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dearlydevoted June 20 2006, 17:49:02 UTC
It's kinda hard not to get with your fabulous writing, I'm in awe with it. Once again you made me cry, maybe it's bc I'm a real softy but you had me in tears with the previous chapter, too. Especially with the part of Nathan telling Haley and Katie that he'd have loved both and Haley's call was so heartbreaking. I'm commenting on it late, I know, I'm horrible at feedback. Just wanted to say those were my favorite parts.

I've always found the thought of L/H more than friends incestuous but I wasn't so freaked over it. Maybe it's bc I trust your writing. I can understand *why* they did it, and they are miserable and disgusted, which is how I've always imagined they would be, so it didn't matter to me that much in here.

I think the fact that Katie can see and speak to Nathan is genius and I don't know why but I'm kinda thinking Nathan won't choose the do-over. Maybe he'll find out Katie wouldn't exist and he's already attached to her, so he will actually choose to deal with what he's done and try to change things in the present. But I can be wrong.

***Haley freezes as he moves away, looking nonplussed for a second.***

This part was so great, btw. She 'felt' him. Le Sigh.

You are so talented, great job. Update soon! :D

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unwindingdreams June 21 2006, 04:40:36 UTC
Aw, thank you so much. Well, I might have a different perspective, but this is my saddest chapter. The part where Katie sees him in the cemetary but Luke and Haley can't...gah, the idea of that kills me for all four of them.

I've never had much interest in the L/H thing except for the friendship angle and the how it relates to N/H angle, so that was a total challenge to write. I can't even tell you. Even with the way it turned out, where it was a miserable, bleak thing that basically wrecked them both, it was still weird and hard to write. It actually surprises me that I didn't get flamed like crazy over it. :) Nice, but surprising. But I think most people get that this is rock bottom for both Luke and Haley. Like, there is no lower they could go than to be stuck in this horrible cycle where they are completely dependent on one another and hate every second of it, but can't/won't break out.

Hee, I'll just say that he definitely does the do-over. Because that was the impetus for this whole story - what would you do with a do-over? (Because I think inane thoughts like what would happen if the people in that car wreck had stopped to kiss their spouse before leaving? Would those twenty seconds have changed everything? Seriously, I think this crap.) But the basic idea will be to follow along vaguely with the show at least through the first season, and play with the idea of changing fate and parts of fate being immutable.

And I probably just rambled on for more than you ever cared for!

But thank you for reading, and thank you for taking the time to comment! I appreciate it greatly! :)

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dearlydevoted June 22 2006, 03:34:44 UTC
We are definitely in the same page about L/H. I usually run away from the plot of them involved romantically but I guess I trust you as a writer and am a fan of your stories so I knew and trusted, you would handle it well, and I was right. I can understand why it was hard for you to write, especially when it's nothing there for them, but I thought that it went well with the situation they were in. It was only understandable they would turned to eachother and that they were going to crushed against the wall bc of it. You definitely didn't disappoint on how you portrayed this :)

Thank you so much for telling me that you're doing the do-over. I gotta admit I was quite curious about it. I'm so intrigued as to see what's going to happen next and how things are going to change. It's such an interesting topic to touch. I can't wait to see how Katie's character will unfold and of course, how would have been like for NH under other circumstances.

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