3485: Reality Bends - Harry "Harri" Potter
Don't forget about Tropes Sue Week either. I'm looking for help finding entries for said week. I'm also looking for some feedback on this.
Here is day six. The character is Shizuka from Naruto.
TITLE: Reality Bends
PERPETRATOR: Madrigal-in-training
SUE-O-METER:
(toxic)
COVER/BANNER ART: The writer's avatar is a chibi Harry.
SUMMARY:”Naruto woke up to a black-haired, green-eyed toddler sitting on his chest. The accompanying letter claimed that the kid was family. What other choice did he have but to take the child in? Fifteen year old genin, saddled with a kid, and still a virgin. God, Ero-Sennin was never going to let him live this down. A Naruto adopts Harry story.”
FULL NAME: Fawkes and Harry Potter
SPECIES: Lily is related to the Uzumaki Clan. Harry is Naruto's cousin because “your Uzumaki parent was from the same branch”. I'm still trying to figure out exactly what the writer meant.
HAIR: n/a
EYES: n/a
MARKINGS: n/a
POSSESSIONS: Harry has a note saying “Orphan. Family. Whirlpool.”
CONNECTION TO CANON: Naruto finds “Harri”. “When Harri was finished with his nonsensical explanation, he stuck his fisst back into his mouth, content.” Everybody starts gawking at the toddler in his arms. Naruto gets excited at first and spins Harri around, but then gets upset when he realizes somebody killed Harri's “parents... my cousins”. The plot is confusing and ends up with a suggestion to visit Nadeshiko village. Eventually fawkes goes back letting Dumbledore know things are all right.
ORIGIN: Harry misses “Daddy Pwongs” and “Unca Pafoo”.
SPECIAL ABILITIES: We have another story where the characters cross to another dimension because of differencing magic. This magic belongs to Lily.
NOTES: I saw the summary and felt quite giddy. I expected we would either end up with a highly toxic story featured today, or the story featured would be one of those which actually managed to turn certain tropes associated with Sues on their head. Even if the story is a Sue/Stu I think I'll enjoy reading the piece.
I decided upon reading the story that the work definitely is toxic. Naruto trying to take care of a baby is amusing. It's also amusing seeing Naruto making mature decisions despite the fact this is OoC for him. I'm a bit bothered with how the writer uses the Japanese language, and the story is confusing in places.
On further note Lily being related to the Uzumaki clan is interesting, but I think the Weasley's honestly make more sense.
SAMPLE:
Another creature appeared at the end of the street. Much like his Human, this beautiful creature of red and gold was unwelcome here at Private Drive. Fawkes had actually arrived at the area far earlier in the day, but had waited for his Human to bring the boy over here. He gave a soft, mournful trill.
This newly orphaned boy was being left to Muggles with some of the most petty souls Fawkes had ever encountered. Sometimes, Albus was an idiot.
Fawkes gave another trill, before flying down to land besides the sleeping wizard-child. With his beak, he nudged away the part of the blanket that covered the boy's face. The slimy, cold feeling of Dark Magic on the boy made him cringe, before Fawkes regained control of himself and moved closer. A few tears ran down the wizard-child's face, making Harry squirm in discomfort from the odd sensation. The darkness faded a little, but the scar remained, much to Fawkes' annoyance.
The immortal creature of light flew back to his previous spot to pick up a piece of parchment he'd stolen from Albus and left in the bushes. Carefully lifting a claw, he dipped it in a bottle of ink also nicked from Albus, and slowly sketched a few of those shapes that he was familiar with. He waited for the ink to dry- impatient because it was chilly, and the night was terrible, and he wouldn't have even had to do this had Albus simply thought the situation through first. Once the ink had dried to his satisfaction, Fawkes delicately picked it up and nestled it in between the boy and his blanket.
The next part, Fawkes knew, would be tricky. He was banking on that odd energy source he'd felt on Lily-witch some five or six years ago. That energy wasn't the type that he was familiar with, the one that wizards termed "magic". This was also "magic", but it was not wizard-magic. Wizard-magic centered around a core, a wellspring of power that resided in the naval area and pulsed with a steady, comforting light. It was a wizard's second heartbeat.
This wizard-child had very strong wizard-magic, but he had very strong other-magic too. Other-magic was different from wizard-magic; it ran all over the body with no center. Other-magic hummed, and spun, and danced; it flitted across the boy's body like a cloak, a protector, a friend. It was playful magic, rich in power and reckless abandon. He could see tendrils of it wafting over the boy's skin, coiling and uncoiling to form ever more complex swirls in the shape of whirlpools. Then the energy would crescend, and a wave of other-magic would slam the whirlpools and scatter them into tendrils again, making the entire process start over again.
This was something Fawkes could see and he gazed at it in wonder. Hesitantly, the phoenix closed it's eyes and employed one of the greatest powers its' species possessed. He extended his consciousness and "touched" the magic.
Fawkes had been a little concerned about how the other-magic would react. He had never "touched" the other-magic before, and unlike wizard-magic, this energy might react in a negative manner. He need not have worried, for the magic embraced him with all of the eagerness and warmth of a child. The other-magic was lonely. It's only other source of other-magic had disappeared.
