Just wanted to say I have quickly read this, but I'm on my way out so I can't leave you a proper comment :( But I LOVED LOVE LOVED this like crazy amounts and will be back in the morning to ramble on about my adoration of Katie/Naomi in this chapter :)
Firstly I just have that I love how you write Katie. I’m sure I said this to you after the first chapter, but it really needs to be said again. You nail her character perfectly with what she says and how she reacts. Gah, I just love Katie so damn much♥
Katie and Naomi’s banter when they’re being kind of friendly=♥
Katie and Naomi’s banter when they’re arguing=♥
Emily is so lovely in this, that it does make me incredibly curious to see just how it all falls apart slowly? Or maybe explodes? Either way I’m very excited to see what’ll happen.
The next time she encountered Naomi, when she handed over custody of Emily after a shopping trip... - This literally made me lol irl. I can just imagine Katie begrudgingly passing Emily’s hand over to Naomi’s like they’re her divorced parents or something
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Ah man - not long and rambley at all! Thank you soooo much for your concise and detailed comments :) I'm definitely glad a few parts made you laugh - Katie makes me laugh so it's only right that some of that comes through here when possible!
There's something about the dynamic between the three of them where it works when they have their roles but, when one of them starts to change, the others have to change with them. So, by Emily forcing them all to get along, she's making Naomi and Katie change, and I'm not sure she's particularly going to like the consequences of this, later...
I don't think Katie and Naomi have ever been particularly brilliant at articulating how they feel, especially when they're just beginning to feel something, so, I agree! It'll be interesting to see what happens when they start to become aware.
Thanks again so much for your comments! And for reading :) And for liking Coheed ;)
it was brill!!! Loved the naomi katie relationship...where they're kind of stuck in limbo between being enemies and friends(well crushing on each other too) and don't really know how to act. The only thing thats making me sad is that Emily's lovely in this fic...and I'm not really getting a vibe that it's going to end well for her! cant wait for the next bit!
Obviously, because I'm demented and know where this is going, I love this. Hate Coheed and Cambria, but that's a really fitting choice.\o/
"...parts of her brain, the bits that knew how to do rational thinking, were left on the floor of the woods, stuck to a rock and decomposing slowly in the shadows."
Because I'm a sucker for visuals. :D Really do *love* the way you write.
You're a genius though. Should say this is one of my favorites.
Massive thanks. Sorry for the lack of whatever in this comment. You sorta fried my brain for a bit.
Haha, don't worry - everyone else I know hates Coheed. But it's suiting this fic, I think, so I'm okay with it :)
Glad you're still liking it - is it all still believable, like character wise? Tell me if not, as I have no-one to beta (or no beta? How do you say it? IDEK.) and I'll change any bits that need changing!
Don't worry this chapter fried my mind a bit too... In a totally 'I heart Katie' way, though.
Think it fits quite well, even though that guys voice makes me wanna kick him in the...:D
No, it's still completely believable. Cause really, Katie wouldn't be sensitive enough to have a clue what's going on emotionally. Naomi's still caught up in the 'Yay me. I love Emily and figured my shit out.' idea, so she shouldn't be totally aware either. Jesus, poor Emily though.
The pacing is still perfect, and its got just the right levels of description without getting boring or repetitive.
Yes, you did manage to extend the masochism this direction in a totally 'I heart Katie' way. Had my head a bit to muddled to make a proper comment.
(Think it'd be no beta. Make people into better nouns, yeah? :) I'd help, but I'm not completely sure what they do. Plus, nobody should trust my grammar skills.
Man, I'm already feeling so horrible for Emily but I can't stop reading. I love Naomi/Emily but I kindareally want to see Naomi/Katie together. Damn you for making me like Katie!
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Katie and Naomi’s banter when they’re being kind of friendly=♥
Katie and Naomi’s banter when they’re arguing=♥
Emily is so lovely in this, that it does make me incredibly curious to see just how it all falls apart slowly? Or maybe explodes? Either way I’m very excited to see what’ll happen.
The next time she encountered Naomi, when she handed over custody of Emily after a shopping trip... - This literally made me lol irl. I can just imagine Katie begrudgingly passing Emily’s hand over to Naomi’s like they’re her divorced parents or something ( ... )
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There's something about the dynamic between the three of them where it works when they have their roles but, when one of them starts to change, the others have to change with them. So, by Emily forcing them all to get along, she's making Naomi and Katie change, and I'm not sure she's particularly going to like the consequences of this, later...
I don't think Katie and Naomi have ever been particularly brilliant at articulating how they feel, especially when they're just beginning to feel something, so, I agree! It'll be interesting to see what happens when they start to become aware.
Thanks again so much for your comments! And for reading :) And for liking Coheed ;)
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it was brill!!! Loved the naomi katie relationship...where they're kind of stuck in limbo between being enemies and friends(well crushing on each other too) and don't really know how to act.
The only thing thats making me sad is that Emily's lovely in this fic...and I'm not really getting a vibe that it's going to end well for her!
cant wait for the next bit!
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Basically, Naomi and Katie haven't got a frickin clue about anything. But I definitely think they should drink more vodka. Always.
Thanks so much for reading and commenting!
Did I mention I love your icon, by the way? The Dude abides...
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"...parts of her brain, the bits that knew how to do rational thinking, were left on the floor of the woods, stuck to a rock and decomposing slowly in the shadows."
Because I'm a sucker for visuals. :D
Really do *love* the way you write.
You're a genius though. Should say this is one of my favorites.
Massive thanks.
Sorry for the lack of whatever in this comment. You sorta fried my brain for a bit.
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Glad you're still liking it - is it all still believable, like character wise? Tell me if not, as I have no-one to beta (or no beta? How do you say it? IDEK.) and I'll change any bits that need changing!
Don't worry this chapter fried my mind a bit too... In a totally 'I heart Katie' way, though.
Cheers dude!
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No, it's still completely believable. Cause really, Katie wouldn't be sensitive enough to have a clue what's going on emotionally. Naomi's still caught up in the 'Yay me. I love Emily and figured my shit out.' idea, so she shouldn't be totally aware either.
Jesus, poor Emily though.
The pacing is still perfect, and its got just the right levels of description without getting boring or repetitive.
Yes, you did manage to extend the masochism this direction in a totally 'I heart Katie' way.
Had my head a bit to muddled to make a proper comment.
(Think it'd be no beta. Make people into better nouns, yeah? :)
I'd help, but I'm not completely sure what they do. Plus, nobody should trust my grammar skills.
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Would she even care enough to keep attempting an apology after the initial try?
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I'm glad you like it - I'll try to be as gentle with Emily as possible. Well, kind of ;)
I like to think that Effy would like to try and fix things. Let's just see if Katie's going to let her...
Thanks for reading and commenting!
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I totally, madly love Naomi/Emily, don't get me wrong. It's just fun to see what else can could happen.
I'm glad you can't stop reading, though! Keep reading!
Thanks for commenting :)
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