4491: Into Our Darkness - Aliana
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Title: Into Our Darkness
Perpetrator: Merakiart
Sue-O-Meter: Toxic
Cover/Banner Art:
Summary: “We're not always given a choice. Life has a cruel way of reminding you of that. Both Aliana and Draco learned that early on. They learned that reality hardens you-it forces you to change in order to survive. That darkness is a constant threat that resides inside you. And it always fights for dominance. For control. When two lost souls find each other, what will happen to them?”
Full Name: Aliana
Species: Super Sue!
Hair: The only thing I know as of the second chapter which is up is that her hair is singed.
Eyes: n/a
Markings: n/a
Possessions: Nothing. She burned everything she owned and is taken in by Hogwarts as an orphan.
Connection to Canon: The first chapter is supposed to be a prologue, but instead the reader gets an info dump about how they both misjudged each other, their lives aren’t fair but they’re attempting to fight to be together. (Is this actually a prologue? It didn’t feel like it.) I then get to the second chapter which is titled “Monster”. This chapter starts off with her killing people with these fire powers which spring from her hands. It turns out the person is her father and then she proceeds to kill her mother as well. Fudge passse her onto Dumbeldore because the headmaster offers. It ends with her upset she killed her parents and her memories of what happened being obliviated by Dumbledore.
Origin:
Special Abilities: This is a quote from Cornelius Fudge. “This little girl took out an entire block within a quarter-mile radius. It’s going to take weeks, maybe even months to repair the damage she’s caused.” Yes, she singes her hair and clothes, but still.
Notes:
Sample:
They were like fire and ash. So similar, yet so different.
She was beautiful; lively.
Destructive.
And he became lost, scarred and totally in love with her
When Aliana first met him, she didn't know that he was going to be this important to her.
In fact, she hated him.
Aliana didn't know that Draco would contradict everything that she had thought and misjudged about him. Draco proved to her that he was anything but selfish. Over time, she learned that he cared much too deeply about those he loved.
She didn't expect for him to be kind. He had an awkward tenderness of someone who was never loved by anyone and forced to improvise. But that was the part she loved about him the most.
She didn't know that he would reach past all the barriers that she put up. That Draco would still care despite the horrors he saw in her that she tried so desperately to hide from the rest of the world. He surprised her again and again when he stayed with her to mend her broken life.
She didn't expect for them to become so close. There were parts of Aliana that were glad they did and there were parts of her that wished they didn't. All too often she remembered all the altercations they had, all the days that passed by when they tried to avoid each other. Although, after that, they learned that neither of them could live without being near each other.
Title: Into Our Darkness
Perpetrator: Merakiart
Sue-O-Meter: Toxic
Cover/Banner Art:
Summary: “We're not always given a choice. Life has a cruel way of reminding you of that. Both Aliana and Draco learned that early on. They learned that reality hardens you-it forces you to change in order to survive. That darkness is a constant threat that resides inside you. And it always fights for dominance. For control. When two lost souls find each other, what will happen to them?”
Full Name: Aliana
Species: Super Sue!
Hair: The only thing I know as of the second chapter which is up is that her hair is singed.
Eyes: n/a
Markings: n/a
Possessions: Nothing. She burned everything she owned and is taken in by Hogwarts as an orphan.
Connection to Canon: The first chapter is supposed to be a prologue, but instead the reader gets an info dump about how they both misjudged each other, their lives aren’t fair but they’re attempting to fight to be together. (Is this actually a prologue? It didn’t feel like it.) I then get to the second chapter which is titled “Monster”. This chapter starts off with her killing people with these fire powers which spring from her hands. It turns out the person is her father and then she proceeds to kill her mother as well. Fudge passse her onto Dumbeldore because the headmaster offers. It ends with her upset she killed her parents and her memories of what happened being obliviated by Dumbledore.
Origin:
Special Abilities: This is a quote from Cornelius Fudge. “This little girl took out an entire block within a quarter-mile radius. It’s going to take weeks, maybe even months to repair the damage she’s caused.” Yes, she singes her hair and clothes, but still.
Notes:
Sample:
They were like fire and ash. So similar, yet so different.
She was beautiful; lively.
Destructive.
And he became lost, scarred and totally in love with her
When Aliana first met him, she didn't know that he was going to be this important to her.
In fact, she hated him.
Aliana didn't know that Draco would contradict everything that she had thought and misjudged about him. Draco proved to her that he was anything but selfish. Over time, she learned that he cared much too deeply about those he loved.
She didn't expect for him to be kind. He had an awkward tenderness of someone who was never loved by anyone and forced to improvise. But that was the part she loved about him the most.
She didn't know that he would reach past all the barriers that she put up. That Draco would still care despite the horrors he saw in her that she tried so desperately to hide from the rest of the world. He surprised her again and again when he stayed with her to mend her broken life.
She didn't expect for them to become so close. There were parts of Aliana that were glad they did and there were parts of her that wished they didn't. All too often she remembered all the altercations they had, all the days that passed by when they tried to avoid each other. Although, after that, they learned that neither of them could live without being near each other.