ANONYMOUS KPOP HET WRITING FEEDBACK MEME

[aoza]

ANONYMOUS KPOP HET WRITING FEEDBACK MEME

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[p_swizzle]

all of my fic is at pooswag (you can make fun of my comm name it's okay :P)

i would definitely like feedback on my strengths and weaknesses in my writing! also if you would comment on my characterization, writing style (or lack of one? i still feel like i don't have one) and dialogue, that would be very helpful.

♥

[p_swizzle]

I'll be using your most recent posts in your comm as basis for this crit so don't think of this as the end-all-be-all criticism for your writing. I haven't read everything you've written but from what I can gather from the ones I have you're very into the kind of disjointed style of writing that I find interesting and fun to read in moderate doses.

I really like that there seems to be a rhythm to your sentence construction. A beat that a reader can't help but follow once they start getting into the meat of things in one of your posts. It's great because that is one of the things that hooks a reader in, but sometimes you start a new beat midway and it kind of rattles the flow if the reader isn't careful enough to watch out for it.

You also tend to write kind of run-on(?) sentences. for example this line from tired mechanical heart: "he sleeps fitfully, wakes up and falls asleep and wakes up again, a restless cycle that continues until the morning sun shines through his heavy eyelids." ---> Now this? This is too long and redundant for

[p_swizzle]

thanks so much for leaving feedback! i really liked what you said about my sentence structure, and i'll try to avoid making my sentences so long (less commas!) in the future. also, about tenses: do i switch between them? how bad is it? i used to have a big problem with it but i'd like to think that it's gotten better... perhaps i missed something somewhere. i write in present tense in pretty much every fic except for "throw me in the deep end, watch me drown" where i switched between past and present tense to indicate time switch, so... anyway, thanks again! your advice really means a lot to me.

[p_swizzle]

judging from a very loose skim through some of your fics (so don't take this to mean for all of them because i didn't rea them all), i'd say you have a very disjointed, poetic style that has some really lovely imagery at times. your descriptions have a lot of depth and your ability to create worlds without actually explaining the world itself is extremely admirable

[p_swizzle]

thanks so much for leaving feedback! it really means a lot to me. i'll try to keep in mind your feedback on my run on sentences when i continue writing. hmmm i'm actually not quite sure why my /inspired/ fics often turn out better than my original fics but it could be because i have an atmosphere to aim for? i'm not sure if this makes any sense, but when i write i care about the feeling that it leaves and with the fics that are inspired by other writers i have a more distinct idea of what it should be. also pretty much all of my longer fics were inspired by something so that might be the case? anyway, thanks again for commenting on my writing! ♥

[p_swizzle]

I only read your longer and more recent fics to write this crit, so you can take what I say with a grain of salt because I probably don't know your writing all that well