Comments | ladyjanelly: Fic: In One Easy Lesson 1/1 J3 (sorta)

ladyjanelly

Fic: In One Easy Lesson 1/1 J3 (sorta)

Mar 12, 2007 14:46

Title: In One Easy Lesson
Author: Ladyjanelly
Fandom: SPN RPS
Pairing: non-sexual Jared/Jeff (really, it makes sense), Jensen/Jared
Rating: NC-17
Warnings: BDSM-- 100% Safe, sane, concensual bondage, domination, submission, pain-play
Disclaimer: I don't know these guys, this never happened, it's just fiction,
Huge thank-you to
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rps, j2, spn, spn rps, jdm

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misskatieleigh March 12 2007, 20:25:02 UTC

Christ.

I think you just killed me. Just... wow.

ladyjanelly March 12 2007, 20:34:13 UTC

Thanks.

Can you think of a better descriptor for the Pairing line? Can't figure how to put it without giving too much away or misrepresenting the fic.

misskatieleigh March 12 2007, 22:03:17 UTC

hmmm.. I think it works like that, but I'll see if I can think of anything else.

misskatieleigh March 14 2007, 02:38:53 UTC

I recced this to crack_impala also sweetie! It was featured in today's edition.

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taniapretender March 12 2007, 20:32:59 UTC

SQUEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE

You have NO freaking idea how much I'm squeeing like now.

Like, you know, these over excited annoying little doggies ?

Yeah, just like that.

I LOVED Jeff in this ( he's such a badass/Hero... ) and I LOVED jensen and LOVED Jared ...And nnngh it was so HOT and so CUTE and...Well. Ok. How 'm I supposed to study now, hu ?

hugs ( and do write more of these, PLEASE. )
taniap'.

ladyjanelly March 12 2007, 20:38:15 UTC

Heee.

I'm thrilled you liked it. :)

so HOT and so CUTE

That was exactly what I was shooting for. Like kinky, but caring.

Dunno if I'll ever write a sequel. This was total insomnia fic, just a crazy bug I got while I couldn't sleep. I have no idea where they'd go from here.

taniapretender March 12 2007, 20:53:52 UTC

well, you sure know how to get busy while not sleeping.

(am supposed to work on the crossover tonight, but nnngh i'm so fucking tired.)

I just said it like that, ya know. This doesn't need a sequel, in fact I think it would be to much. When I ask for more, it's like "you should definitly write more porn". Of any kind.

ladyjanelly March 12 2007, 21:01:27 UTC

Heh. Oh.

I went through like a year or more where I wrote no porn at all. The boys just wouldn't fuck. It's so happy to have my groove back.

Glad the fic feels done though. I almost stopped it before the conversation about how it started with Jeff and Jared, (had it typed up and in a junk-file though) but Embroiderama's feedback was "I liked it, but how'd it start with Jeff, and how could Jeff just leave like that" and I realized it was needed.

I am so sorry I dropped the ball on beta-ing for you. I just...I think it was bigger than I was expecting and I was totally overwhelmed.

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ladyjanelly March 12 2007, 21:17:59 UTC

Heh. Glad I could be of service.

So you've been following the SPN boys? Or just because I wrote it?

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ladyjanelly March 12 2007, 21:41:32 UTC

Sweeeet. Jared's cool, but Jensen completely pushes my buttons, man.

I've been working on portraits in watercolor class. Have to post it if I get one i'm not ashamed of. But the point is, I've been studying Jensen's face in detail and my god, I think my IQ dropped some points from oxygen deprivation. Gotta remember to breathe.

I've been writing SPN fic, just haven't finished anything worth posting or something. I've got a recurring theme in AU fic that I just haven't been able to make into a coherent start-to-finish plot. Might do a "5 times Dean found Sam again" thing (except some of them are like 10,000 words).

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myownghost March 13 2007, 00:17:31 UTC

you write so well! this story is very involving. i like the dynamics of it.

ladyjanelly March 13 2007, 00:30:50 UTC

Heh. It's certainly nothing like the scar!verse or the piano-fic, is it.

Glad it worked for you. I wasnt sure what some of my regular readers would think of something so different.

