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Acts of Contrition (16b/20)

Nov 28, 2007 01:21

Yunho freezes for a moment, eyes wide with surprise, and then he's pushing back, gently, trying to put some distance between them. "What the hell do you think you're doing?" Is this how they moved in on Changmin, he wonders? Come to bed with us and we'll trust you?

Jaejoong sighs, darting in to rest his lip against a pale throat, speaking in ( Read more... )

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sarah_the_crab November 28 2007, 00:52:10 UTC

I SHOULDN'T BE READING THIS AT WORK!

♥

rawthorne November 28 2007, 19:24:12 UTC

You really shouldn't. XD

sharkbait_ha November 28 2007, 01:03:25 UTC

OH YES.
XD

sharkbait_ha November 29 2007, 00:56:43 UTC

lol, that was yesterday's comment. I actually managed to force myself to do work before reading all this. very long chapter. :) Very much enjoyed.

I really liked how you talked a bit more about Jae and Chun. But this chapter makes me question them a bit more. Their intentions seem a little fishy. I think that Jaejoong and Yoochun are a little too experienced...I mean, how many guys have they seduced before? o.o Has JaeChun smexed up every rebel in the base? OH GOD >.But then again, they are the mysterious rebels...so I guess I shouldn't question too much. I dunno ( ... )

rawthorne November 29 2007, 10:17:30 UTC

Thank you for taking the time to leave us such awesome feedback. And to hear you reread, we're very pleased. JaeChun is the pairing we're discovering the most in this fic. And because we only see so much of them through Changmin and Yunho's eyes, they aren't as developed as the others. The same, perhaps, holds true for Junsu ( ... )

luvmeanddespair November 28 2007, 01:15:26 UTC

This was a brilliant chapter. Yoochun and Yunho fighting and snarking.

And then Yunho and Jaejoong, the latter having fun being all sly and twisted.

And then porn. Mm. Yes, that was rather nice.

"Is this how you kiss him?"
"You'll have to be more specific. Jaejoong? Junsu? Changmin?" Getting an undeniable thrill out of reminding the man he's had both of his lovers.

Pwn'd. ♥

rawthorne November 28 2007, 19:21:33 UTC

Yoochun and Yunho have strong personalities. It was about time they had some one on one time.

;)

Thanks for the review, hon!

mcgrjc6 November 28 2007, 01:27:42 UTC

Again the pairings *Major SPAZ*

cruel_disorder November 28 2007, 01:30:42 UTC

Okay so I didn't have time to go back and reread chapter 15. But I'll jot down some thoughts anyway because whoa, chapter 15 and 16 ARE SO DIFFERENT. Ahem ( ... )

machine_of_july November 28 2007, 01:37:20 UTC

I just wanted to say I love how you comments are so detailed, well thought out and concise, and others (like my own ha!) are usually full of flailing and keysmashing XDDDDD

However reading you comments gives me another perspective on the fic or things I didn't think of before, so thankies you smart cookie ^o^

cruel_disorder November 28 2007, 01:53:45 UTC

You're welcome! =) I'm glad my long comments are actually helping people and not taking up space. I adore this fic mainly because it really makes me think about the people involved, and the world around them.

I think the the authors are really commendable in the way they are able to make each character truly a product of their time and environment. ♥ This is fantastic stuff~

cruel_disorder November 28 2007, 01:46:21 UTC

Chapter 16: HOT. O.O; I loved this chapter because up until this point we got bits and pieces of Jaejoong and Yoochun--as people, as rebels, as a relationship, but this time we're given a chance to really see what they're thinking. And even though, for me personally, they're not particularly likeable characters, I really admire the love they have for each other. I mean, it takes a lot of trust to be able to involve er 3 more guys in your relationship dynamic after all ( ... )

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