5093: Lighting, Part 1 - Harry Potter
Today's entry is likely written by a Stuthor instead of a Suethor.
Title: Lightning, Part 1
There’s also Lightning (Preview post) on their profile.
Perpetrator: The New Yoork Bear
Sue-O-Meter: I’m giving this one the Awful rating because it just never had that pizzaz a Toxic story has, yet despite the plot-what-plot going on there is enough elements to keep it at that Awful rating rather than just Bad because that’s all we’re getting.
Cover/Banner Art: ???
Summary: “In the Chamber of Secrets unknown powers awaken in Harry and he discovers that he's a mutant as well as a wizard. Now he's off to America with Professor Xavier to try to control his new powers. Featuring the original X-Men. Not a time travel story. Marvel Universe moved forward 30 years. Good Dumbledore” and “Harry Potter helped found the original X-Men. Now, after ten months away he has returned to Hogwarts with his teammates where Hermione and Ron will finally learn the truth about where he's been. Not a time travel story. Marvel Universe moved forward 30 years. Good Dumbledore.”
Full Name: Harry Potter
Sueworts House(s): Quanonreip for this one, but there aren't any romances yet, there is no focus on angsty things so that means the only other possible one Harry might eventually end up in is Sparklypoo, but even then it's not quite fitting in there.
Species: Mutant Harry who happens to covneniently live in a world where Dumbledore and Xavier know each other just so the plot, what little there is, can happen.
Hair: n/a
Eyes: n/a
Markings: n/a
Poessessions: n/a
Connection to Canon: Chapter 1: Harry develops magical abilities. Somehow Xavier is able to pick up on the fact Harry has now developed his powers despite all the things put in place to keep Muggles unaware of Hogwarts, but he’s able to use Cerebro despite the untraceable magic. We learn he’s actually in contact with Dumbledore, a very convenient plot device, nay? Instantly, Harry is okayed despite the fact the Dursley family offers blood protections to go off to Xaiver’s school. Do you know what makes more sense? As one of the reviewers for the first chapter put it, “Yeah let’s keep the one who used unknown magic and got hit by a Basalisk in the office and keep grilling him for information instead of having a healer check him out…” His clothes stick to him in chapter two, which makes sense, as does giving off electric discharges when touching metal objects, but I can’t help but think I’ve seen this all done before. Chapter three involves him meeting the other mutants at the institute. Chapter four is him getting unpacked. Harry is informed where he can find Wizarding stuff in America. Chapter five is visiting Gringotts in America, where *GASP* it’s all done so that Harry can learn that he is not only a Potter, but a Peverell, a Gryffindor, Hufflepuff, Ravenclaw and Slytherin “blood and conquest”, but “Heir Presumptive to House of Black”. It also goes into his monetary values where he gets a monthly return around 50 galleons which he wants half in Wizard and half in dollars. Chapter six is about training and Harry gets to see the Jurrassic Park movie. Dumbledore explains things in chapter seven where Dumbledore explains why Harry was stuck with Petunia and now there are “new options” to protect Harry just because the writer says it is so. Then again, the writer thinks Dumbledore set up blood wards to make it work rather than a protection put into place because of Lily’s sacrifice. They talk about a guy with wings flying around after “the days at Xavier’s school began to fly by for Harry” because actually developing bonds between Harry and the X-Men isn’t at all important, it just is. Yup. Angel joins in chapter eight. Harry breaks the statute of secrecy with the Mutanrs. Chapter nine is his birthday, and absolutely no plot or point to the story. Dr. Strange steps in to help in chapter ten because they need somebody to hunt Horcrux despite the fact there isn’t yet any proof they exist.. Chapter eleven involves Xavier and Dumbledore discussing the M-Gene. Dumbledore tells him in turn about the prophecy. (Yeah, the story is really not going anywhere. With all the plot-what-plot going on, I’m skipping ahead and not describing, or I thought I would. Chapter twelve - he gets his codename. Chapter thirteen, I must say when one has two chapters in a story which contain titles about the team training. Well, of course Harry gets to go to a NEW magical school and doesn’t have to deal with the whole thing with Sirius. That’s chapter fourteen. Chapter five is everyone realizing Harry isn’t coming back and Lupin learning Harry’s been sent away and being fine with it because Dumbledore will put in a word for him. The last chapter, chapter sixteen of what is now a 50k story is the first mission and still no real development beyond Harry just being there and the other characters just being there.
Origin: Harry suddenly develops powers he didn’t have in canon just so he can be a Mutant and get sent off to the X-Men despite the fact he does actually still need to learn to use his magical abilities. The writer admits that the actual story might not match up to the preview. From what I gathered in chapter two, the reason his powers are electric is because of his scar. In the long run, I can’t help but think the writer is using Harry as a self-insert for themselves into both worlds.
