Messages

[shimotsuki]

Title: Messages
Author: shimotsuki
Rating & Warnings: PG, for mild profanity
Prompts: time away from work; “Well...all right. I’ll try and help. But it’ll have to wait...I’m afraid. I have a lot to do before the holidays. I chose a very inconvenient time to fall ill.”-J.K. Rowling, Harry Potter and the Prisoner of Azkaban
Word Count: 3841 words
Summary:

Comments

[moon_reader]

Oh, oh, I may be gushing, but that was absolutely beautiful! Your perceptiveness of the Tonks-Lupin family, not to mention Tonks' feelings and thoughts, are portrayed with a wonderful clarity and clever delivery. I knew this was going to be a good fic, after having read quite a few of yours, :) but I have to compliment you on everything I have ever looked for in a story. The plot was very simple, which conveyed the action and dialogue excellently, and the little details you added, about Tonks' appearance and her caution with the baby, were a perfect touch, as well as quite logical.

The idea of Remus as a taxi driver saddens me, but it presents the harsh reality of the war in a very poignant way. Their interaction as a family is also lovely - with Tonks wishing that they could be closer, and Andromeda still not sure of Remus. I think you struck just the right note with Andromeda and Remus; the former tense and worried for her husband and protective of her daughter, and the latter trying to prove his worth and love for his wife.

The scene at the coffee shop was appropriately scary! It seems like Tonks would have enough sense to vary her disguises enough that she didn't always look like a girl her age, or sit in the same place, but maybe that's just me wanting her not to get caught :) Excellent use of the prompts, by the way!

And the ending was beautiful - I love that Remus would rake though his memory for the charm, and how Ted accepted him, and maybe "Dromeda" will, too. Thank you for such lovely writing!

[shimotsuki]

Thank you so much for the detailed comments, and the encouragement!

It seems like Tonks would have enough sense to vary her disguises enough that she didn't always look like a girl her age, or sit in the same place

Thanks for making this point. In my mind Tonks was changing her face rather drastically from day to day (including age), but I realized after seeing your comment that Rabastan's remark about "almost always a girl in the pub" doesn't mesh with that, so I made a small edit, heh. Tonks has been varying her seat, her drink order, and her activity, though, so it wasn't until Travers noticed there was always a pregnant woman around that he put the pieces together.

I'm planning to write another fic someday about how the taxi thing came about. (Compared to all the people hiding in the woods, Remus is actually rather proud of being able to do something to support his family this year, not to mention sneaking Muggle-borns out of the country when the opportunity arises!)