3686: War of Magic Book I - Alsdair
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- The Fourteenth Annual Pottersues is also currently running.
TITLE: War of Magic Book 1 (forgot the link, but also deleted before I could add it in.)
PERPETRATOR: SuperCow64
SUE-O-METER: Troll (Who would name themselves SuperCow64?) If not, Toxic.
COVER/BANNER ART: The cover is the Hogwarts Crest
SUMMARY:”Moo moo! SuperCow here! This is my first story and I hope you all like it. This book is OC heavy, but it has a good amount of Jk Rowling's charaicters (Harry, Ron, Harmonie etc). I worked really hard on it, and will keep working on it because because this is only my first chapter! XD HAHA! Well I'm proud to present, War Of Magic Book 1.”
FULL NAME: Alsdair
SPECIES: Wizard
HAIR: n/a
EYES: n/a
MARKINGS: I think they’re missing a leg, but this isn’t made clear.
POSSESSIONS: He has a wooden boot, which doesn’t really get explained.
CONNECTION TO CANON: Death Eaters randomly break into a place.
ORIGIN: The writer is likely self-inserting themselves, either for real, or pretending to do so.
SPECIAL ABILITIES: Random plot, random beginning, there to just be cool.
NOTES: I’m not sure if the reason the story is as bad as it is lies with the fact the writer is trolling, or with the fact the writer’s homeschooled. Also, I know the writer feels they put a lot of hard work into what they wrote, but what I read is 730 words, and feels like someone wrote the piece in a few minutes.
SAMPLE:
I walked over to the other Death Eater and kicked him in the head. "You saved us!" The girl with white hair cried and ran up to me. "Your welco-" the impact from her running knocked the wind out of me "Thankyouthankyouthankyou!" "Your... Welcome..." I wheezed. She kept hugging me, "Okay, your going to need to let me go now." I said pulling away, she let go. "Stay here okay?" She nodded and joined the rest of the kids. I put a charm on the doorway before I left. I heard talking down stairs in the basement, I crept down the basement stairs. A hanging light was the only light in the basement. In the light there were four people, to Death Eaters standing against the back wall and a Death Eater standing near a chair with his back to me so I couldn't who was in it. "Now that we've got the girl, the prettiest of the bunch." He said stroking the girls cheek, she jumped a little. The two other Death Eaters laughed in annoyingly high pitched voices. "Who are you?" I jumped a little, it was Maya. "We're Death Eaters sister." One of the ladies said straightening up from the wall.
"And we will kill you if you don't tell us where Alsdair is." I jumped again. ~There looking for me!?~ I thought. "I-I told you already, I don't know where he is!" He knocked over the chair. "Answer truthfully! Where is he!?" "Right here." I said steeping into the light. "Stupefy!" Cheek Stroker fell to the ground, "Stupefy" Wall Leaner #1 down. "Curcio!" It felt like my insides were burning, I heard high pitched laughing, screaming, my screaming! Then, it was over. I was n the ground looking up a the hanging light which was swinging. "Alsdair?" Maya said looking down at me. "M-m-maya?" "Yes that's my name." She said kneeling down next to me, a notest the Death Eater with a pitch fork in his chest and the broken chair. "Please don't die, that'd be bad" Maya said choking back sobs. "Why are you crying, I'm not dead." She sniffled "I know it's just, I've had a long day." I nodded standing up. "Well we can't have that can we?" "No we can't." "Well let's do something about it." I said walking towards the stairs, Maya fallowed. "What now?" She asked catching up. "Up stairs," I said smiling "To our certain doom."
- The Fourteenth Annual Pottersues is also currently running.
TITLE: War of Magic Book 1 (forgot the link, but also deleted before I could add it in.)
PERPETRATOR: SuperCow64
SUE-O-METER: Troll (Who would name themselves SuperCow64?) If not, Toxic.
COVER/BANNER ART: The cover is the Hogwarts Crest
SUMMARY:”Moo moo! SuperCow here! This is my first story and I hope you all like it. This book is OC heavy, but it has a good amount of Jk Rowling's charaicters (Harry, Ron, Harmonie etc). I worked really hard on it, and will keep working on it because because this is only my first chapter! XD HAHA! Well I'm proud to present, War Of Magic Book 1.”
FULL NAME: Alsdair
SPECIES: Wizard
HAIR: n/a
EYES: n/a
MARKINGS: I think they’re missing a leg, but this isn’t made clear.
POSSESSIONS: He has a wooden boot, which doesn’t really get explained.
CONNECTION TO CANON: Death Eaters randomly break into a place.
ORIGIN: The writer is likely self-inserting themselves, either for real, or pretending to do so.
SPECIAL ABILITIES: Random plot, random beginning, there to just be cool.
NOTES: I’m not sure if the reason the story is as bad as it is lies with the fact the writer is trolling, or with the fact the writer’s homeschooled. Also, I know the writer feels they put a lot of hard work into what they wrote, but what I read is 730 words, and feels like someone wrote the piece in a few minutes.
SAMPLE:
I walked over to the other Death Eater and kicked him in the head. "You saved us!" The girl with white hair cried and ran up to me. "Your welco-" the impact from her running knocked the wind out of me "Thankyouthankyouthankyou!" "Your... Welcome..." I wheezed. She kept hugging me, "Okay, your going to need to let me go now." I said pulling away, she let go. "Stay here okay?" She nodded and joined the rest of the kids. I put a charm on the doorway before I left. I heard talking down stairs in the basement, I crept down the basement stairs. A hanging light was the only light in the basement. In the light there were four people, to Death Eaters standing against the back wall and a Death Eater standing near a chair with his back to me so I couldn't who was in it. "Now that we've got the girl, the prettiest of the bunch." He said stroking the girls cheek, she jumped a little. The two other Death Eaters laughed in annoyingly high pitched voices. "Who are you?" I jumped a little, it was Maya. "We're Death Eaters sister." One of the ladies said straightening up from the wall.
"And we will kill you if you don't tell us where Alsdair is." I jumped again. ~There looking for me!?~ I thought. "I-I told you already, I don't know where he is!" He knocked over the chair. "Answer truthfully! Where is he!?" "Right here." I said steeping into the light. "Stupefy!" Cheek Stroker fell to the ground, "Stupefy" Wall Leaner #1 down. "Curcio!" It felt like my insides were burning, I heard high pitched laughing, screaming, my screaming! Then, it was over. I was n the ground looking up a the hanging light which was swinging. "Alsdair?" Maya said looking down at me. "M-m-maya?" "Yes that's my name." She said kneeling down next to me, a notest the Death Eater with a pitch fork in his chest and the broken chair. "Please don't die, that'd be bad" Maya said choking back sobs. "Why are you crying, I'm not dead." She sniffled "I know it's just, I've had a long day." I nodded standing up. "Well we can't have that can we?" "No we can't." "Well let's do something about it." I said walking towards the stairs, Maya fallowed. "What now?" She asked catching up. "Up stairs," I said smiling "To our certain doom."