Special Abilities: Harry can control electricity because it is a convenient plot device to cross over these two super awesome series and make Harry super awesome. (He’s also telekinetic.) In the reviews for chapter two, one of the reviewers is hoping that Harry will be a straight-A student under Xavier in Muggle school, and I’m hoping that the writer wouldn’t go that rough. As of chapter seven, Dumbledore, a male, is now the reason why Harry is protected because of his “blood wards” thus diminishing the fact it was all Lily, a female, as to why Harry was protected. (Yeah, I suspect the writer is a Stuthor.)
Notes: The writer’s profile includes seven other stories, an HP crossover with D&D where “Harry’s parents were really Bahamut, deity and king of the good dragons, and his mate (an OC) who had incarnated themselves to live mortal lives as James and Lily Potter. Things went very differenrtly for Harry adter Voldemort’s attack,” a fanfic for Happy Tree Friends, a Doctor Who/Sonic the Hedghog story, a story where Umbridge attempts going to the moon, a DC Superheros crossover where “Harry is descended from the New Gods of Apokolupse” with thunder powers instead, a “one shot is how I wish the summer after Harry’s 4th year at Hogwarts could have gone - if only someone had used some common sense (which Wizards seem to notoriously lack)” and a story where “Dolores Umbridge faces her punishment from Wizengamot. Things don’t exactly go as planned.”
Take the above as you will, but I wouldn’t argue that the reason the summer after Harry’s first year turned out the way it did had nothing to do with lacking in common sense, but I don’t think having Hermione call and tell his aunt off and saying she’ll send the police after her when there is no legal grounds to do so - but hey, Suethors and in this case the Stuthors actually think it is, or they exaggerate the abuse he faced from the Dursleys to the point it was. And then everyone rescues him at the end, but he’s got even more witnesses to the Dementors, such as Madame Bones and Shacklebolt. Why are they there? Common sense dictates that they should be even though the writer thinks they should be. At this point, I’ve only seen the summaries for the two stories.
Sample:
"What now?" Harry asked himself, "that magic won't hold it forever - "
He felt a different, almost static-like, feeling in his hands and looked at them to see that sparks of what looked like electricity were dancing around his fingers. Without knowing how he channeled this new force up from his hands through the sword and up towards the monster. A bright lightning bolt flared up from his hands and struck the basilisk right in the head stunning it into unconsciousness.
Unfortunately this meant that the basilisk fell straight down onto Harry. Its mouth, which was still open wide, came right down on the sword that Harry was holding over his head. The sword went right through the roof of the basilisk's mouth and into its brain, killing it. But at the same time one if its poisonous fangs pierced deep into Harry's arm...
"Fawkes saved my life" Harry told his listeners in Professor McGonagall's office afterwards, "when he used his tears to heal me. Then I stabbed Riddle's diary with the fang which destroyed it and him. When Riddle was gone Ginny woke up. We left the chamber, rejoined Lockhart and Ron who had cleared a hole for us to get back through the rock fall and Fawkes brought all of us back up into the castle."
Molly and Arthur Weasley, Ginny's and Ron's parents, looked gobsmacked at what they were hearing but also very thankful to get their daughter back alive. Ginny had been crying over the whole business even though it hadn't really been her fault. Ron was glad to be back in the castle, Professor McGonagall looked like she might have a heart attack, Professor Lockhart, who had lost his memory during the ordeal when he tried unsuccessfully to obliviate Harry and Ron only to have the spell backfire on him, stood in a corner with a vacant expression on his face, and Professor Dumbledore, the school headmaster, simply twinkled at everyone in his usual way without seeming all that surprised by everything.
"Most remarkable" said Professor Dumbledore, "a very impressive display of accidental magic. Well done Mr. Potter."
Dumbledore sent the Weasleys to the hospital wing so Ginny could be checked out to make sure she was really all right. Lockhart went with them. Professor McGonagall was sent to alert the kitchens that a feast was going to be held. Harry, however, stayed behind at Dumbledore's request.
"Headmaster" Harry asked Dumbledore when they were alone, "was that really accidental magic that I used? It didn't feel like my usual magic."
"What did it feel like my boy?" asked Dumbledore.
"I don't know" said Harry, "it felt different somehow, like I wasn't using magic at all but something else."
"Hmm" said Dumbledore looking at Harry thoughtfully, "I don't know what else it could have been although if you want we can investigate it and see if we can find another explanation. In the meantime I would advise you to keep your thoughts about this to yourself. If anyone asks you just keep telling them it was accidental magic."
