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[araeph]

Araeph has many computer woes, it is true. They'll all go away in about a week, when she goes back to college, but for now, you're getting a golden oldie.

By the way, I have for you an alternate ending to the sordid tale of Skylar James.

TITLE: Disenchanted

CULPRIT: a real life fallen angel

BEST LINE: Mary, Mother of God! This is a burning

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[ringlass]

She opened it and saw that no one was blow deck.

That's just awesome.

[raistlinsshadow]

Haaaaaa, that was such a terrible fic... XP

I'm rather fond of the line "But with the rush Will was pushed over bored." myself as well as the ""Www...What am I doing her?" she manged to get out."...

[spacelogic]

Even thou Will spacelogic? I think this one's for you.

*blushes* Actually, my first thought was "et tu, Brute?"

Also, I want an extra flock. Think how handy it would be! If you lost your flock, you'd have a backup, so you'd never have to worry about being Bo-Peeped!

[miss_swoon]

*snort* Everyone "smiles weakly" about eleventy-nine times in this fic! Couldn't the author at least have made it a bit more fun to read by misspelling it smile WEEKLY or something?

"I know I was going to spend so much time away from you and I wanted you to know who I am. So this is for you, my thoughts from the past eight years."

I bet Jack's documented "thoughts" for the past eight years will turn out to consist mainly of "I miss my beautiful wife and daughter blah blah blah". No wonder he died when his head was filled with Sueage rather than brain matter!

She walked up to it and saw an empty bottle of rum and a vile that was labeled "Laudanum" that was almost empty.Oh look, Sue's mum committed Sue-icide. Muwahahha, not so much. And I think she means a VIAL. I was under the impression that the most common way for people, especially POOR people, to kick the bucket from under their own feet was by either hanging themselves or throwing themselves off a cliff or something. The suethor's inspiration for this suicide obviously came

[sunshine304]

Perhaps it's just me, but the mother using Laudanum to kill herself reminds me of "From Hell", in a very annoying way. First "Don Juan", now "From Hell"?! Leave Abberline alone, dammit! But perhaps it's really just me and I'm thinking a little bit too one-dimensional.^^ And you're right, I think it's really too much effort of the mother... hanging herself or jumping off a cliff would be much easier (and cheaper - did they have the money to buy Laudanum? Was ist even a poison back then? I always assumed it was used as medicine.)

And don't you also hate Jack's detailed journal of his boring, adventurous, exciting, dangerous piratical exploits? Luckily we don't have to read that but get this nicely done, absolutely in-character journal instead! It's such a heart-warming read, isn't it? *vomits*

[miss_swoon]

Perhaps it's just me, but the mother using Laudanum to kill herself reminds me of "From Hell", in a very annoying way. First "Don Juan", now "From Hell"?!

Oh yeah, nicely spotted, didn't think about that myself. Should have realised that suethors will go to any lengths to include oh-so-speshul references from other Johnny Depp movies in their fics. I'm sure it makes them feel very clever and well-read!

~miss swoon

[sunshine304]

I'm sure it makes them feel very clever and well-read!

Exactly. It just caught my eye, because the rest of the story just didn't sound as if she knew anything about Laudanum or the time at all. So, sensing Johnny Depp-references everywhere, it suddenly made sense to me: Perhaps she watched "From Hell"! And that made me think: Is she even old enough to be allowed to watch it? But then... they'll really do everything to show that they are really big fans of Johnny! (Not his work, mind you, but Johnny!!!1! Didn't he look sexy while taking Laudanum in the tub?*dreamy sigh*)

Annoying, it is. Just like calling Barbossa "Hector" all the time... so, why don't say mention Jack's syphilis sore while they're at all their "insider" references? Mhhh... *thinks about that some more*

On brands and tattoos

[phineus]

... Brands. Uhm, yeah... there's no "wincing" unless your nerves are entirely shot. It would not leave a pretty little burn mark, either - there would be seared flesh, extreme pain, and lots of fun blistering.

I do enjoy how there is absolutely no description of the tattooing process. I'm sure the author doesn't know at all herself (you use one of those little needle thingies teehee!).

Tattooing was not particularly common among the caucasian folk during the time period, but black was available rather than woad (the dark blue dye). Most of us have probably seen or heard of the South American or Samoan tribes that use the old methods of pointed sticks to tattoo; basically a small rake with pointed tines that is dipped in ink, then tapped with a mallet or heavy stick against the skin to pierce ink into the victim tattooee. A very long and painful excruciating process