Those Forsaken Ch. 4

[leeayre]

Author: Leeayre
Title: Those Forsaken
Rating: T (chps 1-4), M (5+) ?
Genre: Angst/Horror
Characters: Subaru, Seishirou, Kamui, Fuuma
Summary: It all started when Subaru accidentally brought one home. Now Kamui and Subaru find themselves running for their lives, wrapped up in a fight neither could have foreseen.
Warnings: Vampirism, blood, physical

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PART 1

[jjblue1]

Don't worry, it's from me! And you deserved it, be sure of it! (it was just LJ was being difficult and refused to let me post it...)
Don't worry about not replying immediately. As you can see I'm slow at replying also.
After what you said (and what I found out nosying i your posts) I can't wait to read chap 7!
Well, apart from funny anime like 'Tokimeki Tonight', 'Kaibutsu-kun', 'Don Dracula' & 'Count Duckula' I guess the point of having a vampire in a story is often to have him hunt or be hunted. 'Interview with the vampire' dealed mostly with the drama of becoming a vampire also but still they had to hunt to live...

I was ready to bet (hum, no better not to bet with Seishiro around...) ... I was sure Seishiro had to be an idiot again. I guess lack of brain when it come down to 'not killing Hokuto' is part of his chara description.
Well, if they weren't hunting for Kamui and Subaru this let me think they were hunting from Seishiro... unless there's Fei Wang around and he's trying to get more servants? (or Setsuka having a jealous fit)
I thought who destroyed Fuma's village and who destroyed the twins' one were different people... but it seems they're the same? Or is there some common element between Fuma's village and the twins? Though the twins escaped and the village they escaped in was promptly destroyed so it's either a case of BIG BAD LUCK or a connection?
Readers tend to get curious so, what's not stricktly necessary to the pot, might still look very interesting to them. And I'm anxious to know more about Fuma!
So Fuma used his new powers to become a lord... interesting and good matching reference with X.
More than simplicity I think Seishiro wants to be left quiet. Not under everyone's eyes. But maybe that's because he was Sakurazukamori.
Yes, it would be good to explain in the st the powers you gave to your vampires. Since vampire stories tend to give them different powers and abilities it's hard to guess what a vampire can and can't do.