Inside-Outside
Summary:Remix of
tifaching's fic
Flashback. Sam POV. Written for the
Remix Challenge at
hoodie_time.
Spoilers: S4-ish
Warnings:Horror, slight gore, disturbing imagery, self harm, language.
Notes:Read the original first. This probably won't work without it.
Acknowledgments: Big thanks to
twirlycurls for her prompt and helpful beta, and to
hokuton_punch for her dead languages
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Didn't Eliot use the same Augustine quote?
It really reads like the perfect counterpart to tifaching's story. What the remix really fleshed out to me was just why Dean's so horrified by Sam stitching him up. How, seen from inside the perpetuating cycle of punishment the in-between is such a shock. I think what is so appealing (to me, that is) about this particular brand of fiction is the idea that Hell will change believes on a very fundamental level.
I also tremendously enjoyed how you conveyed the jumbled-up thought process (and I'm usually not the greatest fan of elliptical sentences), mixing the different Sams in the cursive parts.
I'm a little in love with the first paragraph, too. Just the rythm of the sentences. It is a reminiscence to Castiel's glass shattering, right?
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I really enjoyed the opportunity to explore the reasons behind Dean's freaking out. That yeah, he's not thinking about things in any way close to what Sam, or any normal human (at that time) might be thinking. At this point he's just too far gone to have that kind of thought process. Poor guy!
I'm usually not the greatest fan of elliptical sentencesI gather that there are those who dislike that style of writing...I started using it ages ago, though, and got pretty comfortable with it, so coming back to it here seemed like a natural direction to take. It's like the 1st person POV thing...it never occurs to me that it might be a ( ... )
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Well, I don't actively dislike fragmentary styles. It just sometimes throws me with unbidden thoughts of "wait, that's not a sentence!". I need to be in the mood for a more poetic or modern style and I'm really a bit of a binge-reader when online. With this stream-of-consciousness stuff its really not much of an issue.
Heh, maybe I was trying too hard to be literal with the shards. It would make sense chronologically.
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