oh man I could just cry and cry Brynne. I seriously almost teared up at 2 points in this chapter. The first is what you said is the saddest part to you and I have to agree....when katie could see Nathan and was upset that Haley and Luke didnt, and HL think she's going crazy, and Nathan feels responsible....oh my God that whole scene was just heartbreaking I cant even put it into words. And then at the mention of Haley crying in the bathroom after being with Luke...I could just see her thinking of Nathan. I mean Im a firm believer that sex is just better when you love the person, and are IN love with them. And I'm sure Haley being with Luke just reminded her that she didnt have Nathan and that kind of happiness. I dont know if that makes any sense whatsoever but its just so tragic....that even though she has Katie and Luke, she's still so very lonely. And the whole LH thing...I completely get it, and if people dont or wont read your story because of it theyre missing out. A) because this story is just so very well written and B) because there is a clear point to why you are going there. A lot of stories will just do the LH thing for "dramah" or whatever but there is a clear purpose here with that aspect and it comes shining through. And it just poignantly shows the state of Haley's, Luke's and Nathan's lives.
Katie being able to see Nathan is just BRILLIANT. B R I L L I A N T. It's so perfect. It's that thing that's gonna remind him, gonna keep him going, gonna give him something worth fighting for. Because Katie is supposed to be his. She knows it, he knows it, and I know it.
SIGH. Brynne this story is really very different but you've got me completely hooked. The sadder the chapters get the more I love it. I didn't know I had masochist tendancies LOL but seriously though I love it I think you're doing a great job with it, and touching on such a philosophical subject....that's really hard to write about and you're doing it. Kudos to you. =)
Oh, Jackie, sorry for taking so long to get back to you on this one. I've been crazy busy, which is code for seriously lazy. :) But you've probably guessed this by now. Although I have been busy (being stood up by Alix...I say that now when she doesn't have internet so that when she does and reads this she'll feel bad because I'm diabolical like that), so maybe it cancels out.
I knew most of you would "get it". Hell, maybe it was presumptious to think there was even something there to get, but I know there are people who are so closed off to anything but their own desires (write your own story, that's my advice) that they hated this. They can't see how sometimes people choose relationships that are safe or easy, just because they're scared to take a chance or they can't have what they really want. Why is the divorce rate so high? Duh, they figure it out later. Anyway, apparently it still bugs me that people are such close-minded egotists. :) In case you couldn't tell. Heh.
Maybe more than anyone, you hit the nail on the head in that this really does illustrate (in my brain) how far all three of them fell. For it to come to this, where Nathan is a washed-up drunk and Luke and Haley have pushed themselves into this relationship that physically sickens both of them is a pretty strong statement of wrongness. And they all know it, all three of them, and that's what really makes it sad at the end of the day. You're young, so I hope you've never experienced that feeling where you know you've put yourself in a place that you don't want to be, a place that you feel like you're trapped in. It sucks, but it is what it is in terms of this story.
Katie seeing Nathan is one of my absolute favorite parts. It was going to be a throwaway thing in the previous chapter, where she seemed to see him, but the opportunity was too good to pass up. I think it works, adds a new and interesting dimension both for Nathan's decision and how it effects his actions in the future. Because it will, don't you think? But then the whole story is about that - how he'll change things, what things won't change, and what things inadvertantly will. Because I think if you mess with a piece of Fate, you're messing with all of it, but Fate might have a few tricks up it's sleeve to stop you from changing it all.
Aaaand on that note, I think I think about this wayyyy too much. Thanks for the kind and well-thought out comments. I really do appreciate them, darlin'!
Oh it's totally cool...I've been crazy busy, which is code for seriously lazy. Hee. Welcome to the club ;) hahahah @ Alix...aww poor girl with no internet. Sucks.
Oh some people only want what they want and if its not what they want then its "not good" Pfft...and some of those same people start stories they never even finish...but LOL dont worry that it still bothers you, it should, it bothers me! Especially because its just so rude...if you dont like the story then just dont read it. Plain and simple. Or if you'd started reading and can no longer tolerate it then stop and just dont say anything. Ugh. It bothers me too, trust me. LOL
I havent, and hope I never will, but I know what you mean about the "trapped in" feeling. That's where all the characters in the story are now.
It totally works and it definetly adds that extra layer to the story, now that it was missing, but it just enhances it now. Because I think if you mess with a piece of Fate, you're messing with all of it, but Fate might have a few tricks up it's sleeve to stop you from changing it all. oh ya.
haha you have to think about it so you can write about it. Oh you are very welcome! Im very curious about how you're going to handle the "do-over" ;)
Katie being able to see Nathan is just BRILLIANT. B R I L L I A N T. It's so perfect. It's that thing that's gonna remind him, gonna keep him going, gonna give him something worth fighting for. Because Katie is supposed to be his. She knows it, he knows it, and I know it.
SIGH. Brynne this story is really very different but you've got me completely hooked. The sadder the chapters get the more I love it. I didn't know I had masochist tendancies LOL but seriously though I love it I think you're doing a great job with it, and touching on such a philosophical subject....that's really hard to write about and you're doing it. Kudos to you. =)
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I knew most of you would "get it". Hell, maybe it was presumptious to think there was even something there to get, but I know there are people who are so closed off to anything but their own desires (write your own story, that's my advice) that they hated this. They can't see how sometimes people choose relationships that are safe or easy, just because they're scared to take a chance or they can't have what they really want. Why is the divorce rate so high? Duh, they figure it out later. Anyway, apparently it still bugs me that people are such close-minded egotists. :) In case you couldn't tell. Heh.
Maybe more than anyone, you hit the nail on the head in that this really does illustrate (in my brain) how far all three of them fell. For it to come to this, where Nathan is a washed-up drunk and Luke and Haley have pushed themselves into this relationship that physically sickens both of them is a pretty strong statement of wrongness. And they all know it, all three of them, and that's what really makes it sad at the end of the day. You're young, so I hope you've never experienced that feeling where you know you've put yourself in a place that you don't want to be, a place that you feel like you're trapped in. It sucks, but it is what it is in terms of this story.
Katie seeing Nathan is one of my absolute favorite parts. It was going to be a throwaway thing in the previous chapter, where she seemed to see him, but the opportunity was too good to pass up. I think it works, adds a new and interesting dimension both for Nathan's decision and how it effects his actions in the future. Because it will, don't you think? But then the whole story is about that - how he'll change things, what things won't change, and what things inadvertantly will. Because I think if you mess with a piece of Fate, you're messing with all of it, but Fate might have a few tricks up it's sleeve to stop you from changing it all.
Aaaand on that note, I think I think about this wayyyy too much. Thanks for the kind and well-thought out comments. I really do appreciate them, darlin'!
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Oh some people only want what they want and if its not what they want then its "not good" Pfft...and some of those same people start stories they never even finish...but LOL dont worry that it still bothers you, it should, it bothers me! Especially because its just so rude...if you dont like the story then just dont read it. Plain and simple. Or if you'd started reading and can no longer tolerate it then stop and just dont say anything. Ugh. It bothers me too, trust me. LOL
I havent, and hope I never will, but I know what you mean about the "trapped in" feeling. That's where all the characters in the story are now.
It totally works and it definetly adds that extra layer to the story, now that it was missing, but it just enhances it now. Because I think if you mess with a piece of Fate, you're messing with all of it, but Fate might have a few tricks up it's sleeve to stop you from changing it all.
oh ya.
haha you have to think about it so you can write about it. Oh you are very welcome! Im very curious about how you're going to handle the "do-over" ;)
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