Here is day six. The character is Shizuka from Naruto.
TITLE: Reality Bends
PERPETRATOR: Madrigal-in-training
SUE-O-METER:
(toxic)
COVER/BANNER ART: The writer's avatar is a chibi Harry.
SUMMARY:”Naruto woke up to a black-haired, green-eyed toddler sitting on his chest. The accompanying letter claimed that the kid was family. What other choice did he have but to take the child in? Fifteen year old genin, saddled with a kid, and still a virgin. God, Ero-Sennin was never going to let him live this down. A Naruto adopts Harry story.”
FULL NAME: Fawkes and Harry Potter
SPECIES: Lily is related to the Uzumaki Clan. Harry is Naruto's cousin because “your Uzumaki parent was from the same branch”. I'm still trying to figure out exactly what the writer meant.
HAIR: n/a
EYES: n/a
MARKINGS: n/a
POSSESSIONS: Harry has a note saying “Orphan. Family. Whirlpool.”
CONNECTION TO CANON: Naruto finds “Harri”. “When Harri was finished with his nonsensical explanation, he stuck his fisst back into his mouth, content.” Everybody starts gawking at the toddler in his arms. Naruto gets excited at first and spins Harri around, but then gets upset when he realizes somebody killed Harri's “parents... my cousins”. The plot is confusing and ends up with a suggestion to visit Nadeshiko village. Eventually fawkes goes back letting Dumbledore know things are all right.
ORIGIN: Harry misses “Daddy Pwongs” and “Unca Pafoo”.
SPECIAL ABILITIES: We have another story where the characters cross to another dimension because of differencing magic. This magic belongs to Lily.
NOTES: I saw the summary and felt quite giddy. I expected we would either end up with a highly toxic story featured today, or the story featured would be one of those which actually managed to turn certain tropes associated with Sues on their head. Even if the story is a Sue/Stu I think I'll enjoy reading the piece.
I decided upon reading the story that the work definitely is toxic. Naruto trying to take care of a baby is amusing. It's also amusing seeing Naruto making mature decisions despite the fact this is OoC for him. I'm a bit bothered with how the writer uses the Japanese language, and the story is confusing in places.
On further note Lily being related to the Uzumaki clan is interesting, but I think the Weasley's honestly make more sense.
SAMPLE:
Another creature appeared at the end of the street. Much like his Human, this beautiful creature of red and gold was unwelcome here at Private Drive. Fawkes had actually arrived at the area far earlier in the day, but had waited for his Human to bring the boy over here. He gave a soft, mournful trill.
This newly orphaned boy was being left to Muggles with some of the most petty souls Fawkes had ever encountered. Sometimes, Albus was an idiot.
Fawkes gave another trill, before flying down to land besides the sleeping wizard-child. With his beak, he nudged away the part of the blanket that covered the boy's face. The slimy, cold feeling of Dark Magic on the boy made him cringe, before Fawkes regained control of himself and moved closer. A few tears ran down the wizard-child's face, making Harry squirm in discomfort from the odd sensation. The darkness faded a little, but the scar remained, much to Fawkes' annoyance.
The immortal creature of light flew back to his previous spot to pick up a piece of parchment he'd stolen from Albus and left in the bushes. Carefully lifting a claw, he dipped it in a bottle of ink also nicked from Albus, and slowly sketched a few of those shapes that he was familiar with. He waited for the ink to dry- impatient because it was chilly, and the night was terrible, and he wouldn't have even had to do this had Albus simply thought the situation through first. Once the ink had dried to his satisfaction, Fawkes delicately picked it up and nestled it in between the boy and his blanket.
The next part, Fawkes knew, would be tricky. He was banking on that odd energy source he'd felt on Lily-witch some five or six years ago. That energy wasn't the type that he was familiar with, the one that wizards termed "magic". This was also "magic", but it was not wizard-magic. Wizard-magic centered around a core, a wellspring of power that resided in the naval area and pulsed with a steady, comforting light. It was a wizard's second heartbeat.
This wizard-child had very strong wizard-magic, but he had very strong other-magic too. Other-magic was different from wizard-magic; it ran all over the body with no center. Other-magic hummed, and spun, and danced; it flitted across the boy's body like a cloak, a protector, a friend. It was playful magic, rich in power and reckless abandon. He could see tendrils of it wafting over the boy's skin, coiling and uncoiling to form ever more complex swirls in the shape of whirlpools. Then the energy would crescend, and a wave of other-magic would slam the whirlpools and scatter them into tendrils again, making the entire process start over again.
This was something Fawkes could see and he gazed at it in wonder. Hesitantly, the phoenix closed it's eyes and employed one of the greatest powers its' species possessed. He extended his consciousness and "touched" the magic.
Fawkes had been a little concerned about how the other-magic would react. He had never "touched" the other-magic before, and unlike wizard-magic, this energy might react in a negative manner. He need not have worried, for the magic embraced him with all of the eagerness and warmth of a child. The other-magic was lonely. It's only other source of other-magic had disappeared.