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dearlydevoted June 20 2006, 17:49:02 UTC
It's kinda hard not to get with your fabulous writing, I'm in awe with it. Once again you made me cry, maybe it's bc I'm a real softy but you had me in tears with the previous chapter, too. Especially with the part of Nathan telling Haley and Katie that he'd have loved both and Haley's call was so heartbreaking. I'm commenting on it late, I know, I'm horrible at feedback. Just wanted to say those were my favorite parts ( ... )

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unwindingdreams June 21 2006, 04:40:36 UTC
Aw, thank you so much. Well, I might have a different perspective, but this is my saddest chapter. The part where Katie sees him in the cemetary but Luke and Haley can't...gah, the idea of that kills me for all four of them ( ... )

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dearlydevoted June 22 2006, 03:34:44 UTC
We are definitely in the same page about L/H. I usually run away from the plot of them involved romantically but I guess I trust you as a writer and am a fan of your stories so I knew and trusted, you would handle it well, and I was right. I can understand why it was hard for you to write, especially when it's nothing there for them, but I thought that it went well with the situation they were in. It was only understandable they would turned to eachother and that they were going to crushed against the wall bc of it. You definitely didn't disappoint on how you portrayed this :)

Thank you so much for telling me that you're doing the do-over. I gotta admit I was quite curious about it. I'm so intrigued as to see what's going to happen next and how things are going to change. It's such an interesting topic to touch. I can't wait to see how Katie's character will unfold and of course, how would have been like for NH under other circumstances.

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sugangel7 June 20 2006, 18:39:50 UTC
Quick thoughts/impression ( ... )

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sugangel7 June 20 2006, 18:41:42 UTC
And heh, I JUST noticed the icon you used for this post? Too perfect. I like! ;)

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unwindingdreams June 21 2006, 04:50:33 UTC
Hee. I was browsing icon_aholics after posting last night, and I found it. Had to switch it out immediately! Of course, maybe it needs a little footnote: '....or can you?'

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sugangel7 June 21 2006, 06:30:18 UTC
Heh...it's one of those never-ending questions of life....

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babyjamesismine June 25 2006, 17:38:57 UTC
oh man I could just cry and cry Brynne. I seriously almost teared up at 2 points in this chapter. The first is what you said is the saddest part to you and I have to agree....when katie could see Nathan and was upset that Haley and Luke didnt, and HL think she's going crazy, and Nathan feels responsible....oh my God that whole scene was just heartbreaking I cant even put it into words. And then at the mention of Haley crying in the bathroom after being with Luke...I could just see her thinking of Nathan. I mean Im a firm believer that sex is just better when you love the person, and are IN love with them. And I'm sure Haley being with Luke just reminded her that she didnt have Nathan and that kind of happiness. I dont know if that makes any sense whatsoever but its just so tragic....that even though she has Katie and Luke, she's still so very lonely. And the whole LH thing...I completely get it, and if people dont or wont read your story because of it theyre missing out. A) because this story is just so very well written and B ( ... )

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unwindingdreams July 2 2006, 05:20:17 UTC
Oh, Jackie, sorry for taking so long to get back to you on this one. I've been crazy busy, which is code for seriously lazy. :) But you've probably guessed this by now. Although I have been busy (being stood up by Alix...I say that now when she doesn't have internet so that when she does and reads this she'll feel bad because I'm diabolical like that), so maybe it cancels out ( ... )

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babyjamesismine July 2 2006, 15:29:46 UTC
Oh it's totally cool...I've been crazy busy, which is code for seriously lazy. Hee. Welcome to the club ;) hahahah @ Alix...aww poor girl with no internet. Sucks.

Oh some people only want what they want and if its not what they want then its "not good" Pfft...and some of those same people start stories they never even finish...but LOL dont worry that it still bothers you, it should, it bothers me! Especially because its just so rude...if you dont like the story then just dont read it. Plain and simple. Or if you'd started reading and can no longer tolerate it then stop and just dont say anything. Ugh. It bothers me too, trust me. LOL

I havent, and hope I never will, but I know what you mean about the "trapped in" feeling. That's where all the characters in the story are now.

It totally works and it definetly adds that extra layer to the story, now that it was missing, but it just enhances it now. Because I think if you mess with a piece of Fate, you're messing with all of it, but Fate might have a few tricks up it's sleeve to stop ( ... )

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desiderata_310 July 1 2006, 04:55:40 UTC
Hi Brynne. This is Becky from “They Can Watch” (cmba310 on the RC). I actually signed up for an LJ account just because I was so moved by this story that I had to comment…yes, that’s how much I love it.

My life and my work have been so busy for me lately that I’ve fallen woefully behind on my reading, but today I got this urge (and of course it was right in the middle of the work day) to read a good fic and I definitely found it here. I’m only sorry that I didn’t start reading sooner. Not that its not great to get to sit down and read 9 chapters all in one sitting, to not have to wait to hear the fate of each of these characters. But after getting so immersed in the story…feeling all of Nathan’s pain, confusion, anger and hope right along side him as he learned of his loved ones’ fate, enjoying both Keith’s comic relief and wisdom, falling in love with Katie, seeing the despair that touched and defined each character’s life...I feel even more desperate for another chapter. I literally can’t wait to see what happens next.
This is ( ... )

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unwindingdreams July 2 2006, 05:59:34 UTC
Hi Becky! Glad to see you around here; hope it's okay that I added you to my flist ( ... )

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desiderata_310 July 8 2006, 22:45:11 UTC
Hi Brynne ( ... )

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anonymous October 18 2006, 09:05:19 UTC
I posted a reply on this story yesterday at the Rivercourt, but am posting here also in case it doesn't reach.

I loved (love) this story and was sorry I never posted a reply. I didn't know how to put in words what it did to me. But i think tellling you that you're a fantastic writer and covey emotions, character wonderfully will be enough. I hope that someday you will finish this story for your fans and yourself. Thank you for this story.

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