Fic: Inside-Outside (Remix)

[honeylocusttree]

Inside-Outside

Summary:Remix of tifaching's fic Flashback. Sam POV. Written for the Remix Challenge at hoodie_time.
Spoilers: S4-ish
Warnings:Horror, slight gore, disturbing imagery, self harm, language.

Notes:Read the original first. This probably won't work without it.
Acknowledgments: Big thanks to twirlycurls for her prompt and helpful beta, and to hokuton_punch for her dead languages

Comments

[honeylocusttree]

Ahh, you noticed the Eliot connection, did you? Yeah, originally it was going to be the "Oh Lord, Thou pluckest me out" part, but then I went and pulled the whole book (online--love the internet!) and there were other parts in the paragraph that I liked a bit better. And I'd intended to use some kind of European non-English language quote anyway, so looking up the original was a natural outgrowth of that...

I really enjoyed the opportunity to explore the reasons behind Dean's freaking out. That yeah, he's not thinking about things in any way close to what Sam, or any normal human (at that time) might be thinking. At this point he's just too far gone to have that kind of thought process. Poor guy!

I'm usually not the greatest fan of elliptical sentences

I gather that there are those who dislike that style of writing...I started using it ages ago, though, and got pretty comfortable with it, so coming back to it here seemed like a natural direction to take. It's like the 1st person POV thing...it never occurs to me that it might be a problem until someone mentions it, but by then it's too late. XD Glad that in this case it wasn't a turn-off! Dean's definitely too confused to have a coherent thought so, I feel like it was the best possible option on this one.

I didn't think about Castiel at all while writing this, but as often happens, parallels and connections tend to crop up that I personally don't even notice. So that's certainly a possibility.

Thanks so much!

[salty_catfish]

Yay, obscure references in dead languages. (Never fails to amuse me. "Look at how much I've read!") Next time try something in Ancient Greek, or maybe Coptic ;).
Well, I don't actively dislike fragmentary styles. It just sometimes throws me with unbidden thoughts of "wait, that's not a sentence!". I need to be in the mood for a more poetic or modern style and I'm really a bit of a binge-reader when online. With this stream-of-consciousness stuff its really not much of an issue.
Heh, maybe I was trying too hard to be literal with the shards. It would make sense chronologically.

[honeylocusttree]

Nono, it's "Look how much I've researched." God knows I've never read anything in Latin. I actually was kind of expecting it to be in Greek, actually. Not knowing anything at all about Roman Catholic saints. I know no Coptic, but I used to know a little Egyptian. Very little. -_-;

[salty_catfish]

Never read anything in Latin! I've had it for *counts* ... six years in school. Man, that's a lot of Latin. I'm only familiar with the first few sentences of the Confessiones though. Heh, my hieroglyph reading ability is nil. I'd really like to be able to read cuneiform script.