"All right" said Harry nodding his agreement as the conversation turned to other topics.
Title: Lightning, Part 1
There’s also Lightning (Preview post) on their profile.
Perpetrator: The New Yoork Bear
Sue-O-Meter: I’m giving this one the Awful rating because it just never had that pizzaz a Toxic story has, yet despite the plot-what-plot going on there is enough elements to keep it at that Awful rating rather than just Bad because that’s all we’re getting.
Cover/Banner Art: ???
Summary: “In the Chamber of Secrets unknown powers awaken in Harry and he discovers that he's a mutant as well as a wizard. Now he's off to America with Professor Xavier to try to control his new powers. Featuring the original X-Men. Not a time travel story. Marvel Universe moved forward 30 years. Good Dumbledore” and “Harry Potter helped found the original X-Men. Now, after ten months away he has returned to Hogwarts with his teammates where Hermione and Ron will finally learn the truth about where he's been. Not a time travel story. Marvel Universe moved forward 30 years. Good Dumbledore.”
Full Name: Harry Potter
Sueworts House(s): Quanonreip for this one, but there aren't any romances yet, there is no focus on angsty things so that means the only other possible one Harry might eventually end up in is Sparklypoo, but even then it's not quite fitting in there.
Species: Mutant Harry who happens to covneniently live in a world where Dumbledore and Xavier know each other just so the plot, what little there is, can happen.
Hair: n/a
Eyes: n/a
Markings: n/a
Poessessions: n/a
Connection to Canon: Chapter 1: Harry develops magical abilities. Somehow Xavier is able to pick up on the fact Harry has now developed his powers despite all the things put in place to keep Muggles unaware of Hogwarts, but he’s able to use Cerebro despite the untraceable magic. We learn he’s actually in contact with Dumbledore, a very convenient plot device, nay? Instantly, Harry is okayed despite the fact the Dursley family offers blood protections to go off to Xaiver’s school. Do you know what makes more sense? As one of the reviewers for the first chapter put it, “Yeah let’s keep the one who used unknown magic and got hit by a Basalisk in the office and keep grilling him for information instead of having a healer check him out…” His clothes stick to him in chapter two, which makes sense, as does giving off electric discharges when touching metal objects, but I can’t help but think I’ve seen this all done before. Chapter three involves him meeting the other mutants at the institute. Chapter four is him getting unpacked. Harry is informed where he can find Wizarding stuff in America. Chapter five is visiting Gringotts in America, where *GASP* it’s all done so that Harry can learn that he is not only a Potter, but a Peverell, a Gryffindor, Hufflepuff, Ravenclaw and Slytherin “blood and conquest”, but “Heir Presumptive to House of Black”. It also goes into his monetary values where he gets a monthly return around 50 galleons which he wants half in Wizard and half in dollars. Chapter six is about training and Harry gets to see the Jurrassic Park movie. Dumbledore explains things in chapter seven where Dumbledore explains why Harry was stuck with Petunia and now there are “new options” to protect Harry just because the writer says it is so. Then again, the writer thinks Dumbledore set up blood wards to make it work rather than a protection put into place because of Lily’s sacrifice. They talk about a guy with wings flying around after “the days at Xavier’s school began to fly by for Harry” because actually developing bonds between Harry and the X-Men isn’t at all important, it just is. Yup. Angel joins in chapter eight. Harry breaks the statute of secrecy with the Mutanrs. Chapter nine is his birthday, and absolutely no plot or point to the story. Dr. Strange steps in to help in chapter ten because they need somebody to hunt Horcrux despite the fact there isn’t yet any proof they exist.. Chapter eleven involves Xavier and Dumbledore discussing the M-Gene. Dumbledore tells him in turn about the prophecy. (Yeah, the story is really not going anywhere. With all the plot-what-plot going on, I’m skipping ahead and not describing, or I thought I would. Chapter twelve - he gets his codename. Chapter thirteen, I must say when one has two chapters in a story which contain titles about the team training. Well, of course Harry gets to go to a NEW magical school and doesn’t have to deal with the whole thing with Sirius. That’s chapter fourteen. Chapter five is everyone realizing Harry isn’t coming back and Lupin learning Harry’s been sent away and being fine with it because Dumbledore will put in a word for him. The last chapter, chapter sixteen of what is now a 50k story is the first mission and still no real development beyond Harry just being there and the other characters just being there.
Origin: Harry suddenly develops powers he didn’t have in canon just so he can be a Mutant and get sent off to the X-Men despite the fact he does actually still need to learn to use his magical abilities. The writer admits that the actual story might not match up to the preview. From what I gathered in chapter two, the reason his powers are electric is because of his scar. In the long run, I can’t help but think the writer is using Harry as a self-insert for themselves into both worlds.
