4202: Making the First Move - Hermione Granger and Severus Snape
Another suethor found their story featured here. They actually found their story over a year ago but are honestly proving my point of “one of the known downsides to homeschooling is that some students don’t get the social interaction they would in public school.”
Title: Making the First Move
Perpetrator: Divess
Sue-O-Meter: Toxic
Cover/Banner Art: We have a photo shopped picture with movie!Snape and movie!Hermione in it.
Summary: “The truth: Brilliant, educated and versatile people can also be ridiculous and obstinate. Hermione and Severus are in a battle to see which of them can be the most ridiculous and the most obstinate. We will have a ringside seat to watch the implosion and what comes after. AU/OOC/T.”
Full Name: Hermione and Snape
Species: They’re not the canon characters.
Hair: n/a
Eyes: n/a
Markings: n/a
Possessions: n/a
Connection to Canon: Hermione’s OoCness makes me want to vomit with how cruel her inner thoughts are. (I used the word vomit because the writer had Hermione say such things regarding Snape.) She’s jealous of the attention Snape is giving to the Lavender like idiot. As for the plot, there is none, but I wouldn’t describe their actions as “ridiculous and the most obstinate”, but down right cruel. Which, why would anybody want to be cruel to another person. This goes for “brilliant, educated and versatile people” as well as ones who are not. Then, in the second chapter they’re “together” despite the acidic nature of their relationship. Chapter three is about Hermione shagging another guy, but Snape doing this as well, yet both being jealous. Sorry, but I’m stopping here, though looking at the reviews it seems Hermione gets raped or nearly raped by this Michael Corner character, who is, by the way, a canon character.
Origin: At least this one takes place obviously in the Harry Potter world?
Special Abilities: We’re supposed to believe a relationship as toxic as the writer made it is supposed to be healthy, let alone work. Despite not being marked as romance, Snape and Hermioen are to be paired together.
Notes: One of the reviews for chapter one says, “okay I will admit a bit out of character but since you put the warning at the beginning I’ll forgive you.” I don’t, because OoCness is something which should be avoided. It’s not something readers should be warned about.
Sample:
Hermione looked up from what she was doing to see Severus speaking to that sexy, blonde witch yet again. Hermione had waited on her one time and that one time had been enough. She reminded Hermione of Lavender Brown. All flirt and no mental substance. Hermione knew she was being mentally rude, but the witch most certainly rubbed her the wrong way.
Hermione was also irritated to see miserable git Severus smiling and fawning over a customer when he had nothing but frowns and growls for the rest of the world. He was disgusting.
The blonde couldn't possibly need the things she bought unless she was a Sorceress intent on hexing the whole of London. Hermione felt herself redden. She was being totally facetious. Obviously in this day and age, there weren't any Sorcerers still around the Wizarding World. With that said. If she wasn't a Sorceress, then the witch had to have an ulterior motive for visiting the shop as often as she did. There was absolutely no way she needed to be in the building three times a week asking to be shown rare and exotic plants, potions and flowers. Not even the most experienced Potions Masters or Brew Masters in Britain visited the shop as often as this witch.
"As if those well manicured nails had ever brought any mix to a boil," Hermione huffed to herself in annoyance.
After the witch's first few visits, the reason she was at the shop so often had become apparent. She was interested in Severus. And he in her. They stood far too close to each other and smiled much too often to be transacting business.
Initially, Hermione couldn't believe the foul tempered git would allow any woman to get close to him. But as the weeks passed and their interactions became more pronounced. Hermione recognized what was happening. She wanted to walk right over to vomit on the both of them.
Hermione laughed at the mental picture of her vomiting all over Severus' well shined shoes. She had obviously laughed a bit too loud because she glanced up in time to see Severus give her a scathing look.
Title: Making the First Move
Perpetrator: Divess
Sue-O-Meter: Toxic
Cover/Banner Art: We have a photo shopped picture with movie!Snape and movie!Hermione in it.
Summary: “The truth: Brilliant, educated and versatile people can also be ridiculous and obstinate. Hermione and Severus are in a battle to see which of them can be the most ridiculous and the most obstinate. We will have a ringside seat to watch the implosion and what comes after. AU/OOC/T.”
Full Name: Hermione and Snape
Species: They’re not the canon characters.
Hair: n/a
Eyes: n/a
Markings: n/a
Possessions: n/a
Connection to Canon: Hermione’s OoCness makes me want to vomit with how cruel her inner thoughts are. (I used the word vomit because the writer had Hermione say such things regarding Snape.) She’s jealous of the attention Snape is giving to the Lavender like idiot. As for the plot, there is none, but I wouldn’t describe their actions as “ridiculous and the most obstinate”, but down right cruel. Which, why would anybody want to be cruel to another person. This goes for “brilliant, educated and versatile people” as well as ones who are not. Then, in the second chapter they’re “together” despite the acidic nature of their relationship. Chapter three is about Hermione shagging another guy, but Snape doing this as well, yet both being jealous. Sorry, but I’m stopping here, though looking at the reviews it seems Hermione gets raped or nearly raped by this Michael Corner character, who is, by the way, a canon character.
Origin: At least this one takes place obviously in the Harry Potter world?
Special Abilities: We’re supposed to believe a relationship as toxic as the writer made it is supposed to be healthy, let alone work. Despite not being marked as romance, Snape and Hermioen are to be paired together.
Notes: One of the reviews for chapter one says, “okay I will admit a bit out of character but since you put the warning at the beginning I’ll forgive you.” I don’t, because OoCness is something which should be avoided. It’s not something readers should be warned about.
Sample:
Hermione looked up from what she was doing to see Severus speaking to that sexy, blonde witch yet again. Hermione had waited on her one time and that one time had been enough. She reminded Hermione of Lavender Brown. All flirt and no mental substance. Hermione knew she was being mentally rude, but the witch most certainly rubbed her the wrong way.
Hermione was also irritated to see miserable git Severus smiling and fawning over a customer when he had nothing but frowns and growls for the rest of the world. He was disgusting.
The blonde couldn't possibly need the things she bought unless she was a Sorceress intent on hexing the whole of London. Hermione felt herself redden. She was being totally facetious. Obviously in this day and age, there weren't any Sorcerers still around the Wizarding World. With that said. If she wasn't a Sorceress, then the witch had to have an ulterior motive for visiting the shop as often as she did. There was absolutely no way she needed to be in the building three times a week asking to be shown rare and exotic plants, potions and flowers. Not even the most experienced Potions Masters or Brew Masters in Britain visited the shop as often as this witch.
"As if those well manicured nails had ever brought any mix to a boil," Hermione huffed to herself in annoyance.
After the witch's first few visits, the reason she was at the shop so often had become apparent. She was interested in Severus. And he in her. They stood far too close to each other and smiled much too often to be transacting business.
Initially, Hermione couldn't believe the foul tempered git would allow any woman to get close to him. But as the weeks passed and their interactions became more pronounced. Hermione recognized what was happening. She wanted to walk right over to vomit on the both of them.
Hermione laughed at the mental picture of her vomiting all over Severus' well shined shoes. She had obviously laughed a bit too loud because she glanced up in time to see Severus give her a scathing look.