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[pyrefly_sky]

Pairings: Auron / Lulu
Rating: 18+ sexual content
Disclaimer: I didn't make the characters, the game or the places... I also didn't make any money.
*Auron Spoliers*

I had some problems posting this before... so I deleted the last entry and posted it again!
I give you my first FFX fanfic:.

Comments

[rustehroll]

Colour me suitably impressed and ship me to Denmark, for a pairing I abhor entirely, I really enjoyed this. Well, both pairings I abhor, but that's my little personal hookup

[pyrefly_sky]

Squeeee!
Thank you sooo much for reviewing this! And for being so kind about it! *glomps*

Looks like we've both written a couple fic with couples we don't agree with and enjoyed it! We must have talent! ^_~

I also hate reading fics with crude and sappy nicknames; I try to stick to a sensual feel rather than cheapening the act entirely with such descriptions! Normally if I'm reading something and come across "her pot of honey desire" or "love stick" or some such crap I normally end my reading there. I think it's nice to leave the more squishy bits open to imagination rather than making readers gag on grossness.

I'm sooo pleased that it's in character, you would not believe the headache I had when writing this, the sex was the easiest bit, once that got going it wrote itself. But the conversation leading up to the sex was agony. Trying to get two characters who are normally silent to actually talk was the biggest problem! Heh, thats kinda why I just had Lulu take the offensive, I lost patience with the situation

[rustehroll]

Note: This will not be coherant as I am very tired. Sry for spelling/language errors

[pyrefly_sky]

*puts on critic hat and coughs*
~_^

The first sentence reads weird, I think it's because of the use of "looking" twice, maybe "to thank him for watching out for her again" would straighten it out?
I like the reflection on how she broke Wakka, very nice! "making the well-muscled Yevonite man curse his own god. " Just lovely!
Enjoying the image created by grazing her neck, his mouth fastened along her jaw *purr* Also liking:broken glory
I like the feeling to this, it seems much stronger right at the very end, the last paragraph holds more passion than the others.

I'll definately have a read of the whole thing when you're done if you'll permit it!

[rustehroll]

Omg! Looking x 2. I missed that! Ha ha. Thanks for pointing it out. :D

Yes, I think I'm going to write an off-shoot called "Breaking Wakka" or something like that. Shivery shiver goodness.

This is actually from the third chapter of my Necrosis Infinitum fic, and that's about as far as it goes. It cuts to a different scene at that point. Thanks for your comments on broken glory, I'm in love with that line too.

It is being posted on FF.Net... don't want to scare the children.

[pyrefly_sky]

I had a random thought to share with you...

Have you heard Pink's song: Like a Pill. ?
It's totaly Rikku's point of view if her and Auron ever (Yevon forbid) did something. Everytime I hear it I picture her breaking down through the following neglect. Maybe it's just me... but I thought I'd share!

[rustehroll]

YES omg YES you are so right. HA HA.

I'm becoming a (closet) Aurrikku fan. It's horrible, I know.

Like a Pill... I'm gonna have to write a fic on that. :\ You're evil. Giving me more ideas.

[pyrefly_sky]

heehee I'm sooooo glad you agree! It's been messing around in my head each time I put the cd player on! I was going to write it myself, but I can't get Rikku's character (most likely because I find her painfully irritating at times) and It would most likley be something written from her POV and not Auron's.
Now Auron is no real challenge to me, he and I are oddly on-par with thought processes, despite what I'm like on here, I'm pretty much silent in the real world. I also possess that cynical eye and dark vision. ^-^

I must be allowed to aid you in some way on that fic! Use me as a idea board if you wish. :)