Messages

[shimotsuki]

Title: Messages
Author: shimotsuki
Rating & Warnings: PG, for mild profanity
Prompts: time away from work; “Well...all right. I’ll try and help. But it’ll have to wait...I’m afraid. I have a lot to do before the holidays. I chose a very inconvenient time to fall ill.”-J.K. Rowling, Harry Potter and the Prisoner of Azkaban
Word Count: 3841 words
Summary:

Comments

[moon_reader]

Oh, oh, I may be gushing, but that was absolutely beautiful! Your perceptiveness of the Tonks-Lupin family, not to mention Tonks' feelings and thoughts, are portrayed with a wonderful clarity and clever delivery. I knew this was going to be a good fic, after having read quite a few of yours, :) but I have to compliment you on everything I have ever looked for in a story. The plot was very simple, which conveyed the action and dialogue excellently, and the little details you added, about Tonks' appearance and her caution with the baby, were a perfect touch, as well as quite logical

[shimotsuki]

Thank you so much for the detailed comments, and the encouragement!

It seems like Tonks would have enough sense to vary her disguises enough that she didn't always look like a girl her age, or sit in the same place

Thanks for making this point. In my mind Tonks was changing her face rather drastically from day to day (including age), but I realized after seeing your comment that Rabastan's remark about "almost always a girl in the pub" doesn't mesh with that, so I made a small edit, heh. Tonks has been varying her seat, her drink order, and her activity, though, so it wasn't until Travers noticed there was always a pregnant woman around that he put the pieces together.

I'm planning to write another fic someday about how the taxi thing came about. (Compared to all the people hiding in the woods, Remus is actually rather proud of being able to do something to support his family this year, not to mention sneaking Muggle-borns out of the country when the opportunity arises!)

[wotcher_maera]

Oh, I loved it! You really captured Andromeda's behaviour towards Remus, at least the way I always imagined it. I love the two-way mirrors! Such an excellent idea! And good thinking on the not-morphing-her-body-so-she-doesn't-hurt-Teddy thing. I'd not thought of that before. Excellent work! :)

[shimotsuki]

Thank you!

I think there is potential for some very interesting dynamics between Remus and Andromeda, so I'm glad you liked the way that worked here.

I'm really surprised we didn't see more examples of two-way mirrors in the books...they're like wizarding cell phones!

[train_lindz]

You = fabulous

[shimotsuki]

You = way too kind!

Thank you so much for such a lovely review. The things you've commented on about the different characters are some of the major things I was hoping to do with this story, so I'm very happy that they stood out to you.

Ted. I love the idea that he wasn't permanently on the run -- I really don't understand why Ted didn't leave the country and go somewhere that was actually safe. So I decided to play with the idea that he wanted to stay close enough to be able to go home sometimes. (Also, being in touch with Ted would make DH year slightly less sucky for the Tonks-Lupin family, which I think they totally deserve.)

As for McGonagall's mirror, I didn't intend anything too exciting with that, heh. She's pretty isolated up there at Hogwarts with Death Eaters watching her every move, so she'd probably get one for talking to someone useful in the Order...

[chococoffeekiss]

This is fantastic! As is everything you write, though! Your Tonks is always so spunky and faces all challenges like a true Auror:D And your Remus is just so endearing!
And Andromeda is...such a Black!!(but I mean it in the nicest way possible;))

[shimotsuki]

Aw, thanks! I'm glad you thought Tonks was spunky, because that's how I try to write her. Remus is trying so hard (too hard?) to make things up to Tonks, poor thing. And I love writing Andromeda.

[carnivalgirl]

I actually said "Yes!" out loud at the end, when Ted said "son". That's what Christmas is about! :D
I enjoyed all of this, I think Tonks's emotions were probably exactly what she felt; she would want her baby, but feel annoyed with herself at the same time. I was rather amused that Rabastan freed her just so he could annoy Bella later, it's a good image. I think your Remus was really very sweet and the mirrors were an excellent idea. This was so lovely!

[shimotsuki]

I actually said "Yes!" out loud at the end -- LOL! I'm delighted to hear that. ;)

Rabastan was sort of changing his mind about letting Tonks go when she Portkeyed out of there... *shudder* But I do like to imagine him sniping at Bellatrix, and vice versa.

Thanks so much for the kind words.