Legolas "Life isn't fair!" Thranduilion
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Notes: Well, I've never seen Legostu try to kill someone before.
Title: When great things come undone
Author: Angstgoddess69 (Oh jeez.)
Summary: "Aragorn goes to Mirkwood on an official visit, where he meets a certain elf..... AL slash. Rated R for later chapters..... AL SLASH"
Name: Legolas
Species: Elf
Age: He's centuries old.
Hair: "His shimmering blonde hair flowed delicately down his shoulders"
Eyes:
-"his bright sapphire eyes shone out from his perfect face"
-"powerful eyes angry and cold"
Appearance:
-"the most beautiful creature Estel had ever seen"
-"he looked like some dazzling god"
-pale
Special Possessions: He has a bedroom with large windows and red velvet curtains.
Clothing: He is forced to wear formal clothes, but hates them. Oh, poor baby.
Backstory: Poor Legolas has "cold, pitiless and devoid of any emotion." Until Aragorn appears, of course. Legolas's mother and sister were killed by Orcs, and this is what has made him into the cold being he is.
Special Abilities: He glares at Aragorn for a few seconds, and that is enough to make Aragorn fall hopelessly in love with him. He also cries the single tear.
Connections to Canon: Legolas's cold beauty turns Elladan and Elrohir (again obnoxiously referred to by their fan-made nicknames) into giggly fangirls, and makes Aragorn fall in love with him.
The Plot: Legolas lives in luxury and hates it. Life is so awful for him. His day starts with his father telling him 'good morning' and asking how he is - isn't that terrible? Legolas, of course, rolls his eyes and is righteously exasperated. Luckily, this horrible life changes when Estel comes to town. Legolas fixes Estel with his cold, emotionless, contemptuous gaze, and Estel is in love. Estel then daydreams about Legolas as the twins fangirl the Elf. ‘We’re sorry, but he’s just sooooooooo gorgeous!’ Elrohir says. Meanwhile, Thranduil forces Legolas into giving Estel a tour, and Legolas goes to meet him, fuming about how difficult and unfair life is. As they get to know each other, Legolas whines about how boring his life is, and how awful it is that he gets so many suitors that only want him for his good looks and not his personality. Eventually Legolas strips in order to make Estel uncomfortable and upset. Then, Legolas tricks Estel into getting drunk and ties him to the bed. Aragorn wakes up the next morning and works himself free, and then Arwen visits. Legolas sees them together and knows they are an item, and gets angry. Estel complains about Arwen being clingy so the reader knows that Arwen is worthless. Then, Legolas challenges Estel to a fight. Arwen catches them, and Legolas tries to kill Arwen as seen in the sample. Then, the author randomly inserts a Metallica song - "Some Kind Of Monster." Thranduil is angry with Legolas, but Legolas just acts insolent. Later, Legolas apologizes to Estel, and they kiss. The next day, Aragorn takes Arwen back to Elrond so she can get healed - she's at death's door. But, Aragorn cries a tear and he and Legolas promise to see each other again.
Sample: I was speechless after I read this section, and I'm not really sure what to say about it. After a while of considering whether I should joke, rant angrily, or comment on poor characterization, I settled for linking to this image. It describes the end result of my feelings about this scene pretty well.
Legolas’s Point of View.
The elf froze as he heard the female voice calling, and watched as Estel closed his eyes in dismay. Legolas had thought it was going very well until now. He looked up as Arwen came round the corner.
‘What is she doing here?’ he asked Estel icily.
‘I - I don’t know,’ the man returned pathetically. Legolas got up as from where he was straddling Estel with his arm over the ranger’s neck, slightly constricting his airway, as Arwen came rushing over.
‘Estel! Estel!’ she shrieked, ‘What was he doing to you?’
Legolas stood with his arms folded as he watched the she-elf simper over Aragron, and he heard him say;
‘Nothing Arwen, we were just trying to have some fun’ She suddenly turned on Legolas.
‘What were you DOING TO HIM? You were HURTING HIM!’
Legolas lost it. Grabbing a smooth, sharp elven-knife from his tunic and, advancing towards Arwen, he held it out in front of him threateningly, until she reached a tree and could reverse no further. Before she could move one more muscle, Legolas had leapt forward and was holding the knife at her neck.