I was trying for not-dark and a different expression of the same loving, caring sort of relationship though.

myownghost March 13 2007, 00:45:37 UTC

i've read enough of your writing to trust you, pretty much no matter where you want to the story to take me. your tone in this one is serious but not dark, and the love is evident. i like how carefully responsible jeff is for jared, too. his leaving jensen in charge is a bit poignant.

myownghost March 13 2007, 00:47:27 UTC

(please to let your eyes glide right over the extraneous 'to' in one of those sentences. *doing obi wan force-like oogly movements with my fingers*)

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This is going to be massive. becky_h March 13 2007, 01:46:45 UTC

Jeff looks at him like he’s measuring him, trying to see the truth of him. “Come in, have a seat. Don’t talk unless you can stay civil. If you need to leave, just get up and go; the three of us can talk about it tomorrow.”

I'm really liking Jeff. Before I met Jeff in the story I was afraid he was going to be a nasty evil bad sadist. I love that he's not. And his handling here is just perfect.

Jeff holds the door open and Jensen steps inside. Furniture’s been moved around, leaving Jared’s living room a big empty space with the couch along one side, chairs facing away on the other.

The set up here's good. I love that it's taking place in Jared's living space - It's *GREAT* possibly even genius. It's not an anonymous location - it's Jared's living space so it's (presumably) a safe one. But it's rearranged for what's happening here and shifted and changed. The focus is on Jared - the chair back's turned to him even changes the function of the room.

And Jared--Jared’s in the center of all that space. He’s naked, and Jensen' ( ... )

2 becky_h March 13 2007, 01:47:21 UTC

What’s your safe-word?” And that, Jeff directs only to Jared.

“Tristan.” Jared’s voice is surprisingly steady, for as tense as he looks.

“And if I gag you?”

Again, there’s no hesitation. “I’ll have the squeaker, and I squeeze it three times.”

I like a lot here, too. I really like Jeff - still. I like him for instructing Jensen more than I have words for - almost as much as talking to Jared rather than around him - and for excluding Jenses in this interaction. It's not one he should be part of.

“Collar’s the first thing on, after we set terms,” Jeff says, and Jensen thinks this is more for his benefit than either of theirs. “Last thing off. It defines when we’re playin’ and when we aren’t. When it’s on, it lets him know he’s free.”I hate collars in fic - This is honestly the first time I've seen one used in a way that makes me really love it. It's brilliant usage in a way that's not soppy romantic and annoying. It's just real and caring ( ... )

3 becky_h March 13 2007, 01:47:53 UTC

This almost made me squeal outloud. This is perfect. It's rhythmic touch, it's affirmation of Jared's strength - and it's worked in as casually and perfect as anything I think I've seen anywhere. It's amazing not just for what it's telling Jensen but what it's telling (and doing for) Jared, too.

Now that gets Jensen's attention. “Wait, what?

I had that response but it was another thing that makes me grin. Unexpected is always good, and I really didn't expect Jeff to be straight. It's wonderful.

Jeff shrugs. “He needs it. I like the power; even if it’s not sex, it’s still a rush.”

Good answer! I like that there's a BDSM relationship here without sex. A lot.

Jensen sees Jeff’s hand, there out of Jared’s sight, ready to steady him if his knees don’t hold, and it hasn’t even been that long.

Again with Jeff love. I want my own Jeff. A lot.

Jared squirms his ankle around in the shackle and looks over his shoulder. Jensen catches a glimpse of embarrassed smile. “Leg hair,” Jared says in an exaggerated whisper ( ... )

4 becky_h March 13 2007, 01:48:42 UTC

glances back at the two younger men and reaches for the handle.

One quibble here and it's not huge - but more than just the assurance of not letting someone he's not sure of fuck Jared there's the whole not leaving Jared alone tied up and high on endorphins with someone he's not sure of. That's pretty implicit but there's a lot of transfer of safety happening here and Jeff's putting a whole lot of trust in Jensen. If you're going to spell it out in the dialog I'd probably spell the whole thing out so the focus isn't all on the sex.

Jared whimpers again, eager and needy. Jensen thwaps his ass because, dude. Workin’ on it, okay?

This made me giggle a little too. I like that it's essentially bondage and a smack to this point. Jensen's new to this! I like that he's trying but not jumping right to something that could hurt Jared. It's good!

Jensen does it for him; it just feels right.This is the part where I like the instinctive. He's doing things because they feel right and they are right. What's more it's a nice sign that ( ... )

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