3505: The Worlds Worst... -- Charlotte Cartwrite and company

[pottersues]

Don't forget about the Thirteenth Annual Pottersue Fanfic Contestt. You've got until January 31 to get your entries in.
- The link of the day is OC vs. Mary Sue. I bring this one in simply because it amuses me. The character on the left can still be a Sue, and on the left we have exaggerations along with traits which aren't necessarily Sue traits.

Comments

[zoya52]

This is bad, just how the writer can use the original canon and twist it to suit their story. Why do they think copying the original is good?
So many plotholes in only one chapter, gawd. I don't think the writer was thinking at all what she was writing. She just picked up the first book and started writing it.
Can the story get any more Sueish? *headdesk*

[yemi_hikari]

I don't think the writer thinks copying the original is good, but that they don't even realize how much of the original they are copying. It's actually the first stage to learning to write, where someone learns first to role play within an already existing story. This is done mostly through play acting as a child, and most writers grow out of this stage by the time they start posting on the net, thus we don't normally see this stage showing up in their writing. She simply needs someone to tell her to think outside of the box.

[yemi_hikari]

The story certainly is original compared to the other ones which just copy the plot. I doubt anyone has told her there are any sort of rules of what can or can't be done - that there is a borderline between original fiction and fanfiction.

Still, you can also tell how young the writer is due to how much they don't know about how the real world works. We've got minors running around with nothing stopping them.

[zoya52]

True about minors. As for original, well for one the Author Note is definitely...interesting to say the least. The style is different, but the whole theme is almost same as original and their is no way to sugar coat it.

[cal_yn]

I'm seeing lines from A Very Potter Musical...

"Bloody hell, Charlotte,"

"Bloody hell...it's Harry Pottahhhhhhhh!"

"That's Harry, frickin', Potter,"

"You're Harry Freaking Potter!"

"The lady said leave, Blackbourne,"

"The lady said 'No'."

I found this exchange in Chapter 5 rather amusing though, like Who's On First:

"You don't know who Harry Potter is?" Pansy asked, shocked, turning to Draco "She doesn't know who Harry Potter is!"

"That's like saying you don't know who" Draco paused, "He-who-must-not-be-named is."

"Who's He-who-must-not-be-named?" I furrowed my brow, feeling more and more ignorant by the second.

"She doesn't know who you-know-who is!?" Pansy's eyes widened further, "She doesn't know who you-know-who is!"

I think I'm going to follow it.

[piper_audrey]

Hey, I'm Piper-Audrey. I just wanna start off by saying that this is pretty helpful as far as criticism goes, so I'm cool with it. I just wanna clear up a few details that the author of this post got confused on or misinterpreted

[yemi_hikari]

Apologies, but your logic does not work at all. I'm not going to say this to hurt your feelings, but they need to be addressed as logic fallacy is the biggest issue in your story

[yemi_hikari]

Ten, running into her sister is way to convenient, but then so was her getting whisked away by Alfie. Someone would be trying to get in contact with her adoptive parents, as she is a minor.

Eleven, it's great you're writing this just for fun, and don't mind the criticism. This said, it can also be fun trying to write a story without all these logical fallacies. It's like solving a puzzle.

Twelve, fair critique. Did you identify who was speaking then? You should possibly double check on that.

Thirteen, as someone who writes both original fiction and fanfiction, I actually suggest putting in an effort into your fanfic writing and looking at using it as practice for the original fiction series you do want to write. Unlike original fiction the characters and world are created for you, and being consistent in fanfic works helps you to be consistent in your original fiction, which believe it or not is important.

Good luck. :)

[piper_audrey]

(1/2) Again, I think you misunderstand what I'm saying here