Special Abilities: Harry can control electricity because it is a convenient plot device to cross over these two super awesome series and make Harry super awesome. (He’s also telekinetic.) In the reviews for chapter two, one of the reviewers is hoping that Harry will be a straight-A student under Xavier in Muggle school, and I’m hoping that the writer wouldn’t go that rough. As of chapter seven, Dumbledore, a male, is now the reason why Harry is protected because of his “blood wards” thus diminishing the fact it was all Lily, a female, as to why Harry was protected. (Yeah, I suspect the writer is a Stuthor.)
Notes: The writer’s profile includes seven other stories, an HP crossover with D&D where “Harry’s parents were really Bahamut, deity and king of the good dragons, and his mate (an OC) who had incarnated themselves to live mortal lives as James and Lily Potter. Things went very differenrtly for Harry adter Voldemort’s attack,” a fanfic for Happy Tree Friends, a Doctor Who/Sonic the Hedghog story, a story where Umbridge attempts going to the moon, a DC Superheros crossover where “Harry is descended from the New Gods of Apokolupse” with thunder powers instead, a “one shot is how I wish the summer after Harry’s 4th year at Hogwarts could have gone - if only someone had used some common sense (which Wizards seem to notoriously lack)” and a story where “Dolores Umbridge faces her punishment from Wizengamot. Things don’t exactly go as planned.”
Take the above as you will, but I wouldn’t argue that the reason the summer after Harry’s first year turned out the way it did had nothing to do with lacking in common sense, but I don’t think having Hermione call and tell his aunt off and saying she’ll send the police after her when there is no legal grounds to do so - but hey, Suethors and in this case the Stuthors actually think it is, or they exaggerate the abuse he faced from the Dursleys to the point it was. And then everyone rescues him at the end, but he’s got even more witnesses to the Dementors, such as Madame Bones and Shacklebolt. Why are they there? Common sense dictates that they should be even though the writer thinks they should be. At this point, I’ve only seen the summaries for the two stories.
Sample:
"What now?" Harry asked himself, "that magic won't hold it forever - "
He felt a different, almost static-like, feeling in his hands and looked at them to see that sparks of what looked like electricity were dancing around his fingers. Without knowing how he channeled this new force up from his hands through the sword and up towards the monster. A bright lightning bolt flared up from his hands and struck the basilisk right in the head stunning it into unconsciousness.
Unfortunately this meant that the basilisk fell straight down onto Harry. Its mouth, which was still open wide, came right down on the sword that Harry was holding over his head. The sword went right through the roof of the basilisk's mouth and into its brain, killing it. But at the same time one if its poisonous fangs pierced deep into Harry's arm...
"Fawkes saved my life" Harry told his listeners in Professor McGonagall's office afterwards, "when he used his tears to heal me. Then I stabbed Riddle's diary with the fang which destroyed it and him. When Riddle was gone Ginny woke up. We left the chamber, rejoined Lockhart and Ron who had cleared a hole for us to get back through the rock fall and Fawkes brought all of us back up into the castle."
Molly and Arthur Weasley, Ginny's and Ron's parents, looked gobsmacked at what they were hearing but also very thankful to get their daughter back alive. Ginny had been crying over the whole business even though it hadn't really been her fault. Ron was glad to be back in the castle, Professor McGonagall looked like she might have a heart attack, Professor Lockhart, who had lost his memory during the ordeal when he tried unsuccessfully to obliviate Harry and Ron only to have the spell backfire on him, stood in a corner with a vacant expression on his face, and Professor Dumbledore, the school headmaster, simply twinkled at everyone in his usual way without seeming all that surprised by everything.
"Most remarkable" said Professor Dumbledore, "a very impressive display of accidental magic. Well done Mr. Potter."
Dumbledore sent the Weasleys to the hospital wing so Ginny could be checked out to make sure she was really all right. Lockhart went with them. Professor McGonagall was sent to alert the kitchens that a feast was going to be held. Harry, however, stayed behind at Dumbledore's request.
"Headmaster" Harry asked Dumbledore when they were alone, "was that really accidental magic that I used? It didn't feel like my usual magic."
"What did it feel like my boy?" asked Dumbledore.
"I don't know" said Harry, "it felt different somehow, like I wasn't using magic at all but something else."
"Hmm" said Dumbledore looking at Harry thoughtfully, "I don't know what else it could have been although if you want we can investigate it and see if we can find another explanation. In the meantime I would advise you to keep your thoughts about this to yourself. If anyone asks you just keep telling them it was accidental magic."
"All right" said Harry nodding his agreement as the conversation turned to other topics.