Inertia - Chapters 1 & 2 Edits
Aaaaand Chapter 1 is edited. Chapter 2 in progress! Woot.
Chapter 2 is kind of overgrown, I think. It has a lot more words than it needs, the dramatic flow of it is obstructed by all the excess description. I was trying to be original when I first wrote it but eh. This chapter has enormous dramatic potential. It's truly a wonderful setup for the rest of the story. But wow. So bogged down. So unfocused. So unstructured.
But that's not really surprising. I had no idea where I was going with that chapter when I wrote it. There's a reason I took a three-year hiatus from the fic after I posted it; it lacked the direction needed to make it a good lead-in to the next chapter, and the next. I didn't know what to do with it. But now I'm pretty sure I do. Bahah.
I think for once in my life I'm going to wait to upload the Chapter 1 edit until Chapter 2 is also ready to go. I think in some cultures they refer to that kind of thing as delayed gratification.
Chapter 2 is kind of overgrown, I think. It has a lot more words than it needs, the dramatic flow of it is obstructed by all the excess description. I was trying to be original when I first wrote it but eh. This chapter has enormous dramatic potential. It's truly a wonderful setup for the rest of the story. But wow. So bogged down. So unfocused. So unstructured.
But that's not really surprising. I had no idea where I was going with that chapter when I wrote it. There's a reason I took a three-year hiatus from the fic after I posted it; it lacked the direction needed to make it a good lead-in to the next chapter, and the next. I didn't know what to do with it. But now I'm pretty sure I do. Bahah.
I think for once in my life I'm going to wait to upload the Chapter 1 edit until Chapter 2 is also ready to go. I think in some cultures they refer to that kind of thing as delayed gratification.