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Those Forsaken Ch. 4

Jul 03, 2009 00:27

Author: Leeayre
Title: Those Forsaken
Rating: T (chps 1-4), M (5+) ?
Genre: Angst/Horror
Characters: Subaru, Seishirou, Kamui, Fuuma
Summary: It all started when Subaru accidentally brought one home. Now Kamui and Subaru find themselves running for their lives, wrapped up in a fight neither could have foreseen.
Warnings: Vampirism, blood, physical ( Read more... )

fic: those forsaken

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jjblue1 July 4 2009, 04:02:17 UTC

Undoubtely this chapter, devoted to my beloved pair, is so far my favourite. But let's get in with order ( ... )

leeayre July 7 2009, 06:34:01 UTC

A-A REVIEW?! This can’t be from JJ… I’m dreaming… I’ll close my eyes, and when I wake up it will all have been a really pleasant dream… *blinks owlishly* Hmm, it’s not going away… *pokes it… as if that’ll help* There’s no way… Maybe… *horrified* Maybe she meant to review someone else and accidentally mixed up profiles! I mean, after all… she can’t… she wouldn’t… there’s no way she actually ‘meant’ to give one to meee! *squeaks* o//o ( ... )

PART 1 jjblue1 July 8 2009, 21:09:10 UTC

Don't worry, it's from me! And you deserved it, be sure of it! (it was just LJ was being difficult and refused to let me post it ( ... )

leeayre July 7 2009, 06:52:02 UTC

Ah, yes, you hit exactly on the problem I’m having with Kamui. He ‘should’ be more forceful and fiery, but right now, if he fought Fuuma, he’d only get seriously hurt again. He doesn’t yet have the strength to openly oppose and ‘win’ a fight with any of the other characters (Poor Kamui, stuck practically forever as the only pathetic human!). While it’s still going to be a bit before he can really show what he’s made of, chapter 6 will at least be his last chapter of ‘total’ helplessness. *hums a bit worriedly* I have been trying to find ways for ‘every’ character to get a moment to show his strength, even if only for a second. But Subaru is being difficult. He’s powerful, but giving him a reason to fight is the problem. I think… I think Subaru would fight if it meant protecting Seishirou, but… in order for him to have a need to protect Seishirou, Seishirou has to be unable to do anything (because otherwise I don’t think Seishirou would let him get in the way of a fight). *sudden smirk* But maybe I have an idea ( ... )

PART 2 jjblue1 July 8 2009, 21:33:27 UTC

It stuck me how he was being polite somehow with Fuma. In early X and in TRC he's usually rather rude (when I started reading X I didn't know yet of TB and was a fierce Kamui fangirl... :P). After Fuma becomes the other kamui he calms down but also became less fiery. Of course he might have calmed down due to the Subaru loss ( ... )

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