‘What exactly is your problem?’ he whispered perilously soft.
‘Nothing! Nothing at all! Please, Legolas, please don’t hurt me!’ she squeaked back. No words were needed to know how angry he was and how much he hated Arwen. It was no normal hatred, but a pure, wholesome hatred, which even radiated form his very being.
‘WHY DO YOU KEEP DOING THIS? WHY?’ Legolas suddenly yelled, ‘CAN YOU NOT TELL I AM COMPLETELY FALLING FOR THIS HUMAN? I KNOW I CAN’T HAVE HIM, BECAUSE HE’S SO IN LOVE WITH A STUPID PATHETIC THING LIKE YOU, AND ALL I WANTED WAS FOR A MOMENTS WITH HIM ALONE, BUT I CAN’T! ALL BECAUSE OF YOU! I WILL DIE SOON, DO YOU KNOW THAT? MY LOVE FOR HIM WILL CONSUME ME, AND SOON ENOUGH MY HEART WILL BREAK AND THEN I WILL DIE! I HATE YOU! I HAVE NEVER EVER HATED ANYONE AS I HATE YOU! I’M GOING TO KILL YOU!‘ he pressed forward with his knife, a completely murderous glint in his eyes.
Estel’s Point of view.
Estel watched in horror as Arwen screamed and blood started to drip slowly down her chest, soon turning into a relatively steady flow. He lunged forward at Legolas screaming for help. Arwen collapsed to the ground as human and elf entered a brutal, vicious fight - Legolas because he was so angry at everything, and Estel, for his life. However, a number of elves had run at hearing Aragorn’s and Arwen’s screams, and soon they had Legolas under control. Estel collapsed in exhaustion as they pulled the still-fighting elf of him and started to drag him away. He rushed over to Arwen, but she was unconscious. Five other elves quickly picked her up and carried her off swiftly towards the palace for treatment.
Estel’s head was spinning. What Legolas had said, how Legolas had tried to kill Arwen and how ferociously he had tried to hurt the human himself were turning around and around in his head, and deciding he could take no more, he ran to his room tears streaming down his face, collapsed onto his bed and cried himself to sleep.
Notes: Well, I've never seen Legostu try to kill someone before.
Title: When great things come undone
Author: Angstgoddess69 (Oh jeez.)
Summary: "Aragorn goes to Mirkwood on an official visit, where he meets a certain elf..... AL slash. Rated R for later chapters..... AL SLASH"
Name: Legolas
Species: Elf
Age: He's centuries old.
Hair: "His shimmering blonde hair flowed delicately down his shoulders"
Eyes:
-"his bright sapphire eyes shone out from his perfect face"
-"powerful eyes angry and cold"
Appearance:
-"the most beautiful creature Estel had ever seen"
-"he looked like some dazzling god"
-pale
Special Possessions: He has a bedroom with large windows and red velvet curtains.
Clothing: He is forced to wear formal clothes, but hates them. Oh, poor baby.
Backstory: Poor Legolas has "cold, pitiless and devoid of any emotion." Until Aragorn appears, of course. Legolas's mother and sister were killed by Orcs, and this is what has made him into the cold being he is.
Special Abilities: He glares at Aragorn for a few seconds, and that is enough to make Aragorn fall hopelessly in love with him. He also cries the single tear.
Connections to Canon: Legolas's cold beauty turns Elladan and Elrohir (again obnoxiously referred to by their fan-made nicknames) into giggly fangirls, and makes Aragorn fall in love with him.
