This was amazing and the fact that it's your first fic is absolutely astounding. I loved Nate's voice and how well you captured all their characterization. Also, the resolution was so satisfying. The way you handled the plot and the pacing was wonderful and I loved how much humor you managed to put in, with such dark subject at times, and how right it felt. Just brilliant.
Now we remember why we don’t go to bed sober, don’t we, Nathaniel?
No, he doesn't have PTSD at ALL!
“Unhand me, specter!” he declaimed, and giggled, shoving his bad hand in the Brad-shape’s face. “Unhand, get it? ‘S funny. Like Shakespeare.”
AHAHAHAHA!
“You know how when they cut your leg off, you can still feel the leg even though it isn’t there anymore? And it itches and hurts, but there’s no way to soothe it?”
Holy shit, dude. There's a way to describe it.
“Fix this, Nate,” he said, and it was half a demand and half a plea. “I want my friend back.”
Aww, Walt!
“Kid would have made a good Marine,” he remarked, “once he was trained out of telegraphing his moves like that.”
HAAA! Of course Brad saw it coming. Iceman knows what you'll do before you even know.
“I remember thinking, if there were just one, just one officer I could have put my faith in… but there wasn’t.” He shrugged. “So I left. It killed me to do it, but I did. I still can’t decide
( ... )
Wow. Love that, the way a slight change - no Nate in the Corps - can alter the course of events. Really nice.
And you know, I wasn't even thinking of that when I started writing Brad's speech there, but then it just made so much sense. Because seriously, how much more would Iraq have sucked for First Recon without Nate there? I'm thinking, A LOT.
This is a fabulous first piece of fic - and I think there's a catch there, like, oh, you're a professional writer or somesuch - and it's incredibly impressive that you could capture their voices and keep the story moving. Basically, you rock.
*grin* I'm going to take that for the amazing compliment it is. I'm so pleased you like it; consider it a bit of a thank-you for all the awesome GK fic you've provided for me to enjoy. I seriously think I was really lucky to stumble upon this fandom.
You write a delicious, insightful and heart-warming fic with excellent characters and so delicately handled, for your first fic, and you top it off with dash of chemistry porn in your author's note?
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And thank you for your comments on the kink meme, too!
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I kind of love you for this.
Now we remember why we don’t go to bed sober, don’t we, Nathaniel?
No, he doesn't have PTSD at ALL!
“Unhand me, specter!” he declaimed, and giggled, shoving his bad hand in the Brad-shape’s face. “Unhand, get it? ‘S funny. Like Shakespeare.”
AHAHAHAHA!
“You know how when they cut your leg off, you can still feel the leg even though it isn’t there anymore? And it itches and hurts, but there’s no way to soothe it?”
Holy shit, dude. There's a way to describe it.
“Fix this, Nate,” he said, and it was half a demand and half a plea. “I want my friend back.”
Aww, Walt!
“Kid would have made a good Marine,” he remarked, “once he was trained out of telegraphing his moves like that.”
HAAA! Of course Brad saw it coming. Iceman knows what you'll do before you even know.
“I remember thinking, if there were just one, just one officer I could have put my faith in… but there wasn’t.” He shrugged. “So I left. It killed me to do it, but I did. I still can’t decide ( ... )
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And you know, I wasn't even thinking of that when I started writing Brad's speech there, but then it just made so much sense. Because seriously, how much more would Iraq have sucked for First Recon without Nate there? I'm thinking, A LOT.
This is a fabulous first piece of fic - and I think there's a catch there, like, oh, you're a professional writer or somesuch - and it's incredibly impressive that you could capture their voices and keep the story moving. Basically, you rock.
*grin* I'm going to take that for the amazing compliment it is. I'm so pleased you like it; consider it a bit of a thank-you for all the awesome GK fic you've provided for me to enjoy. I seriously think I was really lucky to stumble upon this fandom.
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I really hope you keep writing, get yourself some ass-kicking betas, and keep providing us with Brad/Nate yumminess!
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I do indeed hope to continue writing. If nothing else, I've still got that damn prison!AU, right?
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*puddle of goo*
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Hah. And thank you, what a lovely comment. I'm so glad you liked it!
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