Great chapter! Particularly liked the tension-maintenance throughout - lots of stories start with lots of tension which just stutters out over the chapters because its hard to maintain interest and just plain easier to write without complications. Kudos to you for avoiding the easy route!
I hope you have a better couple of days tomorrow. Using public computers is always such a barrel of laughs.
Oh, and by the way... this fic has the first original characters I have ever read without wanting to scream / throw up / laugh hysterically. *Ever.* Especially Anlia. Seriously, this is a compliment. I actually like the girl, and she's getting some from my favourite pilot. There must be something wrong with me!
Thanks again! Kim And now, I will go get a life.. or some sleep.. or something
No, thank YOU. Seriously. I think writing believable action is one of my weakest points (notice everything happens GROUNDSIDE so I don't have to attempt a space battle!), so I try to keep in mind occupied France during WWII. Just going to the market was incredibly dangerous for a member of the Resistance, and they must have lived with incredible tension & fear
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Re: Sue?! What Sue!sea_wrenApril 15 2005, 00:33:36 UTC
I have a theory about that. Writing is inherently an artistic verbal activity. To write huge complex space battles a la Mike Stackpole takes excellent visual skills, which you'd tend to find in scientific types. You don't often find individuals who are really talented in both fields, so don't be too hard on yourself there.
That's a very good point. And it's reminded me that I am not a real visual person-- big example, when I'm assembling something I follow the written instructions, even if poorly worded, rather than the diagram.
snipped Sue description This had me laughing like crazy!
When the girl is as bad as you describe, then slap her with a Sue label for sure! But I get just as bothered by the people who as soon as they see a female original character start squawking, "Mary Sue! Mary Sue!"
Besides, lots of detailed diagrammatic writing interrupts the flow of a story - there are times in the novels where I have to stop and draw mental diagrams to work out who's where and how they did whatever, at which point I lose the plot
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Re: Sue?! What Sue!sea_wrenApril 24 2005, 19:31:39 UTC
>snipped Sue description >This had me laughing like crazy!
Really?! *the mind boggles* I should apologise for that, I think. The ranting got a tad out of hand. Although you *know* that the story of Silvriana the Wonder-Sue and her Amazing Purple Prototype actually exists somewhere out there, *exactly* as described. With rave reviews from nine year olds, no doubt. Tragic.
It made me laugh because I read a very similar Rogue Squadron story years ago on ff.n. The lead character was a pilot, former Wraith infiltrator, Jedi, and Wedge's little sister. She was dating a canon character (Pash, I think), best friends with Han & Luke, told General Cracken how to gather Intel... and so on.
I honestly thought for the first couple chapters that it was a deliberate parody, because it touched on every Mary Sue cliche ever created.
Ahhh, good memories!
I should probably say here that I love Mike's stories before I start to criticize and sound like the evil uber-nasty. I'll also admit that I can't do better than him - after all, there's a reason
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Re: Sue?! What Sue!sea_wrenJune 25 2005, 14:59:03 UTC
I once wrote a little essay entitled "Why I Believe Mr. Mike doth Protest Too Much",
This I HAVE to see! *g*
It's around somewhere, probably in one of my boxes of diskettes. I'll have to dig through them; I was wanting to search out something the girls & I did last year, a gag-gift thingy called "Campfire on a Budget" where we wrote up an "instruction sheet" for making a fake campfire with colored cellophane & a flashlight & a bunch of Hershey's S'mores candy bars. And I think it's in the same box as the other.
I hope you have a better couple of days tomorrow. Using public computers is always such a barrel of laughs.
Oh, and by the way... this fic has the first original characters I have ever read without wanting to scream / throw up / laugh hysterically. *Ever.* Especially Anlia. Seriously, this is a compliment. I actually like the girl, and she's getting some from my favourite pilot. There must be something wrong with me!
Thanks again!
Kim
And now, I will go get a life.. or some sleep.. or something
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That's a very good point. And it's reminded me that I am not a real visual person-- big example, when I'm assembling something I follow the written instructions, even if poorly worded, rather than the diagram.
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This had me laughing like crazy!
When the girl is as bad as you describe, then slap her with a Sue label for sure! But I get just as bothered by the people who as soon as they see a female original character start squawking, "Mary Sue! Mary Sue!"
Besides, lots of detailed diagrammatic writing interrupts the flow of a story - there are times in the novels where I have to stop and draw mental diagrams to work out who's where and how they did whatever, at which point I lose the plot ( ... )
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>This had me laughing like crazy!
Really?! *the mind boggles* I should apologise for that, I think. The ranting got a tad out of hand. Although you *know* that the story of Silvriana the Wonder-Sue and her Amazing Purple Prototype actually exists somewhere out there, *exactly* as described. With rave reviews from nine year olds, no doubt. Tragic.
It made me laugh because I read a very similar Rogue Squadron story years ago on ff.n. The lead character was a pilot, former Wraith infiltrator, Jedi, and Wedge's little sister. She was dating a canon character (Pash, I think), best friends with Han & Luke, told General Cracken how to gather Intel... and so on.
I honestly thought for the first couple chapters that it was a deliberate parody, because it touched on every Mary Sue cliche ever created.
Ahhh, good memories!
I should probably say here that I love Mike's stories before I start to criticize and sound like the evil uber-nasty. I'll also admit that I can't do better than him - after all, there's a reason ( ... )
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This I HAVE to see! *g*
v. entertaining thread. Count me among the nonfans of Mr. Horn. And I'm a rabid MAS fangirl. :-)
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This I HAVE to see! *g*
It's around somewhere, probably in one of my boxes of diskettes. I'll have to dig through them; I was wanting to search out something the girls & I did last year, a gag-gift thingy called "Campfire on a Budget" where we wrote up an "instruction sheet" for making a fake campfire with colored cellophane & a flashlight & a bunch of Hershey's S'mores candy bars. And I think it's in the same box as the other.
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