlemen. The less we talk. The less we inhale it.”
“My chest is already on fire and I'm going blind! Feels like I've swallowed a whole can of pepper spray. And for those who can count seconds in their heads. Two minutes before we're all toast!”
“Over here! I think that is where we came in. We should---”
“--Watch out! The roof's cavin' in!.....Teyla? TEYLA?”
“I am alright. The debris only grazed me. The shaft is experiencing aftershocks. We must hurry before the rest of the ceiling becomes unstable....Ronon? What is wrong?”
“It's nuthin'...just...keep movin'.”
“Are you hurt?”
“Said I'm good. How's Sheppard?”
“His lungs have been chemically scrubbed raw! Not that I'm doing any better.”
“I'm.....f-fine...”
“People who've had a pipe cleaner scrape away the linings of their throat are not allowed to speak. And that wheezing has got to stop.”
“I will help support John's other side, but the fumes have swollen my eyes closed. Ronon, can you--”
“I can find the exit without seeing.”
“Good to know because I can't walk in a straight line. How does the song go? Four blind mice. See how they--”
“Shssssh.”
“What? Why?”
“It is John. I can not hear him breathing!”
“Oh, no, no, no! Don't...don't do this Colonel! I'm...Teyla? I'm too dizzy. I can't...I can't-”
“The entrance is over here!”
“Ronon! We can not--”
“Oh God! It's another tremor!”
“The mine's collapsing! Both of you run!”
“Ronon! What about you?”
“I've got to hold up the entrance so you guys can get out with Sheppard!”
“What! How? With your back?”
“Yeah.”
“Run!”
“But we can't leave--”
“--I'll be right behind you... Go! NOW!”
...
“Ronon, we are safe. You must move. Rodney says the gas levels are too--”
“I know. I...I can't...hold it up any longer.”
“Then stop playing Atlas and let go!”
“That was the plan.”
“No, wait! Rono--”
....
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Author: kristen999
Rating: PG
Disclaimer: Stargate belongs to Metro-Goldwyn-Mayer Studios Inc., no infringements of any rights is intended.
Spoilers: None
Prompt for the Round: > Write a story featuring the team in which ONLY dialogue is used. No scene setters at all. Just pure dialogue. Not even ‘... Sheppard said’ or ‘... Rodney complained’. All must speak at least once.
IN DARKNESS by TO BE REVEALED
"Less than three minutes before exposure reaches deadly levels!”
“Won't make a difference if you're not faster.”
“Excuse me if my brain doesn't work very well when its been gassed!”
“Doesn't effect your feet.”
“In fact, it does. Every second we inhale this toxin, we kill millions of brain cells. In my case, perhaps billions. I think your dreads eat up yours so you might not notice a difference.”
“Knock it off...Mc-kay.”
“And you, Colonel! How about not sucking in an entire cloud of poison next time. When I yell leak! Hold your breath so I don't have to carry you around!”
“Was...was...kind of bus-y.”
“Playing with your C-4 and causing a giant explosion!”
“It killed the Wraith.”
“How astute. You and Sheppard should join a twelve step program for--”
“--Gentlemen. The less we talk. The less we inhale it.”
“My chest is already on fire and I'm going blind! Feels like I've swallowed a whole can of pepper spray. And for those who can count seconds in their heads. Two minutes before we're all toast!”
“Over here! I think that is where we came in. We should---”
“--Watch out! The roof's cavin' in!.....Teyla? TEYLA?”
“I am alright. The debris only grazed me. The shaft is experiencing aftershocks. We must hurry before the rest of the ceiling becomes unstable....Ronon? What is wrong?”
“It's nuthin'...just...keep movin'.”
“Are you hurt?”
“Said I'm good. How's Sheppard?”
“His lungs have been chemically scrubbed raw! Not that I'm doing any better.”
“I'm.....f-fine...”
“People who've had a pipe cleaner scrape away the linings of their throat are not allowed to speak. And that wheezing has got to stop.”
“I will help support John's other side, but the fumes have swollen my eyes closed. Ronon, can you--”
“I can find the exit without seeing.”
“Good to know because I can't walk in a straight line. How does the song go? Four blind mice. See how they--”
“Shssssh.”
“What? Why?”
“It is John. I can not hear him breathing!”
“Oh, no, no, no! Don't...don't do this Colonel! I'm...Teyla? I'm too dizzy. I can't...I can't-”
“The entrance is over here!”
“Ronon! We can not--”
“Oh God! It's another tremor!”
“The mine's collapsing! Both of you run!”
“Ronon! What about you?”
“I've got to hold up the entrance so you guys can get out with Sheppard!”
“What! How? With your back?”
“Yeah.”
“Run!”
“But we can't leave--”
“--I'll be right behind you... Go! NOW!”
...
“Ronon, we are safe. You must move. Rodney says the gas levels are too--”
“I know. I...I can't...hold it up any longer.”
“Then stop playing Atlas and let go!”
“That was the plan.”
“No, wait! Rono--”
....
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