ANONYMOUS KPOP HET WRITING FEEDBACK MEME

[aoza]

ANONYMOUS KPOP HET WRITING FEEDBACK MEME

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[anonymous]

I'll be using your most recent posts in your comm as basis for this crit so don't think of this as the end-all-be-all criticism for your writing. I haven't read everything you've written but from what I can gather from the ones I have you're very into the kind of disjointed style of writing that I find interesting and fun to read in moderate doses.

I really like that there seems to be a rhythm to your sentence construction. A beat that a reader can't help but follow once they start getting into the meat of things in one of your posts. It's great because that is one of the things that hooks a reader in, but sometimes you start a new beat midway and it kind of rattles the flow if the reader isn't careful enough to watch out for it.

You also tend to write kind of run-on(?) sentences. for example this line from tired mechanical heart: "he sleeps fitfully, wakes up and falls asleep and wakes up again, a restless cycle that continues until the morning sun shines through his heavy eyelids." ---> Now this? This is too long and redundant for me. Of course, my preference may be different from other readers and most especially yours but the moment you mentioned that your character is sleeping fitfully, I already understood what that meant. Of course, it might just be a case of incorrect punctuation that's bothering me... but you know what, to each his own! I know I tend to do this too but like the advice I've been given time and time again myself, I must tell you to keep an eye on not doing this too much every time.

Also, tenses! The bitch that keeps biting each and every writers' behind. I can't help you much with this aspect since I still suffer from it too.

And finally regarding writing styles or the lack of one, I advice that you just... keep writing until you find one that speaks and represents who you are. It doesn't happen overnight but I promise it'll come to you when you least expect and most need it. Good luck!

[p_swizzle]

thanks so much for leaving feedback! i really liked what you said about my sentence structure, and i'll try to avoid making my sentences so long (less commas!) in the future. also, about tenses: do i switch between them? how bad is it? i used to have a big problem with it but i'd like to think that it's gotten better... perhaps i missed something somewhere. i write in present tense in pretty much every fic except for "throw me in the deep end, watch me drown" where i switched between past and present tense to indicate time switch, so... anyway, thanks again! your advice really means a lot to me.