The Plot: Legolas lives in luxury and hates it. Life is so awful for him. His day starts with his father telling him 'good morning' and asking how he is - isn't that terrible? Legolas, of course, rolls his eyes and is righteously exasperated. Luckily, this horrible life changes when Estel comes to town. Legolas fixes Estel with his cold, emotionless, contemptuous gaze, and Estel is in love. Estel then daydreams about Legolas as the twins fangirl the Elf. ‘We’re sorry, but he’s just sooooooooo gorgeous!’ Elrohir says. Meanwhile, Thranduil forces Legolas into giving Estel a tour, and Legolas goes to meet him, fuming about how difficult and unfair life is. As they get to know each other, Legolas whines about how boring his life is, and how awful it is that he gets so many suitors that only want him for his good looks and not his personality. Eventually Legolas strips in order to make Estel uncomfortable and upset. Then, Legolas tricks Estel into getting drunk and ties him to the bed. Aragorn wakes up the next morning and works himself free, and then Arwen visits. Legolas sees them together and knows they are an item, and gets angry. Estel complains about Arwen being clingy so the reader knows that Arwen is worthless. Then, Legolas challenges Estel to a fight. Arwen catches them, and Legolas tries to kill Arwen as seen in the sample. Then, the author randomly inserts a Metallica song - "Some Kind Of Monster." Thranduil is angry with Legolas, but Legolas just acts insolent. Later, Legolas apologizes to Estel, and they kiss. The next day, Aragorn takes Arwen back to Elrond so she can get healed - she's at death's door. But, Aragorn cries a tear and he and Legolas promise to see each other again.
Sample: I was speechless after I read this section, and I'm not really sure what to say about it. After a while of considering whether I should joke, rant angrily, or comment on poor characterization, I settled for linking to this image. It describes the end result of my feelings about this scene pretty well.
Legolas’s Point of View.
The elf froze as he heard the female voice calling, and watched as Estel closed his eyes in dismay. Legolas had thought it was going very well until now. He looked up as Arwen came round the corner.
‘What is she doing here?’ he asked Estel icily.
‘I - I don’t know,’ the man returned pathetically. Legolas got up as from where he was straddling Estel with his arm over the ranger’s neck, slightly constricting his airway, as Arwen came rushing over.
‘Estel! Estel!’ she shrieked, ‘What was he doing to you?’
Legolas stood with his arms folded as he watched the she-elf simper over Aragron, and he heard him say;
‘Nothing Arwen, we were just trying to have some fun’ She suddenly turned on Legolas.
‘What were you DOING TO HIM? You were HURTING HIM!’
Legolas lost it. Grabbing a smooth, sharp elven-knife from his tunic and, advancing towards Arwen, he held it out in front of him threateningly, until she reached a tree and could reverse no further. Before she could move one more muscle, Legolas had leapt forward and was holding the knife at her neck.
‘What exactly is your problem?’ he whispered perilously soft.
‘Nothing! Nothing at all! Please, Legolas, please don’t hurt me!’ she squeaked back. No words were needed to know how angry he was and how much he hated Arwen. It was no normal hatred, but a pure, wholesome hatred, which even radiated form his very being.
‘WHY DO YOU KEEP DOING THIS? WHY?’ Legolas suddenly yelled, ‘CAN YOU NOT TELL I AM COMPLETELY FALLING FOR THIS HUMAN? I KNOW I CAN’T HAVE HIM, BECAUSE HE’S SO IN LOVE WITH A STUPID PATHETIC THING LIKE YOU, AND ALL I WANTED WAS FOR A MOMENTS WITH HIM ALONE, BUT I CAN’T! ALL BECAUSE OF YOU! I WILL DIE SOON, DO YOU KNOW THAT? MY LOVE FOR HIM WILL CONSUME ME, AND SOON ENOUGH MY HEART WILL BREAK AND THEN I WILL DIE! I HATE YOU! I HAVE NEVER EVER HATED ANYONE AS I HATE YOU! I’M GOING TO KILL YOU!‘ he pressed forward with his knife, a completely murderous glint in his eyes.
Estel’s Point of view.
Estel watched in horror as Arwen screamed and blood started to drip slowly down her chest, soon turning into a relatively steady flow. He lunged forward at Legolas screaming for help. Arwen collapsed to the ground as human and elf entered a brutal, vicious fight - Legolas because he was so angry at everything, and Estel, for his life. However, a number of elves had run at hearing Aragorn’s and Arwen’s screams, and soon they had Legolas under control. Estel collapsed in exhaustion as they pulled the still-fighting elf of him and started to drag him away. He rushed over to Arwen, but she was unconscious. Five other elves quickly picked her up and carried her off swiftly towards the palace for treatment.
Estel’s head was spinning. What Legolas had said, how Legolas had tried to kill Arwen and how ferociously he had tried to hurt the human himself were turning around and around in his head, and deciding he could take no more, he ran to his room tears streaming down his face, collapsed onto his bed and cried himself to sleep.