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pyrefly_sky

(Untitled)

Jan 01, 2006 02:19

Pairings: Auron / Lulu
Rating: 18+ sexual content
Disclaimer: I didn't make the characters, the game or the places... I also didn't make any money.
*Auron Spoliers*

I had some problems posting this before... so I deleted the last entry and posted it again!
I give you my first FFX fanfic:.( Perspective )

Comments 17

Hmm attackbanana January 30 2006, 03:56:19 UTC

A+
Makes me think about writing something similar for Miaka and Hotohori. Have you ever seen Fushigi Yugi? As much as I love seeing Tamahome and Miaka together (haven't finished the anime) I always did want her to cave in and have a tryst with Hotohori...

Re: Hmm pyrefly_sky January 30 2006, 09:51:30 UTC

Thank you! Guess all my innoccence is lost on you now?!
I haven't seen it... I shall find it somewhere though and get a copy! This isn't the first place I've seen you pimping it! ^_^

Re: Hmm attackbanana January 30 2006, 10:58:24 UTC

*snort* I know everyone has to act a certain way on the forums but I also knew that if you and I have so much in common, you couldn't be *that* innocent =)

YES you should =) But, I haven't seen all of it either and I could go buy whats out now, but I'm trying to find the limited edition boxed set thats way overprioced now because they dont make it anymore :P So youll probably finish it before me, no spoilers please! hehe

Re: Hmm pyrefly_sky January 30 2006, 11:25:33 UTC

If I can find it I promise not to spoil it!

I'm glad you liked this, people seem not to post on this one...although I have had a couple of comments about it off livejournal. Too squirmy to let my better half read it though.

rustehroll February 18 2006, 02:31:06 UTC

Colour me suitably impressed and ship me to Denmark, for a pairing I abhor entirely, I really enjoyed this. Well, both pairings I abhor, but that's my little personal hookup ( ... )

pyrefly_sky February 18 2006, 12:44:49 UTC

Squeeee!
Thank you sooo much for reviewing this! And for being so kind about it! *glomps*

Looks like we've both written a couple fic with couples we don't agree with and enjoyed it! We must have talent! ^_~

I also hate reading fics with crude and sappy nicknames; I try to stick to a sensual feel rather than cheapening the act entirely with such descriptions! Normally if I'm reading something and come across "her pot of honey desire" or "love stick" or some such crap I normally end my reading there. I think it's nice to leave the more squishy bits open to imagination rather than making readers gag on grossness.

I'm sooo pleased that it's in character, you would not believe the headache I had when writing this, the sex was the easiest bit, once that got going it wrote itself. But the conversation leading up to the sex was agony. Trying to get two characters who are normally silent to actually talk was the biggest problem! Heh, thats kinda why I just had Lulu take the offensive, I lost patience with the situation ( ... )

rustehroll February 19 2006, 10:45:05 UTC

Note: This will not be coherant as I am very tired. Sry for spelling/language errors ( ... )

pyrefly_sky February 20 2006, 01:07:23 UTC

*puts on critic hat and coughs*
~_^

The first sentence reads weird, I think it's because of the use of "looking" twice, maybe "to thank him for watching out for her again" would straighten it out?
I like the reflection on how she broke Wakka, very nice! "making the well-muscled Yevonite man curse his own god. " Just lovely!
Enjoying the image created by grazing her neck, his mouth fastened along her jaw *purr* Also liking:broken glory
I like the feeling to this, it seems much stronger right at the very end, the last paragraph holds more passion than the others.

I'll definately have a read of the whole thing when you're done if you'll permit it!

Thread 8

The Aulu fans say: Yum. auronlu March 13 2006, 09:33:01 UTC

Aha! Steamy, raw, and pleasant indeed for an Aulu connoisseur! Very enjoyable.

Thank you very much. I've seen this story pop up on google but the links were broken!

Question: is this piece posted on any archive where you have to register to read NC-17? I've made a directory of Aulu fic here --

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Re: The Aulu fans say: Yum. pyrefly_sky March 13 2006, 10:59:14 UTC

I'm glad you liked it! It seems to get overlooked alot!
Wow! I didn't know my story was on Google!
It's not anywhere protected, it's only here, could you reccomend anywhere I could put it where it's protected?! I'd love to be a part of your directory!
Don't even get me started on Rikku/Auron, there is no logical way in hell it would ever happen! He's too "focused" to have time to deal with Rikku's childishness. I wrote this simply because I could see it happening; Lulu is mature enough to know it won't last forever and it's unlikely to mess her up like it would completely ruin someone as immature as Rikku. If you'd like me e-mail it's: pyrefly.sky@googlemail.com

mneme_forgets March 26 2006, 17:34:00 UTC

As promised, because I hate just criticizing, here's my positive comments ( ... )

pyrefly_sky March 26 2006, 19:53:33 UTC

Thank you.

I like how Auron chooses Lulu out to know his secret. I think he is wrong in thinking she's terribly unnerved though. I mean, she doesn't do anything drastic, although she is shocked.Yeah shes not unnerved, but I don't see Auron having much experience working out womens' emotions, especially someone as private as Lu ( ... )

mneme_forgets March 26 2006, 20:07:01 UTC

I didn't see it that way, but thank you, I find your explanation convincing and it has helped me to see this story in a new light. I was a bit confused perhaps about Wakka and Lulu's relationship prior to this. It just seemed almost as if though they didn't have a relationship there was some kind of unspoken agreement between them. But now that you point this out as a kind of turning point in their relationship. I can appreciate Lulu's actions better. You're right about Lulu just being unaware as well. I'm sorry, I misunderstood a bit I believe.