3253: Harry Potter the Clockwork Mage - Lily, James, Dumbledore, Alice, Frank

May 23, 2014 22:21

I found this lin of the day for today.

TITLE: Harry Potter the Clockwork Mage
PERPETRATOR: TheRavenIS
SUE-O-METER:
(toxic)
COVER/BANNER ART: It is a clip of their avatar, which is an old car.
SUMMARY:”The Potters find out that they are being manipulated. They decide to act and find a way to trick the manipulator. The Potters find a secret power that has been hidden within the family since the 1850's. This is an AU story and will have OoC for main characters. Notice: to all readers, This is re-worked story, I am posting them as I can. TY”
FULL NAME: Lily, James, Dumbledore, Alice, Frank
SPECIES: Idiots...
HAIR: n/a
EYES: n/a
MARKINGS: n/a
POSSESSIONS: n/a
CONNECTION TO CANON: Dumbledore shows up and tells them about the prophesy. Lily's doesn't believe in prophesies and wonders who Voldemort is because “many of the spells he, Voldemort, had used were the exact same as the ones she had learned at Hogwarts.” Then we have the Longbottom's and the Potters whining about Dumbledore and the prophesy. James goes and does something “special” with the Goblins.
ORIGIN: Lily and James took stupid pills and think that Dumbledore was trying to manipulate them, so they go and decide to trick the manipulator in a very stupid way. (Actually... I wish it was an issue of them taking stupid pills.)
SPECIAL ABILITIES: Lily doesn't believe in prophesies despite the fact she should know that other people

NOTES: It seems a lot of the stories that try to make it out as if Dumbledore was manipulating people make the characters act like idiots and say some really stupid things. Thankfully there was only one chapter of this one... the second chapter is an author's note about their computer crashing. And then I realized that it was a rewrite of another story. Here. I tried reading it and became REALLY glad there wasn't ANOTHER chapter up. It's pretty much original fiction, not fanfiction.


SAMPLE:

Here is the list...
Harry Potter a Clockwork Mage

Harold James Potter = Harry James Potter

James Charlus Potter = Vernon Dursley until Harry left for Hogwarts

Lily Marie Potter nee' Evans = Petunia Dursley until Harry left for Hogwarts

Steven Brand = Sirius Orion Black

Simon Tiberius Prince = Severus Tobias Snape

Narcissa Prince nee' Black = Narcissa Malfoy nee' Black

Drake Centauries Prince = Draco Scorpios Malfoy

Xenophilius Goodelove = Xenophilius Lovegood

Clair Goodelove = Celeste Lovegood nee' Olivander

Luna Goodelove = Luna Lovegood

Isabella Regina Brand= Bellatrix Black

Hermione Isabella Jane Brand = Hermione Jane Granger

Richard Lawrence = Remus John Lupin

Patricia Lawrence = Petunia Evans

Douglas Lawrence = Dudley Dursley

Here is the actual sample...

Dumbledore took a deep breath of effect then began, "Lily, James, I was informed of a Prophesy; "The one with the power to vanquish the Dark Lord approaches... Born to those who have thrice defied him, born as the seventh month dies... and the Dark Lord will mark him as his equal, but he will have power the Dark Lord knows not... and either must die at the hand of the other for neither can live while the other survives..."

Lily didn't take much stock in the Prophesy, "When did you hear this?" Lily was angry but was going to listen, "Harry was born a year ago, so was Neville, both were born at the end of July." Lily did not like this, "If he had had the knowledge a year ago then why did you hold it back from them until now. Headmaster, waiting to tell us this might make it so it cannot be broken, not all Prophesy's are true; some only happen when people act to make them happen, then they become self filling. "

James looked at Lily, "Lily, does it matter if the Headmaster believes that this could mean Harry or Neville, shouldn't we listen?"

Lily looked at James, "Listen, yes we can do that, but we should also wonder as to why he waited until now to tell us." Lily always had a feeling of unease around Dumbledore, most of it came from the way he treated the Slytherin students. "James, yes we listen and then think it over and then we decide what to do."

Dumbledore smiled and sat down, "James, Lily, I was not certain myself until you and the Longbottoms had confronted Voldemort the three times, that the Prophesy called for, until then," looking at the two and using the twinkle that was a subtle magic that allowed, him to influenced other to trust him. "I hoped that this was not going to come to pass which was why I did not tell you till then."

Lily looked at Dumbledore, "So Headmaster, you wait until we celebrate our son's first birthday and you tell us now," Lily was more angry than scared for themselves or her son. "Why did it have to be now? You could have waited until tomorrow and then you could have told Frank and Alice at the same time."

Dumbledore looked sadly at her, "Lily, I wanted to make sure that the three of you were safe and informed first, I feel that Harry is the one that Voldemort will attack," taking a breath and looking at James, "your son is a half-blood and to Voldemort he sees them in almost the same light as muggleborn."

Lily looked at James then Dumbledore, "I do wonder Headmaster, just who is Voldemort? I've looked into this and can find no family named Voldemort in any English speaking country." He had to have gone to a magical school." Lily had noticed that many of the spells he, Voldemort, had used were the exact same as the ones she had learned at Hogwarts.

James looked at Lily and nodded, "Headmaster, thank you for telling us this," James trusted Lily and if she didn't feel that this so-called Prophesy was not real he would let her make the call if they did as Dumbledore wanted them to do.

Dumbledore left after getting the Potters to think about what he had told them. "I hope you two decide to go into hiding." The twinkle in the eye and the grandfatherly demeanor was something he had used for so many years. "Contact me if you need to talk." Smiling as he reached for Floo powder, "I just want the three of you safe."

Dumbledore then tossed in the powder and called out clearly, "Headmasters Office Hogwarts!" He then stepped into the green flames and disappeared.

stu - frank longbottom, rating - toxic, sue - lily potter, p - not fanfic and/or crossover, stu - james potter, stu - albus dumbledore, sue - alice longbottom, pw - ron the death eater

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